List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and word choice; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Correct collocations (e.g., “write down essentials”, “impulse buys”). Use linking phrase for coherence.

例: Yes, I usually write down the essentials before going to the supermarket. For example, I note items I’m low on like milk and rice so I don’t make impulse buys, and this helps me stick to my budget.

提案: Fix grammatical errors and unclear phrases; start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific supporting details about how lists help (prioritization, deadlines, checking off tasks). Use linking words like “because” or “so”.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list for work because it helps me prioritise tasks and meet deadlines. For instance, I number tasks by importance and tick them off as I finish, which gives me a clear sense of progress.

提案: This answer is quite good but reduce repetition and add one brief example to be more specific. Use a linking word like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas.

例: I think some people find lists tedious or too restrictive because they prefer spontaneity. For example, creative people or those with good memories may rely on mental notes rather than writing things down.

提案: Correct grammar and unclear fragments; give a clear preference and two specific reasons (portability, syncing, reminders). Use linking words like “because” and “for example”.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it’s always with me and I can sync lists across devices. For example, I set reminders for urgent items and share lists with family members when needed.

× To be honest, yes, I also I always talk down the essentials before heading to the supermarket.

✓ To be honest, yes, I always write down the essentials before heading to the supermarket.

The original contains incorrect verb choice 'talk down' and a duplicated 'I'. 'Write down' is the correct verb for making a list. Remove the extra 'I' to fix sentence structure and subject redundancy. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch duplicated words and ensure verbs match the action described.

× It's a great way to avoid inputs, buy in and make sure I stay within my budget.

✓ It's a great way to avoid impulse purchases and make sure I stay within my budget.

'Inputs' and 'buy in' are incorrect collocations here. The intended meaning is avoiding unplanned purchases, correctly expressed as 'impulse purchases'. Also combine actions logically: 'avoid impulse purchases and make sure...'. Suggestion: choose common collocations for shopping contexts (e.g., 'impulse purchases').

× Definitely I rely on to the Lakes to prioritize my workload.

✓ Definitely I rely on lists to prioritize my workload.

'Lakes' is a mis-typed word for 'lists' and the phrase 'rely on to the lists' is ungrammatical. Use 'rely on lists' or 'I rely on a list' for correct verb-preposition-object order. Suggestion: check for typos that change words into other valid but wrong words.

× Taking tax cut the lease at the end of the day gives me a real sense of accomplishment and case may organize.

✓ Taking tasks off the list at the end of the day gives me a real sense of accomplishment and helps me feel more organized.

This sentence has multiple errors: 'Taking tax cut the lease' appears to be corrupted—correct phrase is 'Taking tasks off the list'. 'Case may organize' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'helps me feel more organized'. Use correct noun 'tasks', correct phrasal verb 'take off the list', and a proper verb phrase 'helps me feel more organized'. Suggestion: Reconstruct garbled sentences to restore logical meaning and proper verb forms.

× I reckon some find it a bit tedious or too restrictive.

✓ I reckon some find it a bit tedious or too restrictive.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written; no change needed. It uses present simple 'find' appropriately to describe general opinions. Suggestion: none.

× They may prefer to be spontaneous or simply have a sharp enough memory to keep mental notes without writing writing things down.

✓ They may prefer to be spontaneous or simply have a sharp enough memory to keep mental notes without writing things down.

The error is a duplicated word 'writing writing'. Remove the repeated word to correct the sentence. Suggestion: proofread to remove accidental repetition.

× I lean towards uses my phone is incredibly handy thing.

✓ I lean towards using my phone; it is incredibly handy.

Original mixes structures: 'lean towards uses' is wrong. Use gerund 'using' after 'lean towards'. Split into two clauses for clarity: 'it is incredibly handy.' Suggestion: after 'lean towards' use a noun or gerund (e.g., 'using my phone').

× I always have it on me and I can easily sense my legs across different divide devices or set notifications for deck lights.

✓ I always have it on me and I can easily sync my lists across different devices or set notifications for deadlines.

The original contains many incorrect words: 'sense my legs', 'divide devices', 'deck lights' are likely misrecognitions. The intended meaning is 'sync my lists across different devices' and 'set notifications for deadlines' (or 'calendar alerts'). Use 'sync' and 'across' correctly; replace garbled nouns with appropriate terms. Suggestion: clarify intended actions and choose accurate vocabulary like 'sync', 'lists', 'devices', 'notifications', 'deadlines'.