Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses and articles, and avoid redundant or unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect examples and explain reasons briefly. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: When I was in junior high, we had several rules. For example, the school didn’t allow us to dye our hair and required us to wear a customized uniform. These rules were intended to ensure a neat appearance and promote equality among students.

提案: Good clear opinion and concise reasoning. To improve, add a linking phrase and a brief specific example to support your point, and correct small grammatical awkwardness (e.g., 'reduce' -> 'can reduce'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I don’t think more rules are better. While basic rules are necessary to keep students safe and healthy, overly strict regulations can reduce students’ motivation and creativity. For example, banning all group projects might stop creative collaboration without improving conduct.

提案: Correct plural/singular and article errors, combine short sentences to sound more natural, and add one specific illustrative detail (what she did) to make the answer more vivid. Use linking words like 'although' correctly within one or two sentences.

例: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in elementary school. She was strict but kind to each student, and her passion for teaching—like staying after class to help struggling pupils—was admirable, so I have never forgotten her.

提案: Make the response more natural and precise. State preference clearly, correct awkward phrasing, and give a brief reason with a specific example of what rules should remain. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer fewer rules because students can’t reasonably follow too many regulations. I think a few clear rules—such as those for safety and attendance—are enough to maintain a healthy school life.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct strange or incorrect phrases ('visiting doctor' is likely wrong). Give one succinct example of strict behavior, avoid emotional absolutes, and use correct tense and collocations ('gave me low scores' or 'was hard on me'). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. During my training period as a medical student, I had a very strict teacher who was hard on everyone and gave us severe marks for small mistakes. Although his methods pushed me to improve technically, I now feel his approach was too harsh and lacked support.

提案: Make the response coherent and precise. Start with a clear statement, correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), and give a specific reason or example why rule-free or rural teaching is difficult. Use linking words and keep to 3–4 sentences.

例: I can’t imagine teaching in a completely rule-free school. Teaching in rural schools is also challenging because students sometimes miss classes to help at home, so teachers must adapt lessons and provide extra support to keep them engaged.

× When I was there junior high school students, we have several rules.

✓ When I was in junior high school, we had several rules.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing preposition. 'There junior high school students' is ungrammatical. Use 'in junior high school' to indicate time/place and match past tense 'had' with 'When I was'. Suggestion: Place 'in' before the school level and use past tense for completed past situations.

× the school didn't allow us to dye our hair

✓ the school didn't allow us to dye our hair

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. (Included only to show it fits the context.)

× we had to wear customized uniform because the school wanted us to be need appearance.

✓ we had to wear a customized uniform because the school wanted us to have a neat appearance.

Errors: 'customized uniform' needs an article 'a' and 'uniform' is singular; 'need appearance' is incorrect word choice and spelling. Replace 'need' with 'neat' and use 'have' to collocate with 'appearance'. Suggestion: Use articles before singular countable nouns and choose correct adjective ('neat') and verb ('have').

× I don't think so.

✓ I don't think so.

No correction needed; present simple is appropriate for general opinion.

× We need certain rules because schools need to keep students healthy and safe, but very strong rules reduce their motivation and creativity rather than improving their behavior.

✓ We need certain rules because schools need to keep students healthy and safe, but very strict rules reduce students' motivation and creativity rather than improve their behavior.

Use 'strict' rather than 'very strong' for rules; possessive 'students' motivation' is more natural; parallel structure: 'reduce... rather than improve' keeps verbs consistent. 'Improve' fits base form after 'rather than' when comparing verbs. Suggestion: Use accurate adjectives and maintain parallel verb forms.

× Yes, when I was an elementary school students, I really had a dedicated teacher.

✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school, I had a dedicated teacher.

'an elementary school students' mixes singular and plural and misses the preposition 'in'. Use 'in elementary school' and simple past 'had'. Suggestion: Use 'in' for school levels and ensure subject number matches nouns.

× Although she was strict, she was kind to each students and her attitude for education was admirable.

✓ Although she was strict, she was kind to each student, and her attitude toward education was admirable.

'each students' should be singular 'each student'; 'attitude for education' is awkward—use 'attitude toward education'. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use singular after 'each' and use correct prepositional phrase 'attitude toward'.

× I could never forget her.

✓ I will never forget her.

The original 'I could never forget her' is awkward in context; use 'I will never forget her' to express enduring memory. If past tense intended, 'I could never forget her' is unidiomatic; 'I could never forget her' suggests impossibility in past. 'I will never forget her' is more natural. Suggestion: Choose tense/modal to match intended meaning.

× I prefer fewer rules because we cannot follow many rules.

✓ I prefer fewer rules because we cannot follow too many rules.

Add 'too' to clarify quantity sense; original is understandable but sounds off. 'Fewer' correctly modifies plural noun 'rules'. Suggestion: Use 'too many' to express excess.

× I believe simple and important rules for students are needed to for a healthy school life.

✓ I believe simple and important rules for students are needed for a healthy school life.

Remove the extra 'to'. 'Needed for' correctly links purpose. Sentence otherwise correct. Suggestion: Proofread for duplicate words.

× MMM. When I was a visiting doctor, I had a really strict teacher.

✓ When I was a visiting doctor, I had a really strict teacher.

Remove interjection 'MMM' in formal speech. The sentence is otherwise grammatical, though context 'visiting doctor' may be intended as 'visitor to the school' or 'in school'—if the speaker meant 'when I was a student', use that instead. Suggestion: Clarify intended role and avoid filler sounds in responses.

× He urged me to work hard and he scored me very hard.

✓ He urged me to work hard and graded me very harshly.

'Scored me very hard' is unidiomatic. Use 'graded' for marking and 'harshly' as adverb. 'Scored' is allowable but 'score someone' usually in sports; 'graded' fits academics. Suggestion: Use correct verb for assessment and adverb for manner.

× Now I think his attitude was wrong.

✓ Now I think his attitude was wrong.

No correction needed; present opinion about past action is fine.

× I don't respect him.

✓ I don't respect him.

Grammatically correct; expresses present feeling.

× I cannot imagine that.

✓ I cannot imagine that.

No correction needed.

× But working as a teacher in a rural schools are not easy because we need to think how to teach for students and the student can go home during classes.

✓ But working as a teacher in a rural school is not easy because we need to think about how to teach students and students can go home during classes.

Errors: 'a rural schools' mixes singular/plural and article—use 'a rural school' or 'rural schools'; verb should agree: 'is' for singular. 'Think how to teach for students' should be 'think about how to teach students'. 'the student can go home' should be plural 'students can go home'. Suggestion: Ensure noun-number agreement, correct verbs, and use 'think about how to' for planning actions.

× It's not easy for us.

✓ It's not easy for us.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct.