Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two brief supporting reasons. Avoid filler words and repetition (e.g., "uh", "I'm sorry for that"). Use correct verb forms and prepositions: say "I don't go to the library" and "I used to go often when I was a child."

例: No, I don't go to the library often now. I work long hours, so I usually read books on my tablet at home instead. When I was a child, however, I visited the local library every week to borrow storybooks.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence describing typical activities, then offer specific examples with linking words. Correct common errors: say "I usually read" not "I do in library." Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "encyclopedias," "reference books") and avoid vague phrases like "a lot of things."

例: In the library I usually read novels and non-fiction books. For example, I often read history books to learn new facts, and sometimes I use encyclopedias or online databases to research topics for work or study.

提案: Answer directly with correct past tense and clearer structure. Use a topic sentence in past form ("Yes, I went to the library often as a child") and then explain why with specific details. Avoid repetitive wording and incorrect grammar ("goes", "was go").

例: Yes, I went to the library often when I was a child because visiting libraries is popular in my town. Children could borrow books for a few weeks, and my family would take turns choosing new books when we returned them.

提案: Be cautious when generalizing about groups. Give a balanced, specific answer with linking words and correct phrasing. Start with your opinion ("I think many do"), then give a brief reason or example and avoid vague or awkward expressions ("deep education," "big research").

例: I think many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially in cities where schools encourage reading. For instance, local libraries often run reading programs and children borrow books for school projects and personal interests.

× Unfortunately no, I don't go off into library because now I'm more than 30 and I'm sorry for that but I don't have enough time for for reading books.

✓ Unfortunately, no. I don't go to the library because I'm over 30 and I don't have enough time to read books.

Incorrect prepositions 'go off into library' should be 'go to the library'. 'More than 30' is awkward when stating age; 'over 30' is natural. 'Enough time for for reading books' has extra 'for' and wrong verb form; use 'time to read books'. Improve by using correct preposition 'to', removing duplicate words, and using infinitive 'to read'.

× So uh, when I was a child, yes I was go the library often, but now no.

✓ So, when I was a child, I used to go to the library often, but not now.

The phrase 'I was go' is ungrammatical. Use 'used to' to describe habitual actions in the past. Also add 'to' after 'go' and simplify 'but now no' to 'but not now'.

× Usually I do in library uh, reading some interested interesting books and find a new facts and maybe search for some encyclopedia.

✓ Usually in the library I read interesting books, find new facts, and sometimes look things up in an encyclopedia.

'Do in library' is incorrect; use 'in the library' and appropriate verbs. 'Reading some interested interesting books' should be 'read interesting books'. 'Find a new facts' has number mismatch and article error; use 'find new facts'. 'Search for some encyclopedia' is awkward; use 'look things up in an encyclopedia' or 'search an encyclopedia'.

× So there are a lot of things to do.

✓ There are many things to do.

Although 'a lot of' is acceptable in speech, 'many' is more formal and concise. No major grammatical error; this is an improvement suggestion to match clearer English.

× Yeah, I goes to library whenever, whenever a kid because in my country it's so popular.

✓ Yeah, I went to the library a lot when I was a kid because it's very popular in my country.

'I goes' is incorrect form; past tense 'went' is required for past habitual action. Also add articles 'the library' and rephrase 'whenever a kid' to 'when I was a kid'. Use 'very popular' instead of 'so popular' for clarity.

× When your child go to library, take some book and after that you will change it for another one when you bring it back.

✓ When a child goes to the library, they borrow a book and then exchange it for another one when they bring it back.

Multiple errors: 'your child go' needs subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun; use 'a child goes' or 'your child goes'. 'Go to library' needs article 'the library'. 'Take some book' should be 'borrow a book' or 'take a book' with article. 'Change it for another one' is unnatural; use 'exchange it for another one'. Also use consistent pronouns 'they' for general statements.

× So yeah, I was go often.

✓ So yeah, I went often.

'I was go' is ungrammatical; use simple past 'I went' for past frequent actions.

× Umm, I think so, because I saw in some newspaper the Chinese kids are so smart and they prefer to make a deep education and make a big research.

✓ Umm, I think so, because I read in a newspaper that Chinese children are very studious and they prefer to pursue in-depth education and conduct significant research.

Tense and phrasing issues: 'I saw in some newspaper the Chinese kids are' is awkward; use 'I read in a newspaper that'. 'Kids' is informal; 'children' is better. 'Make a deep education' and 'make a big research' are unidiomatic; use 'pursue in-depth education' and 'conduct significant research'. Ensure verbs fit noun choices.

× So uh yeah, I think so. The Chinese people, Chinese kids are going to library often.

✓ So, yeah, I think so. Chinese people, especially children, often go to the library.

'Are going to library often' is present continuous but general habitual action needs simple present 'go'. Also add the article 'the' where necessary and reorder for natural English: 'often go to the library' or 'often go to libraries'.