Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid vague phrases like “create new neural pathways,” remove filler words (uh), and give one or two concise supporting details (what you photograph and why). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing skies and interesting architecture because they often show dramatic shapes and colors. For example, I like capturing sunsets when the light highlights building details, which makes the photos more striking.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, correct vocabulary, and remove hesitations. Say which you prefer, give clear reasons, and support with a specific example. Avoid unclear phrases (“architecture textual,” “Bachelor”) and limit to 2–4 sentences with linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and historic buildings. For example, I like framing old façades against modern towers to show the contrast between different architectural styles.

Sugerencia: Be careful with word choice and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (I prefer views in other countries), then give one precise reason and a short example. Use linking words like “because” and avoid small errors (e.g., “youth” → “views”). Keep responses concise and natural.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me see different architectural styles and cultural scenes. For example, I would love to photograph Japan’s temples and cherry blossoms because they offer unique colors and patterns not common in my country.

× I like taking pictures of different views as it allows me to create new neural pathways uh by exploring new opportunities.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they allow me to create new neural pathways by exploring new opportunities.

The original sentence uses 'it allows' which incorrectly refers to the plural noun 'pictures'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue tied to the referent; changing to 'they allow' matches the plural subject. Also replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity and remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun references agree in number with their noun and avoid fillers in formal speech.

× Also, I have always loved taking pictures of skies and architectural.

✓ Also, I have always loved taking pictures of skies and architecture.

The word 'architectural' is an adjective but the sentence needs a noun to parallel 'skies'. Use the noun 'architecture'. Suggestion: when listing items, ensure parallel word forms (noun with noun).

× I prefer views in urban areas as it allows me to take pictures of the skyscrapers and, and the architecture textual buildings that were, uh, built in a historical period.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they allow me to take pictures of skyscrapers and historical buildings that were built in earlier periods.

The sentence has several issues: 'it allows' incorrectly refers to plural 'views' (change to 'they allow'); 'the skyscrapers' can be plural without 'the' when speaking generally; 'architecture textual buildings' is incorrect word order and word choice — use 'historical buildings' or 'architectural buildings'; 'built in a historical period' is awkward, 'built in earlier periods' is clearer. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement, choose correct noun phrases, and maintain clear word order.

× Uh, I love to, I, I love taking picture of Bachelor.

✓ I love taking pictures of Bachelor.

The phrase 'taking picture' is singular but should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity. Also 'Bachelor' is unclear — if referring to a person or a TV show, ensure proper noun usage; if it is a degree, rephrase. Suggestion: use plural 'pictures' for habitual actions and clarify the object name.

× I prefer youth in another country as it allows me to explore the culture of a different country.

✓ I prefer youth in another country because it allows me to explore the culture of a different place.

'Youth' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'being' or 'staying' or 'traveling' in another country. Also 'it allows me' refers to an unclear subject. Replace with 'being in another country' or 'visiting another country' for clarity and correct pronoun reference. Suggestion: use the correct noun or gerund to express the intended action and ensure referents are clear.

× For example, Japan has beautiful buildings and cherry blossoms which I would love to explore.

✓ For example, Japan has beautiful buildings and cherry blossoms that I would love to see and explore.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'which' can be replaced by 'that' and adding 'see' clarifies the action with 'cherry blossoms'. This is a minor article/relative clause improvement and style suggestion. Suggestion: use 'see and explore' to express desire to observe and experience, and use appropriate relative pronoun for restrictive clauses.