Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You did not provide an answer. Always respond directly with a clear topic sentence stating your hobbies, then add one or two supporting details (why you enjoy them or how often you do them). Keep it natural, concise (max 5 sentences), and use simple linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I enjoy cycling and photography. I cycle three times a week because it keeps me fit and helps me clear my mind. I also take photos of landscapes when I travel, so I can remember special places.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains hesitation and inaccurate time reference. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the childhood hobby and a precise time reference if needed. Use one or two supporting details explaining why you liked it or how often you did it, and avoid filler words like "maybe" and long pauses.

例: Yes, when I was a child I loved cycling. I usually rode my bike around the park every weekend because it was fun and I liked exploring with my friends.

提案: Your response repeats words and has many hesitations. Give a clear topic sentence: name the hobby and say how long you've had it. Then add a specific supporting detail about what you enjoy photographing or how you practice the skill. Use linking words like "and" or "because" to make it coherent and avoid disfluent sounds.

例: Yes, I have been interested in photography since I was a child. I enjoy taking portrait and landscape photos because I like capturing people's expressions and beautiful scenery, and I practise editing my pictures on my computer every week.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Start with a clear statement about whether your hobbies match your family's. Then add specific supporting details: which family members share the hobby, where you do it together, and an example activity. Avoid unclear vocabulary and filler words.

例: Yes, my mother and I both enjoy photography. We often go to local photo events and parks together to take pictures, and she has taught me many techniques for framing and lighting.

× When I was a child, maybe like 6 years ago. I love cycling.

✓ When I was a child, maybe about six years ago, I loved cycling.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. The time phrase 'When I was a child' and '6 years ago' indicate past time, so the verb should be in the past tense ('loved' instead of 'love'). Also combine the fragments into one complete sentence and replace 'like' with 'about' for more natural usage. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense with past time markers and combine fragments into a single sentence.

× Umm, it would be photography. I love photography. Photo umm, skill Photo skills umm yeah, photo ring skills. And I love so yeah.

✓ Um, it is photography. I love photography. I enjoy taking photos and developing my photography skills.

The student used 'would be' which is conditional and not needed when stating a current hobby. Use simple present 'is' to state a fact. The rest of the original contains fragmented and unclear phrases; replace them with clear present-tense statements ('I love photography', 'I enjoy taking photos', 'developing my photography skills'). Suggestion: Use simple present to state lasting facts about current hobbies and avoid fillers; express skill development with a clear gerund phrase.

× Sit through board in my mother's hobbies, photography and we always go to Chinese airport to take down. Photo events, you know.

✓ My mother's hobbies include photography, and we always go to the Chinese airport to take photos at events.

The original is ungrammatical and contains fragments and incorrect word choices ('Sit through board in' makes no sense; 'take down' is wrong for taking photos). Recast as a clear compound sentence: 'My mother's hobbies include photography' (correct verb and noun order) and 'we always go to the Chinese airport to take photos at events' (correct verb and preposition use). Suggestion: Use 'include' to list someone's hobbies, 'take photos' for photographing, and connect ideas with 'and' or a comma to form complete sentences.