List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and make your idea clear with one topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers and hesitations. Use linking words (for example, because, so, recently) correctly and check tense and article usage.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because I often forget items. For example, recently I went to the grocery store and forgot to buy peanut butter, which was frustrating, so now I check my list before I leave.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence that answers both parts, then give one specific example of how lists help you. Avoid pauses and incomplete sentences; use plurals and articles correctly (e.g., feedback not feedbacks).

例: Yes, I make work lists and they are very effective. For instance, I track tasks as 'done' or 'pending', and my manager often praises me because the lists help the team meet deadlines.

提案: Answer directly with one clear reason and one supporting reason using linking words; avoid unclear phrases and awkward expressions. Do not use irrelevant comments about 'forgetting skills'—use plain English (e.g., "they remember things").

例: Some people dislike lists because they remember things easily and think lists are unnecessary. Also, they may feel annoyed if someone suggests making a list for them, so they prefer to manage tasks in their own way.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your current preference, then add one or two specific reasons with smooth linking words. Reduce fillers and slightly refine vocabulary (e.g., 'handy' and 'cost-effective').

例: I prefer making lists on my phone now. Since I learned to use apps, digital lists are more convenient, cost-effective, and easier to edit than paper ones.

× I make a list of things which I need to buy in at my nearest grocery store because I'm prone to forget such things and even recently when I bought a grocery, things I left out of peanut butter. So I was little frustrated with my UH.

✓ I make a list of things that I need to buy at my nearest grocery store because I'm prone to forgetting such things. Recently, when I bought groceries, I left out the peanut butter, so I was a little frustrated with myself.

Errors: 'which' used instead of 'that' for restrictive clause (acceptable but 'that' clearer), 'in at' incorrect preposition combination, 'prone to forget' should use the gerund after 'prone to' (prone to forgetting), 'a grocery' should be plural or 'a grocery store' (countable noun), 'things I left out of peanut butter' is ungrammatical order and missing article, 'little frustrated with my UH' likely meant 'a little frustrated with myself' and 'UH' is filler. Suggestions: use 'prone to' + gerund, choose correct prepositions ('at' not 'in at'), use plural 'groceries' for items, place object and article correctly ('the peanut butter'), and use correct reflexive pronoun 'myself'.

× Yes, I often make a list of work which are done and which are not yet done.

✓ Yes, I often make a list of work that is done and that is not yet done.

Error: 'work' is uncountable or treated as singular, so the verb should be 'is' rather than 'are'. Also 'which' can be replaced by 'that' for restrictive clauses. Suggestion: use singular verb with uncountable noun ('work is') or change to 'tasks which are' if counting items.

× Even my manager uh used to give feedbacks and sometimes she even appreciates me for creating such things at my workplace and whenever there is a new.

✓ Even my manager used to give feedback and sometimes she even appreciates me for creating such lists at my workplace whenever there is a new task.

Errors: 'feedbacks' is incorrect — 'feedback' is uncountable and should not be pluralized; 'such things' is vague — 'such lists' or 'such items' is clearer; sentence ends incomplete 'whenever there is a new' — needs noun like 'task' or 'item'. Suggestion: use uncountable form 'feedback', be specific with nouns, and complete clauses with appropriate nouns.

× Because they are not a type of person who forgets things.

✓ Because they are not the type of person who forgets things.

Error: article use with 'type' — should be 'the type of person' rather than 'a type of person' when referring to a specific group. Also 'they are not the type of person' matches singular 'person' conceptually but 'they' as plural is acceptable; better: 'they are not the type of people who forget things' or keep singular with 'the type of person'. Suggestion: choose consistent number: 'they are not the type of people who forget things'.

× And if we try to tell these things to the people, then they might get a little frustrated or even they get mad or annoyed with your response.

✓ And if we try to tell them, they might get a little frustrated or even annoyed by our response.

Errors: redundant 'to the people' and awkward 'they get mad or annoyed with your response' mixed person references. Use consistent pronouns: 'them' and 'our response' or 'their response' depending on meaning. 'Get annoyed by' or 'annoyed with' are appropriate. Suggestion: simplify: 'if we tell them, they might get frustrated or annoyed by our response.'

× So I often, uh, prefer, uh, the people with the forgetting skills to provide list.

✓ So I often prefer that people who forget things provide the list.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'people with the forgetting skills', incorrect article and noun 'provide list' missing article and marker. Suggestion: use clear relative clause 'people who forget things' and verb pattern 'prefer that someone do something' or 'prefer someone to provide a list'. Example: 'I prefer people who forget things to provide the list.'

× When I was a child I used to prefer uh writing on paper, but now after uh having hands on experience with the technological things or apps, I prefer uh to write in phone because it's handy, cost effective and sometimes easy as well.

✓ When I was a child, I used to prefer writing on paper, but now, after having hands-on experience with technology and apps, I prefer to write on my phone because it's handy, cost-effective, and often easier.

Errors: 'prefer uh writing' extra filler; 'having hands on experience' needs hyphens 'hands-on', 'technological things' awkward — use 'technology', 'write in phone' incorrect preposition — use 'on my phone', 'cost effective' should be hyphenated 'cost-effective', 'sometimes easy as well' better as 'often easier'. Suggestions: remove fillers, use correct prepositions, hyphenate compound adjectives, and choose concise vocabulary.