Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "enjoy" once). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I love singing — I’ve enjoyed it since childhood. For example, my family often sings together during car rides, which is one of my happiest memories and helped me build confidence.

提案: Provide a clearer, more fluent response with correct tense and more precise details. Use a topic sentence then one or two specific points (duration, what you learned). Avoid awkward phrasing like "I have an experience" and "for four times."

例: Yes, I took singing lessons in my second year of senior high for about a month. During the lessons I worked on breath control and pitch, and I also learned basic techniques for helping others improve.

提案: Be concise and natural: start with a direct reply and give one clear reason plus a linking word. Use correct plural/singular forms and idiomatic expressions (e.g., "in front of an audience").

例: I prefer to sing for family and close friends because I get nervous performing in front of an audience. Singing privately makes me feel more relaxed and confident.

提案: Give a direct answer then support it with one specific reason and an example. Use correct subject-verb agreement and choose simpler, accurate phrases (e.g., "has the power to").

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because melody and lyrics can lift moods and relieve stress. For instance, listening to an upbeat song often boosts my energy after a long day.

× Yes, I really like singing since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have really liked singing since I was a child.

Use present perfect for an action or state that began in the past and continues to the present. 'Since I was a child' requires present perfect ('have liked') not simple present ('like'). Suggestion: Use 'have/has' + past participle for ongoing states that started in the past.

× I really enjoy the singing time with my family on my daddy's car.

✓ I really enjoy singing with my family in my daddy's car.

Use 'in' for being inside a car, not 'on'. Also 'the singing time' is unnatural; use the gerund 'singing' to describe the activity. Suggestion: Use 'in a car' and simple gerund phrases (enjoy singing with...).

× Yes, I have an experience.

✓ Yes, I have experience.

When speaking generally about having experience, English often omits the article: 'have experience' rather than 'have an experience' which implies a single event. Suggestion: Use 'have experience' or 'have an experience of' with a specific context.

× When I was a Senior High School student in my second year, I joined a singing lesson for four times to learn how to sing well and teach other well.

✓ When I was a senior high school student in my second year, I attended four singing lessons to learn how to sing well and teach others properly.

Use 'attended' or 'took' for lessons; 'for four times' is unidiomatic — use 'four lessons' or 'four times'. 'Teach other well' has plural and adverb problems: 'others' is needed and 'properly' or 'well' after the verb is more natural. Also capitalization: 'senior high school' not all capitals. Suggestion: Use 'attended four lessons' and 'teach others properly'.

× To be honest, I am afraid of standing in front of the stage and singing into the audience, so I prefer to sing in private with my family or my friend because it will make me less nervous.

✓ To be honest, I am afraid of standing on a stage and singing to an audience, so I prefer to sing privately with my family or my friends because it makes me less nervous.

Use 'on a stage' or 'on stage' not 'in front of the stage'. Preposition with audience is 'sing to an audience'. 'In private' is fine but 'privately' is more natural here. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' if contrast with family or use 'a friend'. Verb 'will make' should be simple present 'makes' for general truth. Suggestion: Use 'on stage', 'sing to an audience', and match singular/plural pronouns (a friend vs friends).

× Yes, I think the melody and lyrics is a magic power for people to improve their energy and release their stress.

✓ Yes, I think the melody and lyrics are a magical power for people to increase their energy and relieve their stress.

Subject 'the melody and lyrics' is compound and requires plural verb 'are', not 'is'. 'Magic power' is better expressed as 'a magical power'. 'Improve their energy' is awkward; 'increase their energy' or 'boost their energy' is more natural. 'Release their stress' should be 'relieve their stress'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with compound subjects and use collocations like 'boost energy' and 'relieve stress'.

× So I think music is a very good relaxation.

✓ So I think music is very relaxing.

'Relaxation' is a noun; the sentence needs an adjective describing music. 'Relaxing' (an adjective/participle) correctly describes the effect of music. 'Very good relaxation' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'relaxing' or 'a good way to relax' depending on intended meaning.