List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Work on grammatical accuracy, tense consistency and natural phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., use ‘I make’ not ‘I'm making’ or ‘I'm shop’).

例: I usually make a shopping list so I don't forget what I need. For groceries I write down quantities and brands, and if I misplace the paper list I keep a copy on my phone, so I always have it with me.

提案: Improve clarity and sentence structure. Start with a direct answer about current practice, then explain past behaviour with a linking word (e.g., ‘when I first started’). Fix tense and word order (e.g., ‘when I first started I used to make lists’). Keep sentences short and avoid filler words and repetition.

例: When I first started at my job, I made daily lists to remember routines and patient details. However, after a few months I became familiar with the tasks, so now I only use lists for unusual or complex duties.

提案: Focus on fluency and coherence by using clear linking phrases and reducing hesitations. Provide one or two specific reasons with correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘preference’, ‘rely on memory’). Avoid filler sounds and repeated words. Use plural/singular forms correctly.

例: Some people simply prefer not to make lists because they rely on their memory or have established routines. For instance, experienced workers often remember tasks without writing anything down, so a list seems unnecessary to them.

提案: Answer directly and use comparative language to explain preference, with simple linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘but’, ‘however’). Correct phrasing (e.g., ‘I prefer to use my phone because…’) and remove hesitations. Keep it to two to three sentences.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always carry it and can update the list easily. However, I sometimes write a paper list as a backup in case my phone runs out of battery.

× Yes, I'm making a list when I'm shop so I don't forget the specific details I'm supposed to buy, especially if I go to the grocery store.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I go shopping so I don't forget the specific items I need to buy, especially when I go to the grocery store.

The student mixed continuous and simple present incorrectly. Habitual actions use simple present ('I make a list', 'I go shopping'). 'I'm shop' is ungrammatical; use 'I go shopping'. 'Specific details I'm supposed to buy' is awkward; use 'specific items I need to buy'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and common verbs for clarity.

× But if I forget the actual list in my hand, I normally had a copy in my phone so I make sure I had it all the time.

✓ But if I forget the actual list in my hand, I normally have a copy on my phone so I can make sure I have it all the time.

The sentence uses past tense verbs ('had') where present tense is required for habitual present actions. Use 'have' and 'can' to express present habitual ability. Also use 'on my phone' rather than 'in my phone'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual statements and use correct preposition 'on'.

× When I was barely knew at my current workplace I normally make at least so I can remember the daily routine as well as the specific details of the person I'm taking care for.

✓ When I was new at my current workplace I normally made a list so I could remember the daily routine as well as the specific details of the person I was taking care of.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms: 'was barely knew' is wrong; use 'was new' or 'barely knew my job'. For past habitual actions use past tense ('made', 'could', 'was taking care of'). Also use 'taking care of' rather than 'taking care for'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when describing past habits and correct verb phrases.

× But at times goes on I finally know there are routine habits so I I normally don't do any of this at all.

✓ But as time went on I learned the routines, so I normally don't do any of that anymore.

The phrase 'at times goes on' is ungrammatical; use 'as time went on'. Tense should be past ('learned'). 'There are routine habits' is awkward; use 'the routines'. 'I I' is a duplication. 'Don't do any of this at all' should match time reference: 'don't do any of that anymore.' Suggestion: use common temporal expressions ('as time went on') and keep pronouns/phrases concise.

× I think some people have their own preference.

✓ I think some people have their own preferences.

'Preference' should be plural when referring to different people having different choices. Use 'preferences' to match plural subject 'some people'. Suggestion: match singular/plural nouns to referents.

× They don't like making Lee so, so that, umm, it's not a hindrance or what they're supposed to do.

✓ They don't like making lists because it feels like a hindrance or it isn't what they're supposed to do.

'Making Lee' is an error (likely 'lists'). The sentence structure is fragmented and contains fillers. Use 'because' to show reason and restructure: 'it feels like a hindrance' or 'it isn't what they're supposed to do.' Suggestion: remove fillers and choose clear causal connectors.

× I know, umm, different, uh, person has different routines.

✓ I know different people have different routines.

'Different, person' is ungrammatical; use plural 'people' to match 'different routines.' Avoid unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: use plural noun for general statements about multiple individuals.

× Some people they can able to memorize the, the routine they they are supposed to do and they don't need the, the lead, the actual list of the specific act.

✓ Some people are able to memorize the routines they are supposed to do and they don't need the actual list of specific actions.

The original has redundant pronouns ('Some people they'), incorrect modal construction ('can able' — use 'are able to' or 'can'), duplicated words ('the, the', 'they they'), and awkward nouns ('lead' instead of 'list', 'specific act' instead of 'specific actions'). Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct modal or 'be able to', and choose accurate nouns.

× And it's not prepared to make a list on my phone because my phone is.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I can bring it with me anywhere I go.

The original is ungrammatical: 'it's not prepared' is wrong; likely intended 'I'm prepared' or 'I prefer'. 'Because my phone is.' is incomplete. Also use 'anywhere I go' instead of 'anytime I go'. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'prefer' and complete the reason clause.

× I can bring it with me anytime I go, I just need to put it in my pocket.

✓ I can bring it with me whenever I go; I just need to put it in my pocket.

Use 'whenever' rather than 'anytime' for natural phrasing in this context; maintain simple present for habitual ability. Also separate clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: use appropriate connective and punctuation to join related clauses.

× But I'm making this also in a paper is a good option.

✓ But making a paper list is also a good option.

Use noun phrase 'making a paper list' instead of 'I'm making this also in a paper'. Keep tense consistent (general preference uses simple present). Suggestion: rephrase to concise noun phrase when stating general preferences.

× So just in case you forget your phone, at least you have your secondary list that you can able to check into.

✓ So just in case you forget your phone, at least you have a backup list that you can check.

'You can able to' incorrectly combines modal 'can' with 'able to'; use one ('can check' or 'are able to check'). 'Secondary list' is awkward; 'backup list' is more natural. 'Check into' is wrong; use 'check' or 'refer to.' Suggestion: avoid combining 'can' and 'able to' and choose idiomatic nouns and verbs.