Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "there would be times" and "times that"). Also reduce wordiness and use contractions where appropriate to sound more natural.

例: I sometimes do and sometimes I don't. For example, if I’m tired after a long day I usually prefer to rest and not chat, but when I’ve had a good day I enjoy socializing and catching up with friends.

提案: Organize your points clearly and use specific examples. Use linking words (for example, and also) and correct grammar (avoid repeated words and informal fillers like 'gonna'). Keep to two to three supporting ideas max and give a short example to illustrate.

例: We mainly talk about school and daily life. For example, we discuss class topics, upcoming assignments, and where we might hang out afterward. We also share personal experiences, such as how we handled a difficult exam.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence and then one clear reason with a brief contrasting clause. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' and avoid repeating phrases like 'there are times that'.

例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because I’m introverted and feel more comfortable having deeper conversations. However, I do join group chats when there’s an event or a gathering to plan.

提案: Make the reason clearer and more natural. Use specific vocabulary (e.g. 'emotional connection', 'distractions') and one concise contrast. Correct awkward phrases like 'I can feel there's feelings with me'.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it creates a stronger emotional connection and I can read body language. In contrast, social media often has many distractions and feels less personal.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then explain briefly with specific examples and use linking words like 'however' and 'for example'. Avoid repeating 'usually' twice and use more precise terms than 'go with the flow'.

例: Usually I avoid arguments, but sometimes they happen, for example when we disagree about plans or opinions. In those cases I try to stay calm and compromise so the disagreement doesn’t harm the friendship.

× It depends on the situation because sometimes there would be times that I would not have any energy to talk to people and there are times that I am full of energy to communicate and to socialize with my friends.

✓ It depends on the situation because sometimes I do not have any energy to talk to people, and other times I am full of energy to communicate and socialize with my friends.

Overuse of 'would' is inappropriate here; use simple present/modal 'do not' for habitual or general situations. Also use 'other times' for contrast and remove redundant 'to' before 'socialize'. Suggestion: use plain present to describe typical states and simplify repetitive words.

× Usually academics we just talk about what happens in the topic, what we're going to do today, we're gonna where we are gonna hang out and and life.

✓ Usually, regarding academics, we just talk about what happens in the course, what we're going to do today, where we are going to hang out, and life in general.

Problems: missing commas for clarity and incorrect preposition/phrasing 'in the topic' (should be 'in the course' or 'regarding the topic'), informal contractions 'gonna' are not appropriate in formal grammar. Removed duplicate 'and' and rephrased for clarity. Suggestion: use 'where we are going to' instead of 'we're gonna where we are gonna'.

× We usually talk about personal experiences and if we also experience that kind of situation.

✓ We usually talk about personal experiences and whether we have also experienced that kind of situation.

Use of 'if' is ambiguous; 'whether' fits better when presenting an alternative. Tense should be present perfect 'have experienced' to relate past experience to present discussions. Suggestion: use 'whether we have experienced' for clarity.

× I prefer to chat with only one person because I am an introvert and small talks aren't really my thing, but there are times that I talk to people or a group of people when there's an activity coming up or simply a gathering is coming up.

✓ I prefer to chat with only one person because I am an introvert and small talk is not really my thing, but sometimes I talk to people or a group when there is an upcoming activity or gathering.

Problems: 'small talks' should be uncountable 'small talk'; awkward repetition 'a group of people' can be shortened to 'a group'. 'There are times that' is wordy; use 'sometimes' or 'when there is an upcoming'. Also use 'is' for singular 'gathering'. Suggestion: simplify and use uncountable nouns correctly.

× I prefer to communicate face to face rather than social media because when I'm talking face to face with my friends, I can feel there's feelings with me, I can feel their presence and while talking to social media, it feels like there's too many distractions going in and going out.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face rather than via social media because when I'm talking face to face with my friends, I can feel their emotions and presence, whereas on social media there seem to be too many distractions.

Use 'via social media' or 'on social media' instead of 'rather than social media'. 'I can feel there's feelings with me' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I can feel their emotions and presence'. 'There's too many' is subject-verb agreement error; use 'there seem to be too many' or 'there are too many'. Suggestion: use 'via'/'on' for channels and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× No, I don't like arguing with friends, but there are times that arguing with them is not avoidable.

✓ No, I don't like arguing with friends, but sometimes arguing with them is unavoidable.

'There are times that' is wordy—'sometimes' is concise. 'Is not avoidable' is a correct phrase but 'unavoidable' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'unavoidable' for conciseness and clarity.

× We usually argue about ideologies and where to go, but usually I just go with the flow.

✓ We usually argue about opinions and where to go, but I usually just go with the flow.

'Ideologies' is not wrong but often too formal; 'opinions' fits casual conversation better. Also duplicated 'usually'—keep one for natural rhythm. Suggestion: choose vocabulary appropriate to register and avoid repetition.