Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give concise supporting details. Avoid vague references (e.g. “XML”) unless explained. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot. For example, in high school I wrote essays and practice papers when preparing for competitions, and recently I have written technical notes for projects. These activities help me organise my thoughts and improve my writing skills.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence saying what you like to write, then explain reasons with specific details. Avoid unclear words and grammatical errors. Use a linking word like “because” or “so” to connect reason and effect.

例: I like writing about sports because I find it exciting to describe matches and players. For instance, writing match reports and player profiles lets me share interesting moments and practise using descriptive language, which keeps my writing lively.

提案: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason. Explain what would change and why, using specific examples. Avoid fillers and rhetorical questions that confuse the message.

例: Yes, I think my writing will change as I gain experience. For example, after studying more and getting feedback, my vocabulary and structure will become more accurate and my ideas more organised.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons connected with examples. Use linking words like “because” and keep sentences concise and grammatical.

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me think more clearly and generate ideas faster. For example, when I take notes by hand I often sketch diagrams and jot quick ideas, which improves my creativity.

提案: Give a clear frequency and expand with a brief explanation of your routine or purpose. Use correct phrasing for frequency (e.g. “twice a week”) and one supporting detail.

例: I write in my diary twice a week. I usually do it on weekends to reflect on the week and plan my goals for the next few days.

提案: Rephrase to say which methods you use (apps, photos, notes) and give a specific example of how you use one method. Avoid tense and grammar errors and include a linking word for clarity.

例: Besides diaries, I use my phone to take photos and a notes app to record ideas. For example, I take morning voice notes when I wake up to capture ideas and later organise them into my diary.

× Yes, I do. I often write a lot when I prepare competition in high school or XML.

✓ Yes, I do. I often wrote a lot when I was preparing for competitions in high school or doing XML projects.

The student refers to past activities (preparing in high school), so present tense 'write' is incorrect. Use past tense 'wrote' and past continuous 'was preparing' to match time frame. Also add 'for' before 'competitions' and pluralize 'competition' to 'competitions' for correctness. Suggestion: Identify time reference and match verb tense accordingly.

× I am really into wise about sports because it helped me a funny and more interesting and a lot of ideas.

✓ I am really into writing about sports because it helped me have fun, be more interested, and come up with many ideas.

'Wise' is the wrong word; likely intended 'writing'. 'A funny' is incorrect; use 'have fun' or 'be funny'. The sentence mixes tenses; 'helped' (past) is acceptable if referring to past benefit but verb forms after 'helped me' should be base forms ('have fun', 'come up with'). Also replace 'a lot of ideas' with 'many ideas'. Suggestion: choose correct noun/verb (writing), use parallel structure after 'helped me', and correct quantifier.

× Yes, I do. I think I can. Why change? Uh, Because, uh, it's very easy with me.

✓ Yes, I think I can change. Why change? Because it's very easy for me.

The original is unclear and mixes modal 'can' without an explicit verb. Use 'can change' to show future/ability. 'With me' is unnatural; use 'for me'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: include the action after modality and use natural preposition 'for'.

× I prefer handwriting when I work twice because it help me a lot of time and a lot of ideas.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it helps me save time and generate many ideas.

'When I work twice' is unclear; removed to match meaning. 'Help' should be 'helps' for third person singular (subject 'handwriting'). 'A lot of time' is vague; use 'save time'. 'A lot of ideas' -> 'many ideas'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use precise quantifiers.

× I keep right here twice a week.

✓ I write in it here twice a week.

The response to 'How often do you keep diaries?' needs a clear verb. 'Keep right here' is incorrect. Use 'write in it here' or 'keep it here' depending on meaning. Also provide frequency 'twice a week'. Suggestion: use appropriate verb ('write' or 'keep') and indicate the object ('it').

× I often prepare an ideas and process when I would rise.

✓ I often prepare ideas and processes when I wake up.

'An ideas' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'an' and pluralize 'process' to 'processes' if meant. 'Would rise' is incorrect for 'wake up'—use present simple 'wake up' for habitual actions. Suggestion: match article to noun number and use correct verb for waking up.