Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, verb forms).

例: Yes, I enjoy playing football with my brother and friends. Usually my brother invites me to join his friends on weekends, and we play for an hour or two; I find it fun and a great way to stay active.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense consistently for childhood. Provide one specific supporting detail and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar (e.g., "taught me", "we often played").

例: Yes, I had the same hobby when I was a child because my brother taught me how to play football. We often played together in the garage or at a nearby field, which helped me improve my skills early on.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence using present perfect or present for long-term habits (e.g., "I've had this hobby since childhood"). Add a specific reason and link ideas with words like "because" or "so". Fix grammar ("I like playing football", "it keeps me healthy").

例: Yes, I've had this hobby since childhood. I like playing football because my dad and brother often invited me to join them, and as a result I became fitter and more energetic.

提案: Avoid stereotypes and be polite. Answer directly, state who shares the hobby, and contrast with others using linking words like "however". Correct grammar ("my brother and dad have the same hobby", "they prefer shopping").

例: Yes, my brother and my dad also enjoy football. However, my mother and sister prefer other activities such as shopping, so we usually do different things at weekends.

× Uh, usually my brother invite me to play with, uh, his friends, uh, and then he invite me to play to uh, they were so fun.

✓ Uh, usually my brother invites me to play with his friends, and then he invites me to play; they are so fun.

Subject 'my brother' is singular, so the verb needs third person singular form 'invites'. Also 'they were so fun' uses past tense and odd phrasing; 'they are so fun' matches present habitual meaning. Suggest using 'invites' and present tense 'are' for habitual actions.

× Hy, my brother invite me to play with, uh, his friends

✓ My brother invites me to play with his friends.

The subject 'my brother' requires the verb in third person singular form by adding -s: 'invites'. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas for clarity.

× Student: Yes, I have a same hobby right now and when I was a child because my brother is, uh, teach me how to play in football, uh, and then we are uh, often to play football in my house in the garage.

✓ Yes, I had the same hobby when I was a child and I still do now because my brother taught me how to play football, and we often played football in the garage at my house.

The sentence mixes present and past incorrectly. Use past tense 'had' and 'taught' for childhood actions. 'Teach' should be past 'taught'. Use 'played' for repeated past actions. Reorder to 'garage at my house' for natural word order.

× My hobby when I was a childhood is the same. I like to playing football because my dad and my brother, uh, often to invite me to play in a football.

✓ My hobby when I was a child was the same. I like playing football because my dad and my brother often invite me to play football.

Use 'child' not 'a childhood'. 'Was' matches past reference. 'Like playing' uses gerund correctly; 'like to playing' is incorrect. 'Often invite' is present habitual; do not use 'to' after 'often'. Also 'play football' is the correct collocation.

× Uh, so, but I feel like my body can, uh, getting healthy.

✓ So I feel like my body can get healthier.

After modal 'can' use base verb 'get', not 'getting'. 'Getting healthy' should be comparative 'healthier' to show improvement. Remove filler words and redundant conjunctions.

× Uh, my brother have a same hobbies, my dad too, uh, but my mom and my sister, I don't think they like to playing football too because, uh, there are women, uh, I think my sister and my mum, uh, have a hobby is uh, shopping.

✓ My brother has the same hobby, and my dad does too, but my mom and my sister don't like playing football; I think my sister and my mum's hobby is shopping.

Use 'has' for singular 'my brother' and 'does' to replace 'my dad too'. Use 'don't like playing' not 'like to playing'. 'There are women' is unnecessary and incorrect. Express possession as 'my mum's hobby' and use singular 'hobby' if referring to one activity.