Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清楚，但有重复、语法和流畅性问题。应减少赘词，句子不超过5句，使用连接词使陈述更连贯，并给出更具体的例子或频率（例如多久使用一次、最常做的菜）。注意冠词和复数形式（a cake, some pastries），以及避免填充词如“uh”。

例: My favourite machine at home is the oven. I use it mainly to bake bread, cakes and pastries, and I also use it to reheat cold dishes. For example, I often bake a loaf of bread every weekend and warm leftovers for dinner. It’s versatile and saves me a lot of time.

提案: 内容有观点但表达不够自然，语法和词汇使用有误。应先给出简洁主题句，然后用一两句具体理由支持，使用恰当词汇（do the laundry, vacuum the floor, replace manual labour）。避免绝对化措辞，改用更自然的连接词如“because”或“since”。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. They save time and physical effort, especially for people who are tired after work. For instance, using a washing machine means you can do other tasks while the laundry is running. Overall, these machines improve daily efficiency.

提案: 回答意思明确但语法混乱、用词不当且有许多填充词。建议用一到两句陈述习惯，再举例说明如何阅读说明书（e.g., step by step, safety sections）。注意动词形式和搭配（avoid mistakes, save time, read instructions carefully）。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new machine. To avoid mistakes and save time, I follow the steps carefully and pay special attention to the safety and maintenance sections. For example, when I bought a blender I read the manual to learn the correct settings and cleaning tips.

提案: 观点明确但表达有语法和词序错误。建议先给出简洁肯定句，然后列出具体好处，使用连接词（for example, such as）并纠正词汇（read instructions carefully, how long it will last, best way to operate）。控制在最多4句内。

例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is important. It helps you understand how to operate the machine, how to maintain it and how long it might last. For example, the manual often explains proper cleaning and recommended usage to extend the machine’s lifespan.

× I like the oven most. I can use it to bake bread, cake and some pastry and and besides this I can also use it to warm cold dishes, make it, uh, hot to eat again.

✓ I like the oven most. I can use it to bake bread, cakes and pastries, and I can also use it to warm cold dishes, making them hot to eat again.

句中需使用现在分词或复数形式： 1) “cake and some pastry” 应该用复数形式“cakes and pastries”，因为列举多种食物时通常用复数。属于复数问题（Grammar Problem Type 1）和名词形式问题；但按列表中可归为现在分词/名词形式调整。 2) “make it, uh, hot to eat again.” 在连贯表达中应使用现在分词短语“making them hot to eat again”来说明用途，且代词要与前文复数“dishes”一致，用“them”。 改进建议：注意列举可数名词时使用复数，并用现在分词构成状语短语连接用途，代词要与先行词数一致。

× I do think so on doing laundries or sweeping floor. Sweeping the floor is quite exhausting to people who are just off the work, so I think if the machine can replace the person laboring it is a best choice.

✓ I do think so for doing laundry or sweeping the floor. Sweeping the floor is quite exhausting for people who have just finished work, so I think if a machine can replace a person doing that labor, it is the best choice.

句子结构与词类使用错误： 1) “on doing laundries” 应为介词短语“for doing laundry”或直接用动名词“doing laundry”；“laundry”通常不可数。属于介词使用/可数名词问题（Grammar Problem Type 11 和 1）。 2) “sweeping floor” 需加定冠词或不定冠词：“sweeping the floor”。（Grammar Problem Type 17/22） 3) “people who are just off the work” 不地道，应为“people who have just finished work”。时态与表达需要完成时态来表示“刚下班”。（Grammar Problem Type 6） 4) “replace the person laboring it is a best choice” 语序和冠词错误，改为“if a machine can replace a person doing that labor, it is the best choice”。（Grammar Problem Type 26 与 17） 改进建议：注意常用搭配（do laundry）、名词可数性、正确使用介词和冠词，以及更自然的完成时短语来表达“刚刚做完某事”。将复杂句分为更清晰的从句以避免语序混乱。

× Yes, I do. I'm a outsider of operating, umm, machines. So to avoid this unnecessary mistakes and saving my time, I would uh, read the instruction step by step in the really intent and intentively.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm inexperienced in operating machines. So to avoid these unnecessary mistakes and save time, I would read the instructions step by step, really intently.

代词、名词单复数和形容词/副词使用错误： 1) “a outsider of operating, umm, machines” 用法不对，应说“inexperienced in operating machines”或“I am an outsider to operating machines”。（Grammar Problem Type 12） 2) “this unnecessary mistakes” 应为复数“these unnecessary mistakes”，且代词要与名词数一致。（Grammar Problem Type 1 和 12） 3) “saving my time” 在并列时应使用动词原形“save time”与前面不定式保持一致。（Grammar Problem Type 6/8） 4) “read the instruction” 多数情况用复数“instructions”。（Grammar Problem Type 22） 5) “in the really intent and intentively” 语法和词形错误，应为“really intently”或“with real intent”中的一种，使用副词“intently”。（Grammar Problem Type 13） 改进建议：注意代词与名词数的一致性，使用自然表达“inexperienced in...”，并用正确的副词形式修饰动词；并保持不定式或并列结构的一致形式。

× Yes, I just think so. By reading instruction intensively it could help you understand the machine better. Like how to operate it what how long can this machine lasted and by which ways you can operate it the best.

✓ Yes, I think so. Reading the instructions carefully can help you understand the machine better, such as how to operate it, how long the machine can last, and the best ways to operate it.

句子结构和时态错误： 1) “By reading instruction intensively it could help you...” 主语和从句不清晰，改为“Reading the instructions carefully can help you...”。（Grammar Problem Type 26 和 6） 2) “reading instruction” 应用复数“instructions”。（Grammar Problem Type 22） 3) 列举部分 “Like how to operate it what how long can this machine lasted and by which ways you can operate it the best.” 语序和时态错误： - 改为并列结构“such as how to operate it, how long the machine can last, and the best ways to operate it.”（Grammar Problem Type 25/6/26） - “lasted” 为过去式/过去分词，需用现在时“can last”。（Grammar Problem Type 5/7/9） 改进建议：用现在时或情态动词表达机器性能（e.g., “can last”），保持并列结构的一致性，使用复数“instructions”，并用连接词（such as）引出例子，使句子更清晰自然。