Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar for verbs and nouns (e.g., "I enjoy taking photos of cityscapes and houses").

Ejemplo: I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially city scenes. For example, I often photograph historic houses and busy streets in London because the architecture and lighting are very attractive.

Sugerencia: Give a direct preference first, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and finish your sentences. Use correct comparative expressions (e.g., "I prefer urban areas because...").

Ejemplo: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the architecture and variety of scenes. For instance, my city has interesting buildings, cafés and parks that make it enjoyable to photograph and explore.

Sugerencia: State your preference clearly, give one or two specific reasons or examples, and avoid contradicting yourself. Use cohesive devices (however, for example) and correct phrasing (e.g., "there is less natural scenery where I live").

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often have more natural landscapes. For example, when I visited the countryside abroad I could photograph mountains and lakes, which are rare in my mostly urban hometown.

× Yes, I yes, I do a lot like take the risk pictures from this car kittens and a lot of like. Houses or like in cities that are super pretty.

✓ Yes, I do. I really like taking pictures from this car of streets and houses in cities that are super pretty.

The student attempted noun phrases and verbs incorrectly. 'Like take' should be 'like taking' (verb + -ing form). Also sentence fragments and unclear nouns ('risk pictures', 'kittens') appear; I replaced with 'streets' and clarified structure into two clauses. Use 'I do' as short answer then 'I really like taking pictures...'. Use gerund after 'like'. Suggestion: Use 'I like taking...' rather than 'I like take...'.

× I love taking pictures in London so much cause of W the city is gorgeous and everything else.

✓ I love taking pictures in London so much because the city is gorgeous and everything else is beautiful.

Informal 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech; fragment 'W' is an error. Also add a full clause after 'everything else'. Conjunction 'because' connects reason; ensure the following clause is complete.

× I can't decide between these two but I think umm I like urban areas more because I'm mostly surrounded by it earlier.

✓ I can't decide between the two, but I think I prefer urban areas because I'm mostly surrounded by them.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for 'urban areas' (plural); use 'them'. 'Earlier' is unnecessary and confusing here. Also 'these two' -> 'the two' is clearer.

× My city is like mostly urban but if I have to say with our hands it's much more gorgeous and I.

✓ My city is mostly urban, but if I had to choose, I would say rural areas are much more gorgeous.

Original sentence is fragmented and contains nonsensical phrase 'say with our hands'. Rewritten to convey likely intended contrast: choosing between urban and rural, with conditional phrasing 'if I had to choose' and correct comparative structure.

× I prefer, I prefer views in other countries, especially because they have more nature than than us, I think.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially because they have more natural scenery than we do, I think.

Doubling 'prefer' is redundant. 'More nature than than us' is ungrammatical: use 'more natural scenery than we do' or 'more nature than we have'. Maintain present tense 'prefer' and correct comparative structure.

× But I don't think that's true. But in my city specifically, there is not all of nature.

✓ But I'm not sure that's always true. In my city specifically, there isn't much natural scenery.

'There is not all of nature' is ungrammatical; use 'there isn't much natural scenery' or 'there isn't a lot of nature'. Also avoid starting consecutive sentences with 'But' twice; combine or vary connectors.

× It has to go to like to see and take pictures.

✓ You have to go out of the city to see nature and take pictures.

Original uses impersonal 'It has to go to like' which is incorrect. Use 'You have to go out of the city' or 'You have to travel to see nature'. Prepositions 'out of' or 'to' clarify movement away from the city.

× So yeah, it's really like disappointing, but yeah.

✓ So yeah, it's really disappointing.

Redundant fillers 'like' and repeated 'yeah' create informal and unclear speech. Simplify to a single concise sentence: 'it's really disappointing.'