Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases (e.g., “this notion instant in my mind”). Watch verb tenses and redundancy like “I do tend to…”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, my father taught me photography, so I often capture cityscapes and nature scenes to practice composition and lighting. Because of that, I take photos almost every week to improve my skills.

Sugerencia: Be accurate and avoid incorrect facts or long, unrelated explanations. Give a clear preference, a concise reason, and one specific example. Use linking words like “however” or “because” correctly and keep sentences short.

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because they show modern architecture and social change. For instance, I like photographing new bridges and high-rise buildings, as they contrast nicely with older monuments and tell a story about development.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid repeating phrases like “I do tend to”. Provide one clear reason and a specific local example, then briefly mention future interest in other countries. Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with their history and details. For example, I often photograph the Badshahi Mosque and Anarkali Bazaar in Lahore because their architecture and lively streets offer rich photo opportunities. However, I’m eager to photograph landmarks abroad in the future.

× I have this notion instant in my mind that art imitates life.

✓ I have this instant notion in my mind that art imitates life.

The word order is incorrect; 'instant notion' is the correct noun phrase. Reordering the words makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: place modifiers directly before the noun they modify (instant + notion).

× I do tend to take a lot of pictures of almost every other thing and it is what my father taught me as well as he was into photography as well.

✓ I tend to take a lot of pictures of almost everything, and this is what my father taught me because he was also into photography.

'Every other thing' is unnatural; use 'everything'. 'It is what my father taught me' is awkward; 'this is what my father taught me' is clearer. Also remove redundant 'as well' and replace with 'also'. Suggestion: use concise phrases and avoid repetition.

× So I do tend to take a lot of pictures of different views, yes.

✓ So I tend to take a lot of pictures of different views.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for simple present tense when not used for emphasis. Removing it makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: use 'do' for emphasis only.

× I believe both sides are incredibly beautiful and unique in their own way.

✓ I believe both are incredibly beautiful and unique in their own ways.

Use 'both are' for brevity and 'in their own ways' agrees with plural subject 'both'. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects have matching plural possessive expressions.

× But uh, I do like to take pictures of urban areas to show the advancements that our society has made over the past few years because Pakistan has just been established and it still hasn't crossed its 100 years yet, so it has made a lot of advancements.

✓ But I like to take pictures of urban areas to show the advancements our society has made over the past few years, because Pakistan was established relatively recently and has not yet reached 100 years, so it has made many advancements.

'Has just been established' is awkward for a country with nearly 100 years; use 'was established relatively recently'. 'It still hasn't crossed its 100 years yet' has redundancy ('still' and 'yet'); simplify to 'has not yet reached 100 years'. Use 'many advancements' instead of repeating 'a lot of advancements'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and choose appropriate tense for historical facts.

× I've never been to any other country so far so I do tend to enjoy views in my own country as there is a Badshahi mosque in my own city that I do tend to enjoy a lot and there's also Anarkali, the Old Street, Lahore and these are the views that I really tend to enjoy.

✓ I've never been to another country so far, so I enjoy views in my own country; for example, the Badshahi Mosque in my city, Anarkali and the Old Street in Lahore are views I really enjoy.

Use 'another country' instead of 'any other country' for clarity. Remove unnecessary repeated 'do tend to' and 'in my own' to improve fluency. Capitalize proper nouns (Badshahi Mosque, Anarkali, Old Street, Lahore). Break the long sentence into clearer parts and use semicolons or commas. Suggestion: avoid repetitive phrases and capitalize proper names.

× But I'm looking forward to using other countries as well.

✓ But I'm looking forward to visiting other countries as well.

'Using other countries' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb for experiencing countries is 'visiting'. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for actions with places (visit, travel to, explore).