Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent: give a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and add one specific reason or example. Use linking phrase to connect ideas. Aim for 2–3 sentences, e.g. state you enjoy photography, why, and what you do with photos.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views with my mobile phone because I love exploring new places and capturing memorable scenes. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and street scenes and then organize them in albums on my phone.

Sugerencia: Improve coherence and accuracy: start with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid repetition and mispronounced words (e.g., 'urban'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they are calm and peaceful. For example, village landscapes have open fields and fewer cars, so I can relax and take clearer photos without traffic noise.

Sugerencia: Be specific and organized: answer directly (I prefer my country's views) and support with two clear, specific examples. Avoid vague phrases and filler words; pronounce place names clearly. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful attractions. For example, the Noralia Canyon is stunning with dramatic cliffs, and the southern coast has long sandy beaches that attract both foreigners and locals.

× Yes, I yes, I like to take pictures of different views, uh, using my mobile phone because, uh, I like to visit new new places and take new photos uh, then I keep them as a uh.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different scenes using my mobile phone because I enjoy visiting new places and taking new photos, which I keep.

The original sentence has repetition, fillers, and an incomplete ending ('keep them as a uh'), causing sentence structure errors. Remove duplicated words and fillers, complete the thought, and join clauses with appropriate connectors. Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking, avoid filler words, and finish the idea (e.g., 'which I keep').

× Uh, I prefer rural areas because it's calm and very peaceful. Uh, liking, uh, village, village type, uh, in the open areas, many traffics and uh, many, uh, noisy. I don't like turban areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are calm and peaceful. I like village-type, open areas; there is less traffic and less noise. I don't like urban areas.

Multiple errors: 'it's' referring to plural 'rural areas' causes subject-verb disagreement and article issues; 'many traffics' and 'many noisy' are incorrect noun/adjective use; 'turban' is a spelling error for 'urban'. Use plural agreement ('they are'), uncountable noun 'traffic' not 'traffics', and correct adjectives ('less noise'). Also correct spelling 'urban'.

× I prefer, uh, my country views are very beautiful because, uh, many foreign, foreigners and, uh, local peoples go to the visit, uh, uh, my country, uh, when we think about, uh, Norelia candy is a very beautiful places. And also down South area has a very, uh, beautiful beach.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because they are very beautiful. Many foreigners and local people visit my country. For example, Norelia Candy is a very beautiful place, and the southern area also has a very beautiful beach.

Errors include mixed structures ('I prefer, my country views are...' is ungrammatical), plural/singular mismatches ('people' is plural not 'peoples'), incorrect article use ('a very beautiful places' should be 'a very beautiful place'), and awkward phrasing ('down South area'). Fix by splitting into clear sentences, using correct plural/singular forms, and correct article placement. Suggestion: express one idea per clause and ensure noun-number and article agreement.