Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words (uh, um), and provide one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like "because" to explain why sharing was important.

Ejemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. I grew up in a large family, so we often shared meals and opinions because cooperation helped us solve problems and maintain harmony.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence and reduce repetition. Use a linking word to connect idea and give a specific example to make it more vivid. Correct grammar (plural/singular agreement).

Ejemplo: I mainly like to share opinions and advice. For example, when a family member faces a problem, we discuss it together and suggest possible solutions so they can choose the best option.

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repeating words. Use clear vocabulary such as "private matters" or "personal secrets," and give one specific example briefly. Keep sentences varied and grammatical.

Ejemplo: Personal matters and family secrets are not suitable for sharing. For instance, if a friend confides about a private family problem, you should keep it confidential and not discuss it with others.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more specific and use concrete examples of what you shared and what you learned. Use past tense consistently and connect sentences with words like "so" or "therefore."

Ejemplo: Recently I shared how I overcame a period of low confidence with my friends. I explained the steps I took, such as setting small goals and practicing public speaking, so they could use the same strategies if needed.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct sentence naming the person, remove redundancy and fillers, and give a concise reason. Use correct phrasing such as "she has provided for me" instead of "been an provider."

Ejemplo: My mother would be the first person I tell because she has always provided for and supported me, so I want her to share in my happiness.

Sugerencia: Answer directly about the types of news you share and avoid mixing with earlier answer about mother. Give one clear example and use natural phrasing like "good news such as getting a job or achieving a goal."

Ejemplo: I usually share good news with my friends, such as getting a new job or passing an exam. For instance, when I recently received a job offer, I told my friends so they could celebrate my success with me.

× Yes, they did. And I grew up in a, a big and a huge family, uh, where everyone has the duty to, uh, to share their opinions and their meals with each other, uh, in order to be successful and, uh, happy in this life.

✓ Yes, they did. I grew up in a very large family where everyone had the duty to share their opinions and meals with each other in order to be successful and happy in life.

The original sentence has redundancy ('a big and a huge'), filler words ('uh'), and inconsistent tense ('has the duty' vs past context). Replace redundant adjectives with a single appropriate adjective, remove fillers, and use past tense 'had' to match 'I grew up'. Also streamline phrasing by removing unnecessary articles and 'this'. Suggestion: practice speaking concisely and keep verb tenses consistent.

× Whenever someone in the family is struggling to find out the solutions for their problems, he starts talking about it and everyone try to tries to find the the best solution.

✓ Whenever someone in the family is struggling to find solutions to their problems, they start talking about it and everyone tries to find the best solution.

Errors: 'find out the solutions' is awkward — use 'find solutions to'; pronoun agreement: 'someone' with singular 'he' then plural 'their' is inconsistent; use singular 'they' for gender-neutral singular and match verb forms. Also 'everyone try to tries' has incorrect verb form; 'everyone' requires singular verb 'tries'. Remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: use 'they' as singular neutral and ensure verbs agree with singular subjects.

× I think if we are talking about, uh, some private, uh, topics or ideas, uh, that happened in your life, you uh, don't have to share it with others, especially when they are secrets about your friends or your family members.

✓ I think if we are talking about private topics or ideas from your life, you don't have to share them with others, especially if they are secrets about your friends or family members.

Problems: filler words ('uh') should be removed. 'that happened in your life' is wordy — use 'from your life'. Pronoun agreement: 'topics or ideas' is plural, so use 'them' not 'it'. 'When they are secrets' better as 'if they are secrets'. Suggestion: delete fillers, match plural nouns with plural pronouns, and prefer concise phrasing.

× I went through difficult times where I had to improve my personality. Therefore, I share my experience with my friends in order to teach them and advise them how to deal with these things if they face it in their lives.

✓ I went through difficult times when I had to improve my personality. Therefore, I shared my experience with my friends to teach and advise them on how to deal with these things if they face them in their lives.

Inconsistency in tense: main clause is past ('I went', 'I had') so follow-up should be past ('shared') not present 'I share'. Also 'where' is better as 'when' with times. Pronoun agreement: 'face it' should be 'face them' to refer to 'these things'. Use 'teach and advise them on how to' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and match plural references.

× I think my mother would be the person, the first person I want to share the good news with her, And this is mainly because she has been an provider, uh, for the whole, uh, throughout my life.

✓ I think my mother would be the first person I want to share the good news with because she has been a provider throughout my life.

Errors: redundant phrasing 'the person, the first person ... with her' — drop repetition and final 'her' since 'with' already indicates object. Article error: 'an provider' should be 'a provider'. Remove fillers ('uh') and extra words ('the whole, throughout'). Capitalization: 'And' mid-sentence should be lowercase. Suggestion: avoid repetition of the same idea, use correct indefinite article before consonant sounds, and remove fillers.

× So I, I believe she deserves to be happy hearing good news from me.

✓ So I believe she deserves to be happy to hear good news from me.

Awkward verb pattern 'deserves to be happy hearing' — better 'deserves to be happy to hear'. Remove repeated 'I'. Suggestion: use infinitive 'to hear' after 'deserves to be happy' for correct structure and avoid word repetition.

× I share a good news mainly with my friends. For example, if I get a job, uh, the first person I would tell about it, uh, is my mother. And then my friends because, umm, they become happy hearing uh, uh, I was successful in a certain thing in my life.

✓ I mainly share good news with my friends. For example, if I get a job, the first person I would tell is my mother, and then my friends because they become happy to hear that I was successful in something in my life.

Errors: 'a good news' — 'news' is uncountable so omit 'a'. Move 'mainly' to natural position. Remove fillers. 'Happy hearing I was successful in a certain thing' is awkward; use 'happy to hear that I was successful in something.' Suggestion: remember uncountable nouns like 'news' take no article, place adverbs naturally, and use clear subordinate clause 'that I was successful'.