Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、語法正確並避免重複。主句應直接回答問題，然後用一到兩句補充具體細節與原因，使用連接詞使句子連貫。例如將動詞不定式和動名詞用法改正，並說明頻率或具體活動。

例: Yes, I enjoy swimming and hiking in my free time. I usually go hiking on weekends and swim twice a week because both activities help me stay fit and reduce stress.

提案: 答案缺乏清晰的主句與具體細節，語法和詞彙有誤並且表達混亂。應先直接回答，然後描述具體的遊戲類型、頻率或理由，並用連接詞來組織句子。注意時態和名詞表達。

例: Yes, when I was a child I loved playing video games. I played on a game console almost every day, especially platform and puzzle games, because they were fun and helped me relax after school.

提案: 回答要更精確並改進語法和詞彙。先簡短肯定，然後說明從兒時到現在的變化，提供具體例子（如影片類型或原因）。避免填充詞（uh）並使用正確時態。

例: Yes, I've loved watching films since I was a child. I used to watch cartoons, but now I prefer watching movies like dramas and documentaries because they offer more complex stories.

提案: 表達需要更有條理並使用正確語法。先直接回答是否一致，接著說明具體共同愛好並提供細節（誰、何時、怎麼做），使用連接詞使內容連貫。修正動詞形式與名詞用法。

例: Yes, my hobby of photography is similar to my mother's. She used to take a lot of pictures of me when I was young, and now I enjoy taking photos of landscapes and friends because it helps me capture memories.

× Yes, in my free time I like to swimming and hiking. Yes, it's help me have a good body and it can keep my health.

✓ Yes, in my free time I like swimming and hiking. They help me stay in good shape and keep me healthy.

句子中的 like 后应接动词的 -ing 形式，not 不定式 to swimming。另："it's help me" 主语与动词不匹配且不自然，改为复数代词 they 指代前面的两项爱好，help 后接动词原形 stay；keep my health 用法不地道，改为 keep me healthy 更自然。建议：like 后用动名词；用复数代词指代多个爱好；使用常见搭配 stay in good shape / keep (someone) healthy。

× Yes, only thing everybody charged uh, almost interested in playing games. Yes, playing games machine. I very like it in my child's health.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, almost everyone was interested in playing games, like video game machines. I liked them very much as a child.

原句时态和结构混乱。描述过去的习惯或状态应使用过去式（was interested, liked）。"everybody charged" 不正确，应为 "everyone" 或 "almost everyone"，并用过去时。"playing games machine" 应为 "video game machines" 或 "game machines"。建议：叙述童年爱好时用过去式，主语和动词保持一致，使用常见词组 like/was interested in/liked。

× Yeah, I think it's a really movie. In my childhood I like to, uh, watch cartoon, but now I have grow up, so I like uh, uh, watch move.

✓ Yeah, I think it's really about movies. As a child I liked to watch cartoons, but now I have grown up, so I like to watch movies.

这句包含时态和形式错误。描述过去的习惯应使用过去式 liked；现在完成时描述已成长应使用 "have grown up"（过去分词 grown），不是 "have grow up"。名词复数形式 cartoon/move 应为 cartoons/movies。建议：过去习惯用过去式；完成时用 have + 过去分词；名词复数需符合上下文。

× Yes, I think it's a take picture because my mom too in my childhood. I my mom, uh, in interested in take my picture. Yes, so it in now I'm grew up, so I likes to I like taking variable take picture.

✓ Yes, I think taking pictures is a hobby I share with my family because my mom used to take my pictures when I was a child. Now I've grown up, so I like taking various kinds of pictures.

原句代词与指代混乱，句子碎片较多。"it's a take picture" 应用动名词短语 taking pictures。表达过去常做某事用 used to 或过去式： my mom used to take my pictures。"I am grew up" 时态错误，应为 "I've grown up"。"likes to I like" 冗余且动词与主语不一致。最后的 "variable take picture" 不合语法，应为 "various kinds of pictures"。建议：理清主语与代词的指代关系，用动名词表示爱好，用 used to 表示过去经常做的事，完成时表示已经长大。