Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms and possessive phrases, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details linked with a reason.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I especially like jasmine because of its pure, elegant scent, though I also enjoy roses and lilies for their colours and shapes.

提案: Give a clear, coherent response with correct grammar and specifics. Use linking words to explain who likes flowers and why, and correct vocabulary (e.g. “requires” → “prefers”, “ladies” incorrect). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. My mother loves flowers because we have a garden at our family home. She prefers roses and lilies and enjoys tending to them every weekend.

提案: Provide a direct, grammatical answer and specific details. State whether there are many flowers, then contrast clearly if needed. Use linking words like ‘but’ or ‘however’ and complete your reason or comparison.

例: Not many flowers grow in my neighbourhood. However, there are lots of trees along the sidewalks, so people tend to plant fewer flowering plants in front of their houses.

提案: Make sentences complete and fluent. Give a concise topic sentence, then explain the conditions when you take photos using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms.

例: Sometimes I take photos of flowers when the weather is sunny and the light is good. On many overcast days I don't take pictures because the colours don’t look as vibrant.

提案: Answer directly and give clear cultural details with correct vocabulary. Use linking words to compare traditions and explain reasons. Replace unclear words like “particle give” with correct phrases such as “gifts” or “food items.”

例: No, sending flowers is not very common. People usually give food or practical gifts on special occasions instead of bouquets, so flowers are mostly for weddings or funerals.

× Yes I do. I love Rose, Lily and sunflower, but what I favorite is Jasmine.

✓ Yes, I do. I love roses, lilies and sunflowers, but my favorite is jasmine.

Plural nouns 'rose, lily, sunflower' should be 'roses, lilies, sunflowers' when speaking generally. Use lowercase for common nouns like 'jasmine'. 'What I favorite is' is ungrammatical; use 'my favorite is' to show possession.

× I like Jasmine's pure and elegant scents.

✓ I like jasmine's pure and elegant scent.

Use the singular uncountable noun 'scent' when referring to fragrance in general. Maintain lowercase for common noun 'jasmine'. The possessive form 'jasmine's' is acceptable here.

× Yes my mom loves flowers too because we have a garden in our family house and she required they has be rose and ladies in the garden and she can't.

✓ Yes, my mom loves flowers too because we have a garden at our family house, but she requires roses and lilies in the garden and can't always take care of them.

The original sentence has multiple problems: missing commas, wrong preposition 'in' vs 'at', incorrect verb 'required' should be 'requires' (third person singular), plural nouns 'roses' and 'lilies', and incorrect clause 'they has be' which is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'can't always take care of them' to convey inability. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× Honestly, it's really to sing flowers here in my neighborhood.

✓ Honestly, it's really hard to find flowers in my neighborhood.

The phrase 'to sing flowers' is incorrect and likely a wrong verb; use 'find' to mean encounter, and 'hard' as adjective to describe difficulty. Maintain infinitive structure 'to find' after 'really' with appropriate adjective.

× But you do contrast. There are so many trees on the sidewalk, I think because.

✓ In contrast, there are so many trees on the sidewalk, I think that's why.

'But you do contrast' is ungrammatical; use 'In contrast' or 'On the other hand' to introduce contrast. The fragment 'I think because' is incomplete; replace with 'I think that's why' to link cause and effect.

× Sometimes because when the weather and the. Sunlight is perfect.

✓ Sometimes, when the weather and sunlight are perfect,

Sentence is a fragment and has punctuation errors. 'Weather and sunlight are perfect' requires plural verb 'are' for compound subject. Remove stray period and complete the sentence contextually with following clause.

× I would definitely take a picture but on the other hand so many days does doesn't.

✓ I would definitely take a picture, but on many days I don't.

'does doesn't' is incorrect. Use 'I don't' to negate. 'On the other hand' is unnecessary; use 'on many days' for frequency. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper negation.

× Not common, I think only on the special occasion because people here are. Prefer to send food or particle give as a greeting.

✓ Not common; I think only on special occasions because people here prefer to send food or practical gifts as greetings.

Fix sentence fragments and article use: 'on special occasions' plural is natural, remove 'the'. 'People here are. Prefer' is split; combine into one clause. 'Particle give' is likely 'practical gifts'. Use plural 'gifts' and 'greetings' for idiomatic phrasing.