Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and articles, and avoid listing too many activities without connectors.

例: Yes, I enjoy going to cafés and taking photos with my friends. For example, we often try new coffee shops on weekends and post pictures on Instagram to remember our outings.

提案: Clarify what you mean and use complete sentences. Begin with a topic sentence stating your childhood hobby, then give specific examples and link them logically. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'as a child', 'I enjoyed drawing') are needed.

例: As a child, I loved drawing. For instance, after watching cartoons about jungles and sea life, I often drew pizzas, mountain scenes and fish, which made me happy and creative.

提案: Make the meaning clear: state the hobby and explain how it has continued. Use correct pronouns and simpler language. Add linking words to connect ideas and provide a concise reason why it matters to you.

例: Yes, sketching and watching cartoons have been my hobbies since childhood. Even now I watch cartoons and sketch family scenes because they help me relax and express my creativity.

提案: Correct vocabulary and sentence structure: say you watch movies together, use proper verbs and articles, and give a brief specific detail about when or what you watch. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete phrases.

例: Yes, we often watch movies together on Netflix at the weekend. For example, we like to catch up on new films and sometimes choose comedies so everyone can relax.

× My hobby is go out to the cafe and take a photo, post Instagram with my friend and spend quality time together.

✓ My hobby is going out to cafes, taking photos, posting on Instagram with my friends, and spending quality time together.

After 'My hobby is' use the gerund (verb + -ing) to describe activities. Also use plural forms for general nouns (cafes, photos, friends) and parallel structure for a list of activities. Suggestion: use gerunds for hobbies and keep items parallel in form.

× Well, when I watched Jungle I really enjoyed drawing pizza, Sakash View, mountain sea fish. Yes, that's why my hobby in the child.

✓ Well, when I was a child I enjoyed drawing things like pizza, Sakash View, mountains, seas, and fish. That's why I developed this hobby as a child.

The original has tense and structure issues. 'When I watched Jungle' is unclear; likely intended 'when I was a child'. 'I really enjoyed drawing pizza, Sakash View, mountain sea fish' lacks articles and parallel nouns; use plural/common nouns. 'my hobby in the child' is ungrammatical; use 'as a child' and 'developed this hobby'. Suggestion: clarify time expression, use plural nouns or items, and proper phrase 'as a child'.

× Yes, I have enjoyed your evening since I was a child. I spent our suggestion cartoon and family scene which tell me relax and express myself creativity.

✓ Yes, I have enjoyed watching cartoons and family scenes since I was a child. They help me relax and express my creativity.

Use gerunds for activities (watching). 'Have enjoyed ... since I was a child' is acceptable but needs correct object. 'I spent our suggestion cartoon' is incorrect — use 'I have watched' or 'I enjoyed watching cartoons and family scenes'. 'Tell me relax' should be 'help me relax' and 'express myself creativity' should be 'express my creativity'. Suggestion: use gerunds, proper verbs like 'help', and correct possessive adjective 'my'.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. Provided for completeness.

× Well, uh, we usually enjoy washing movie on Netflix to get the and catch up together on weekend.

✓ Well, we usually enjoy watching movies on Netflix to relax and catch up together on weekends.

Use 'watching' (gerund) not 'washing'. Use plural 'movies' and 'weekends' for habitual actions. Insert 'relax' for intended meaning and fix word order 'catch up together'. Suggestion: use gerunds for activities, correct vocabulary ('watching'), and pluralize time expressions for habitual actions.