Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. For example, say you chat daily, mention the main reasons (work, family, conferences), and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends a lot. I chat with them every day about work and upcoming conferences, and I also frequently talk with family to stay connected.

提案: Be more organized and specific. Begin with a topic sentence naming the main topics, then give 1–2 concrete examples. Use linking words (for example, also) and correct noun/verb forms. Avoid vague fillers and repetitions.

例: We usually discuss current affairs, especially politics and public policies. For example, we share opinions about recent economic reports and sometimes have academic discussions about government decisions.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and concise reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas. Replace vague words like 'intensity' with 'more personal' or 'more in-depth'.

例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because conversations are more personal and in-depth. That way we can share ideas and information more deeply and understand each other better.

提案: State your preference clearly and give 2 specific reasons with correct vocabulary (e.g., 'not very active on social media', 'face-to-face is clearer'). Avoid hesitations and incorrect words like 'intentions'; use 'personal' or 'private'.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I'm not very active on social media. In person, conversations feel more private and clearer since you can see facial expressions.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief specific context or reason. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'we argue sometimes during academic discussions when we exchange ideas'). Keep it simple and avoid unclear phrases like 'at the terrace'.

例: Yes, we sometimes argue, especially during academic discussions when we exchange different ideas and debate evidence or opinions.

× Yes I like it a lot and every day I chatting with my friends for work, I chatting with my friends for a conference, doing conversations and chatting for of course with my family I also doing this.

✓ Yes, I like it a lot and every day I chat with my friends about work. I chat with my friends about conferences, have conversations, and of course I also do this with my family.

The student used incorrect verb forms 'chatting' and 'doing' where simple present tense is required (I chat, I do). Replace gerunds with base form for habitual actions. Also break the run-on sentence into clear clauses and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines: 'I chat', 'I have conversations', 'I also do this with my family.'

× Uh, we often charge, uh, about the, the, the current information, something like political, something like governments, uh, public policies. We, we also sharing information about economic condition. We criticize the government, we doing conversation, discussions, something like that, academic, uh, discussions, so.

✓ Uh, we often talk about current information, such as politics, governments, and public policies. We also share information about economic conditions. We criticize the government and have conversations and academic discussions.

Errors: 'charge' is wrong verb choice; should be 'talk'. 'Sharing' and 'doing' are incorrect forms for simple present habitual actions; use 'share' and 'have'. Also 'economic condition' should be plural 'economic conditions'. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs and simple present for regular activities: 'we talk', 'we share', 'we have discussions.' Remove filler words and redundant repetition.

× Intensity. Because of intensity, I prefer to chat with my my friends one by one, person by person. Because it's more intense, we could sharing our ideas, we could sharing our informations deeply and personally.

✓ Because of intensity, I prefer to chat with my friends one by one. It's more intense, and we can share our ideas and information deeply and personally.

Problems: single-word 'Intensity.' is unnatural. Double 'my my' is repetition. 'We could sharing' is wrong combination; modal 'could' should be followed by base verb 'share'. 'Informations' is uncountable; use 'information'. Suggestion: Use 'can' or 'could' + base verb and treat 'information' as uncountable. Combine sentences to avoid fragments.

× I'm not, I'm not the advance in social media, so I prefer to face to face because it's more, uh, intentions, It's more, uh, private and it's more clear because we could, uh, see our friends to whom we communicate, uh, expressions.

✓ I'm not very advanced in social media, so I prefer face-to-face communication because it is more intentional, more private, and clearer since we can see our friends' expressions.

Errors: 'the advance' is incorrect; correct adjective is 'advanced' and use modifier 'very'. 'Face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as adjective/noun phrase. 'Intentions' wrong word; use 'intentional'. 'More clear' -> 'clearer'. 'We could see our friends to whom we communicate, expressions' is awkward; use 'we can see our friends' expressions'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms and comparative 'clearer'; use possessive for 'friends' expressions' and 'can' for ability.

× Often, Liam, when we were changing information, when we changing the ideas at the terrace of in academic context, yes.

✓ Often, Liam, when we were exchanging information or changing ideas on the terrace in an academic context, yes.

Errors: 'changing information' is odd; 'exchanging information' is more natural. 'When we changing' mixes forms; use past progressive 'when we were changing' or convert to gerund phrase correctly. Preposition phrase 'at the terrace of in academic context' is incorrect; use 'on the terrace in an academic context'. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs ('exchange') and correct prepositions ('on the terrace', 'in an academic context') and consistent tense.