Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 반복과 망설임이 많습니다. 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장(예: 'Yes, ...')을 분명히 하고, 과거 시제와 구체적 세부정보(어떤 광고였는지, 어떤 가수가 나왔는지, 왜 인상적이었는지)를 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 연결어(so, because)를 사용해 이유를 명확히 하고, 문장 수를 3문장 이내로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes. The most memorable advertisement from my childhood was a mobile phone commercial in Korea featuring a popular female singer. It stood out because of its catchy song and colorful visuals, which children enjoyed and still remember.

Sugerencia: 응답은 직접적이지만 불완전한 문장으로 끝나며 구체성이 부족합니다. 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 예시나 빈도(예: often, many)와 구체적 내용(어떤 종류의 광고인지)으로 뒷받침하세요. 문장을 연결할 때 because, for example, such as 등을 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. For example, recently there have been posters and digital ads about APEC and local events, which are usually placed near doors and on carriage walls.

Sugerencia: 답변에 생각은 있으나 표현이 어색하고 문장이 완결되지 않았습니다. 상황에 따라 다르다는 점을 먼저 말한 뒤, 각각의 상황을 비교하며 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(when, but, because)를 정확히 사용하고 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: It depends. I dislike ads on YouTube because they interrupt videos, but I don't mind advertisements on public transport since they can be informative or entertaining while I wait.

Sugerencia: 중복 표현과 망설임이 많고 문장이 불완전합니다. 선호를 분명히 밝히고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: catchy jingle makes me remember the product). 연결어와 적절한 어휘를 사용해 자연스러운 문장을 구성하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements with a catchy jingle because the music makes the ad memorable and enjoyable, so I'm more likely to remember the product later.

Sugerencia: 응답은 이해되지만 어휘 선택과 문장 구조가 어색합니다. 'always' 대신 'often' 등 적절한 빈도 부사를 사용하고, 예시 사이트명을 정확히 말하세요. 또한 광고의 형태(팝업, banner, video)를 덧붙이면 더 구체적입니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see ads when I'm on my phone or computer, especially on websites and apps like Naver and YouTube. They appear as banner ads, pop-ups, and pre-roll videos before content.

× Back then in Korea, when I was a child, there is the most impressive advertisement is about mobile phone.

✓ Back then in Korea, when I was a child, the most impressive advertisement was about a mobile phone.

The sentence mixes present 'is' with past context 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'was' and the structure should not include both 'there is' and 'is'. Also add the article 'a' before 'mobile phone' because it is countable. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense and a single main verb: 'the most impressive advertisement was about a mobile phone.'

× That time, at that time, uh, in Korea, the singer, uh, the female.

✓ At that time in Korea, it featured a female singer.

Original is a fragmented sentence without a main verb or clear subject. Convert to a full sentence with subject and verb: 'it featured a female singer.' Remove redundant phrases 'that time, at that time' and filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Make a complete clause with a clear subject and verb.

× Yes, I can see a number of advertising on train or other transportation these days.

✓ Yes, I can see a number of advertisements on trains and other transportation these days.

'A number of' requires plural countable noun 'advertisements'. 'Train' should be plural or preceded by an article; 'on trains and other transportation' is more natural. Use 'and' rather than 'or' to indicate multiple media. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for countable items and match prepositions: 'on trains and other transportation.'

× There are always some advertisements about APEC, which is.

✓ There are always some advertisements about APEC.

The clause 'which is' is incomplete and unnecessary. Remove it. 'About APEC' correctly uses the preposition 'about' for topic. Suggestion: Avoid unfinished relative clauses; complete or remove them.

× This depends on on the situation.

✓ This depends on the situation.

Double 'on' is a repetition error. Present tense 'depends' is fine. Remove the duplicated preposition. Suggestion: Proofread for duplicated words.

× When I watching YouTube I dislike the advertisement but in trains or public transportation I would like to watch some advertisement because sometimes it.

✓ When I'm watching YouTube, I dislike advertisements, but on trains or public transportation I like to look at some advertisements because sometimes they are interesting.

'When I watching' needs auxiliary 'am' plus '-ing' (present continuous). 'the advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general statement. 'In trains' -> 'on trains' or 'on public transportation.' Sentence ended with fragment 'because sometimes it.' Complete thought using 'they are interesting.' Suggestion: Use correct progressive form 'I'm watching' and ensure agreement and complete clauses.

× Uh, I like some advertisement with some catch music because there's some catch music, uh, makes the in advertisement impressive and sometimes it. Makes me enjoy.

✓ I like advertisements with catchy music because catchy music makes the advertisement impressive and sometimes it makes me enjoy it.

'Catch music' is incorrect; use adjective 'catchy'. Use plural 'advertisements' for general preference. Remove fillers 'uh'. 'Makes the in advertisement impressive' has word order errors; correct to 'makes the advertisement impressive.' Finish the sentence 'it makes me enjoy it.' Suggestion: Use correct adjective 'catchy' and proper word order, and complete the final clause.

× Yes, I think I always see some advertisement even when I searched some information on the website.

✓ Yes, I think I always see some advertisements even when I search for information on websites.

Mixes present 'always see' with past 'searched'. Use present 'search' for habitual action. 'Some advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' and 'search for information' is the correct collocation. 'Website' plural 'websites' fits general statement. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habitual actions and use correct collocations.

× It does many advertisements on the website like such as Neighbor and YouTube.

✓ There are many advertisements on websites such as Naver and YouTube.

'It does many advertisements' is ungrammatical; use 'There are many advertisements.' 'Like such as' is redundant; use 'such as'. 'Neighbor' likely refers to 'Naver' (Korean portal). Use plural 'websites.' Suggestion: Use 'There are' for existence and 'such as' for examples, and correct proper nouns.