Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 尽量减少填充词（例如"umm","uh"）并用一两句简洁有力的话直接回答问题。先给出明确的主题句，然后用一到两句具体原因或举例来支持。注意语法和词序，例如用"I need to be alone"而不是"to be stay alone"。

例: Yes, I do. I usually prefer being with friends because they offer emotional support when I’m stressed. For example, last month I called a friend after a tough exam and talking with her helped me calm down.

提案: 回答应更有条理：先给主题句，然后用具体细节说明常聊的话题并用连接词如"for example"或"we often"衔接。避免重复词汇和语法错误，说明地点关系时用清晰的表达（例如"I live in Kunming, so my roommates live in another city"）。

例: Recently we mostly talk about our daily lives because I live in Kunming while my roommates live elsewhere. For example, we share what we did that day, recommend delicious restaurants, and talk about work or study updates.

提案: 用完整的句子直接比较两种选择，给出清晰理由并用连接词（because, so, therefore）组织句子。减少重复并准确描述个性影响。比如说"I prefer one-on-one because I find group conversations stressful"。

例: I prefer chatting with one friend because group conversations make me anxious; I worry about everyone’s feelings. So one-on-one talks feel more relaxed and personal to me.

提案: 先给明确偏好，然后说明例外情况并给出具体原因。完整表达因果关系，避免未完成的句子。例如说明面部表情和语气如何帮助理解。

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because you can read facial expressions and tone, which helps avoid misunderstandings. However, I would use social media to contact strangers or people who live far away because it’s more convenient.

提案: 回答要有时间顺序逻辑：先说现在的情况，再回顾过去。用清晰词汇表达观点（例如"as children we argued more, but now we are more mature"）。避免重复与填充词，句子控制在三到四句内。

例: When we were children we argued more because our opinions clashed frequently. Now we argue much less since we’re more mature and able to resolve disagreements calmly.

× Yes I do of course I like 100% cause umm, sometimes, maybe sometimes I need uh, to be stay alone to enjoy myself time, but most of the time I need to stay with my friends 'cause if something happened, what I can just like uh, I can have a shoulder to rely on, to cry on and.

✓ Yes, of course I do. Sometimes I need to stay alone to enjoy my time, but most of the time I need to stay with my friends because if something happens, I can have a shoulder to rely on and cry on.

句中多处动词形式和搭配不当：1) “to be stay alone”中不需要不定式和原形动词同时出现，应使用不带 to 的动词短语“stay alone”；2) “enjoy myself time”搭配错误，正确说法为“enjoy my time”或“enjoy myself”；3) “if something happened”时态不一致，应与一般现在或适当情境一致用“if something happens”；此外句子需要适当断句并加入连接词如“because”。建议：简化动词结构，使用正确动词短语搭配，并注意时态一致性与分句连接。

× Uh, for recently, recently I, I 'cause I stay in Kunming city, so my, I'm not the same city with my roommates.

✓ Recently, I stayed in Kunming city, so I'm not in the same city as my roommates.

问题在介词和短语搭配：1) “for recently”不自然，应直接用副词“Recently”；2) “stay in Kunming city”若指目前可说“stay in”或“live in”，若指过去则用“stayed in”；3) “not the same city with my roommates”搭配错误，应使用“not in the same city as my roommates”。建议：用正确介词短语“in the same city as”，并根据语境选择时态（现在或过去）。

× So, uh, we just talk about our reason, how to say reason going, what kind of what, what we have done recently just like this or just some share some delicious food or.

✓ We just talk about our reasons, like how things are going, what we have done recently, or share delicious food recommendations.

问题主要是代词和名词复数形式及表达不连贯：1) “our reason”应为复数“our reasons”；2) “how to say reason going”语序和代词使用混乱，意为“how things are going”；3) 句尾“just some share some delicious food or”结构不完整，应改为“or share delicious food recommendations”。建议：把名词复数化，使用清晰的常用表达“how things are going”，并完成并列结构。

× I would prefer chat with only one friend 'cause you know is a it's kind of a little bit difficult to chat with a group of friends 'cause you need to. How to say I care about everyone if, if because of my personality, I need I think I need to care about everyone's feeling but just one friend I just care for cause.

✓ I would prefer to chat with only one friend because it's a little difficult to chat with a group; you have to pay attention to everyone. Because of my personality, I feel I need to care about everyone's feelings, but with just one friend I only need to care for one person.

问题包括动词不定式和动名词：1) “prefer chat”缺少不定式应为“prefer to chat”；2) 句中多处重复和停顿应删除，保证流畅；3) “everyone's feeling”改为复数“everyone's feelings”；4) 最后部分不完整，应明确“care for one person/only one friend”。建议：使用固定搭配“prefer to do sth.”，注意名词复数及句子完整性。

× Of course I prefer communicate face to face, but for if some someone is like a stranger for me, I would prefer to via social media and uh, because communicate face to face, you can understand well each other because the.

✓ Of course I prefer to communicate face to face, but if someone is a stranger to me, I would prefer to use social media, because when you communicate face to face you can understand each other better.

问题在介词和动词搭配：1) “prefer communicate”应为“prefer to communicate”；2) “a stranger for me”介词错误，应为“a stranger to me”；3) “prefer to via social media”结构错误，应为“prefer to use social media”或“prefer communicating via social media”；4) 句尾不完整，需补全原因并调整顺序。建议：掌握“prefer to do/to use”及“stranger to sb.”等固定搭配，保证句子完整。

× Umm, it's hard to say when I was little, 'cause when I'm so young. So we, it's, it's argument is in, in disband indispensable, uh, because, uh, we are thinking crash. But now, uh, with the age getting old, we are more, uh, mature. So we are more, the personality is more stable.

✓ It's hard to say. When I was little, we often argued because we thought impulsively. But now, as we get older, we are more mature, and our personalities are more stable.

问题包括时态和表达混乱：1) 原句“when I'm so young”时态和语法错误，描述过去应为“When I was young”或“When I was little”；2) “it's argument is in, in disband indispensable”无意义且结构错乱，应改为“we often argued”或“arguments were inevitable”；3) “we are thinking crash”应为“we thought impulsively”或“we were more impulsive”；4) “with the age getting old”不自然，应用“As we get older”。建议：使用正确的过去时间表达（was/were），把冗余和不连贯的片段简化为常用自然表达。