Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., tense, articles, plural forms).

例: Yes. My school had many strict rules about discipline. For example, students who were late were not allowed to enter class, and teachers enforced a uniform policy. Because of this, I often felt stressed but I also learned to be punctual.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words (because, for example, so) correctly and keep sentences grammatical. Avoid vague phrases like “addicted to the rule.”

例: Yes, I think more rules can help. Because clear rules teach habits like punctuality and responsibility; for example, following school rules made it easier for me to adjust to similar rules at my office later on.

提案: Give one concise topic sentence, then add specific details about how the teacher was dedicated. Correct grammar (pronouns, verb forms) and avoid irrelevant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher when I was a child. Her name was Ms. Williams and she always gave me extra encouragement and feedback, which improved my confidence and motivation in class.

提案: Answer clearly and give one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., “adapted to rules,” “convenient,” “favour”). Use examples concisely.

例: I prefer more rules at school because they help students develop good habits. For example, being used to school rules made it easier for me to follow workplace regulations when I studied abroad.

提案: Be specific about what made the teacher strict and how it affected you. Use clear sentences and correct tense and pronouns. Avoid repeating filler words and keep to two or three sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher who punished every rule-breaking and focused heavily on grades. Because of her strictness I often felt stressed and less motivated to participate in class.

提案: Give a direct answer and one or two clear reasons. Use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary (e.g., “exhausting,” “challenging,” “students don’t always understand”). Avoid fillers and contradictory words.

例: No, I would not want to teach in a rule-free school. Teaching is an exhausting and challenging job, and without rules classroom management would be difficult because some students might not follow instructions.

× Yes, I remember my school time, it like I was in that school which have a lot of numerous rules and moreover such as discipline and our teacher was very strict and when we do not follow the rules for example, so we cannot enter to the to the school.

✓ Yes, I remember my school days; it felt like I was at a school that had many rules about discipline, and our teachers were very strict. If we did not follow the rules, for example, we were not allowed to enter the school.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (26). It combines clauses incorrectly, uses wrong verb forms (have -> had), wrong noun forms (school time -> school days), and unclear connectors. Suggestion: split into clearer sentences, use past tense consistently for past events, and replace informal phrases (it like) with appropriate verbs (it felt like). Use 'teachers' plural to match context and 'were not allowed' for passive meaning."},{

× Yes, definitely student would be benefit more because they are likely about the rule when some people are addicted to the rule so they might it is beneficial for when they work in office.

✓ Yes, definitely students would benefit more because they learn about rules; when some people are used to rules, it can be beneficial when they work in an office.

This sentence shows singular/plural mismatch (1) and awkward wording. 'Student' should be plural 'students' to match general meaning. 'Would be benefit' is incorrect verb form; use 'would benefit' or 'would be more benefited'. Also simplify phrasing: 'are likely about the rule' is unclear — use 'learn about rules' or 'get used to rules'.

× For example when I work in office so the schools and my office rules were same.

✓ For example, when I worked in an office, the school's rules and my office's rules were the same.

This sentence requires past tense/past participle consistency (9). 'Work' should be past 'worked' to match 'were'. Also possessive forms improve clarity: 'school's rules' and 'office's rules'. Maintain consistent tense for past events.

× So yeah it give me a lot of benefits because I was addicted to the rules.

✓ So yeah, it gave me a lot of benefits because I had become accustomed to the rules.

The verb 'give' is incorrect for past context; use past 'gave' (10). Also 'was addicted to the rules' is awkward; use 'had become accustomed to the rules' or 'was used to the rules'. Ensure tense consistency.

× Yes I remember my child when I was going to school I had a dedicated teacher.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child and went to school; I had a dedicated teacher.

This is a sentence structure error (26): 'my child when I was going to school' is incorrect. Use 'when I was a child' and separate clauses with commas or semicolons for clarity.

× I I really miss her.

✓ I really miss her.

Duplicate pronoun 'I I' is a pronoun/typing error (12). Remove the extra 'I'.

× Her name is William and she give a lot of encouragement and also her encourage words give me hope.

✓ Her name is William and she gave me a lot of encouragement; her encouraging words gave me hope.

Pronoun and tense errors (12). 'She give' should be past 'she gave' to match past context. 'Encourage words' is incorrect; use adjective form 'encouraging words'. Maintain past tense consistency: 'gave me hope'.

× I prefer to have more rules at school because when you are adopted with rules, so it might be easy and inconvenient in many ways, like for example when you are when you are studying abroad and it have a lot of rules such as in companies and working.

✓ I prefer to have more rules at school because when you are accustomed to rules, it can make some things easier, especially when you study abroad or work in companies that have many rules.

Multiple preposition and collocation errors (11). 'Adopted with rules' should be 'accustomed to rules'. 'It have' should be 'they have' or 'there are'. Remove redundant 'when you are'. Use 'study abroad' not 'studying abroad' in this construction. Improve coherence and prepositional phrases.

× So yeah, I'm favour of rules at school.

✓ So yeah, I'm in favour of rules at school.

Missing preposition 'in' (this is preposition but listed as 2 third person? However core error: missing 'in'). The phrase 'I'm favour' is incorrect — use 'I'm in favour' (2/11). Ensure correct idiomatic expression.

× Yes, I remember I had a really strict teacher in my school and I was like I was really exhausted and when I because of that she's very boring and also she's very annoyed and she said that you will follow rules in also an academic performance so.

✓ Yes, I remember I had a really strict teacher at school and I was really exhausted because of her; she was very strict and often annoyed, and she said that we had to follow the rules and perform well academically.

This sentence has mixed tense issues (5). Use past tense throughout for past memories: 'had', 'was', 'was very strict', 'she said that we had to follow'. Replace 'you will follow rules' with past obligation 'we had to follow the rules'. Clarify 'boring' vs 'strict' and remove filler words.

× No, to be honest, I don't like to work at a teacher or rule free in school because of that.

✓ No, to be honest, I wouldn't like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school.

Modal verb/phrase misuse (4). 'I don't like to work at a teacher' is incorrect; use 'work as a teacher'. For hypothetical preference, 'I wouldn't like' or 'I would not want' is more appropriate. Hyphenate 'rule-free' as a compound adjective.

× I don't like teaching. Teaching is such a exhausted job and yeah, children, sometimes children not understand.

✓ I don't like teaching. Teaching is such an exhausting job, and sometimes children do not understand.

Wrong adjective form (13). 'Exhausted' describes people, while 'exhausting' describes a job. Also missing auxiliary 'do' in 'children do not understand'. Use article 'an' before 'exhausting job'.

× So it might be difficult and challenging, umm and convenient for me and I cannot stand for however.

✓ So it might be difficult and challenging for me, and I could not stand it.

This is a sentence structure and word choice error (26). 'Convenient' contradicts intended meaning; likely 'inconvenient' was intended. 'I cannot stand for however' is ungrammatical — use 'I could not stand it' or 'I could not tolerate it'. Ensure concise clear ending.