Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct word choice mistakes, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Avoid irrelevant time phrases unless necessary and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like “for example” or “for instance” when giving examples.

例: Yes. When I was a student about 40 years ago, the school had strict appearance rules. For example, students had to keep hair very short and skirts at a specific length. Now those rules seem outdated to me.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer, then give specific reasons and one short example. Use linking words such as “because” and “for instance” to connect ideas. Fix minor grammar (e.g., “make a judgement” → “use their judgement”).

例: Not really. I think too many strict rules can discourage independent thinking because students will always follow instructions rather than solve problems. For instance, when rules dictate every step, pupils miss opportunities to make decisions.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Explain briefly why with a clear supporting detail and correct grammar. Use linking words like “so” or “therefore.” Keep sentences short and natural.

例: No, I haven't. I tended to be very independent, so I rarely asked teachers for help and preferred to solve problems myself. Therefore I didn't notice exceptionally dedicated teaching.

提案: Give a concise direct answer, then one or two specific reasons. Remove redundant phrases and correct awkward wording (e.g., “made it point” → “made it a point”). Use linking words like “because” and “so.”

例: I prefer fewer rules because I am independent and responsible. For example, I would rather be trusted to manage my time than follow rigid schedules.

提案: Answer directly and give a short specific example of her strictness to make the answer more vivid. Correct phrasing such as “nobody should cross her” → “no one crossed her” and avoid unnecessary cultural references unless relevant.

例: Yes, one of my high school teachers was very strict. No one dared to challenge her rules — for instance, she punished lateness immediately and enforced silent study periods.

提案: Provide a clear, polite answer and give concrete reasons. Avoid slang (“wanna”) and fix unclear phrases. Use 2–3 coherent sentences: one topic sentence and one reason with an example.

例: No, I would not. Being a teacher without any rules would be difficult because maintaining discipline and supporting learning require clear guidelines; for example, without rules, lessons could become chaotic and less productive.

× When I was a student, which was about 40 years ago, there was a strict rule about our appearance, like how short our bank should be or how long our Scott should be, which seems funny and outrageous to me now.

✓ When I was a student, about 40 years ago, there were strict rules about our appearance, like how short our hair should be or how long our skirt should be, which seem funny and outrageous to me now.

The original sentence uses incorrect nouns 'bank' and 'Scott' instead of 'hair' and 'skirt' (word choice error) and mixes singular/plural: 'there was a strict rule' should be 'there were strict rules' because multiple examples follow. Also 'which seems' should be 'which seem' to agree with 'rules'. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and ensure subject-verb agreement for plural nouns.

× It depends what kind of role the school has, but to me it doesn't make much sense to have many strict rules because that will make students think less.

✓ It depends on what kind of role the school has, but to me it doesn't make much sense to have many strict rules because that will make students think less.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends' (preposition issue) and sentence otherwise uses present appropriately. According to the allowed list, correctable type is 11 but primary fix fits present-tense structure; here we add 'on'. Suggestion: use 'depends on' when indicating conditional dependence.

× They should have some responsibility and make a judgement on their own.

✓ They should have some responsibility and make a judgement on their own.

This sentence is acceptable; 'their' correctly refers back to 'students' as a gender-neutral singular/plural reference. No correction needed. Included to acknowledge pronoun usage is correct.

× No, not really. Besides, I was so independent, I didn't I didn't ask many questions to teach us.

✓ No, not really. Besides, I was so independent that I didn't ask many questions to my teachers.

The original repeats 'I didn't' and uses 'to teach us' incorrectly. The phrase should be 'didn't ask many questions to my teachers' or better 'ask my teachers many questions' and include 'that' to link clauses. Fixes: remove duplication, correct object of 'ask', and adjust clause connector.

× I always thought to myself try to solve answers and quizzes and I was happy about that.

✓ I always told myself to try to solve problems and quizzes, and I was happy about that.

'Thought to myself try' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'told myself to try' or 'thought to myself that I should try'. Also 'solve answers' is incorrect—one 'solves problems' or 'answers questions'. Suggestion: use 'told myself to try to solve problems' for clarity.

× I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I'm quite independent and responsible, so I always made it point that I didn't cause any troubles or inconvenienced anybody instead.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I'm quite independent and responsible, so I always make it a point not to cause any trouble or inconvenience anyone.

Tense mismatch: 'I prefer' (present) should pair with 'I always make' (present) rather than 'made'. Phrase 'made it point' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'make it a point'. Use uncountable 'trouble' (not 'troubles') and 'inconvenience anyone' rather than 'inconvenienced anybody'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct idioms and uncountable nouns.

× Instead I wanted to enjoy full responsibility.

✓ Instead, I wanted to enjoy full responsibility.

Missing comma after 'Instead' for clarity. Sentence is otherwise acceptable; retention of past tense 'wanted' is consistent with 'I wanted'. Suggestion: use a comma after sentence adverbs for readability.

× Yes, one of my teachers at high school was strict. Everybody knows that nobody should cross her, and her name was Professor Mcgonagall.

✓ Yes, one of my teachers in high school was strict. Everyone knew that nobody should cross her, and her name was Professor McGonagall.

Use 'in high school' rather than 'at high school'. Tense consistency: speaker refers to past experience, so 'Everybody knows' should be 'Everyone knew'. Capitalize name properly. Also 'everybody' vs 'everyone' both acceptable; changed to 'everyone' for style. Suggestion: keep past tense when describing past events.

× No, I don't wanna. I wouldn't want to work as a teacher and I'm more free or full of more schools because in any case it is quite challenging to be a teacher. It's not a couple mighty.

✓ No, I don't want to. I wouldn't want to work as a teacher in a free school because, in any case, it is quite challenging to be a teacher. It's not an easy job.

Avoid informal 'wanna' in formal responses: use 'want to'. 'More free or full of more schools' is unclear; likely intended 'in a rule-free school' so corrected accordingly. 'It's not a couple mighty' is nonsensical; replace with 'It's not an easy job'. Also adjust commas for clarity. Suggestion: use standard vocabulary, restate intended meaning clearly, and replace idiomatic errors with common expressions.