Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repetition. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'non-fiction', 'memoirs').

例: Yes, I enjoy reading a lot. When I was at university I read a wide range of books; for example, I often read novels and non-fiction such as historical biographies. In particular, I prefer autobiographies because I like learning about people's life experiences.

提案: Give a clear preference first, then give two brief, specific reasons linked logically. Reduce hesitation and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'on paper' not 'on papers').

例: I prefer reading on paper. I like the tactile feel of a real book and find it easier to concentrate without screen distractions. However, I can also read on a screen when it is more convenient.

提案: Clarify and organize your response: start with a direct statement about typical casual reading, then contrast it with situations that require careful reading. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'useless') and fix grammar. Provide a concrete example of what to check when reading carefully.

例: Usually I skim articles and light books because I just want the main ideas. However, when I am writing a graduation paper I read carefully to check facts, citations and methodology. For example, I verify data sources and note important quotes for my references.

提案: Improve coherence and vocabulary: answer directly then give clear contrasting examples using linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'however'). Remove unclear phrases and fix grammar. Be specific about what 'detailed reading' involves.

例: It depends on the purpose. For leisure reading, such as novels or magazines, I usually scan to get the main points quickly. However, for professional or academic texts I read in detail to understand arguments, check evidence and take notes for later use.

× I like reading very much and when I was a student, especially in university, I have a lot of uh spare time and I used to uh read var variety of books including novels, non fiction documentaries and uh my favorite is autobiography I think.

✓ I liked reading very much, and when I was a student, especially at university, I had a lot of spare time and I used to read a variety of books, including novels, non-fiction, documentaries, and my favorite was autobiography, I think.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly: 'I like' and 'I have a lot of spare time' conflict with 'when I was a student' and 'I used to read.' Use past tense 'liked' and 'had' to match the time frame. Also corrects vocabulary and punctuation. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for habits in the past (used to, liked, had).

× I prefer reading on papers because I like to touch books with paper, real paper.

✓ I prefer reading on paper because I like to touch real paper books.

Use the uncountable noun 'paper' (not 'papers') when referring to the medium. 'Real paper books' is a more natural phrase than 'books with paper, real paper.' Suggestion: use 'paper' not 'papers' and place adjectives before nouns for clarity.

× Umm, frankly speaking, I think both of them are good and I can adjust myself to any of them and but if I have got to pick one, I think I prefer reading on papers because I like to touch books with paper, real paper.

✓ Frankly speaking, I think both are fine and I can adjust to either, but if I have to pick one, I prefer reading on paper because I like the feel of real paper books.

The original is wordy and redundant ('and but', 'any of them') and mixes pronouns. 'Both of them are good' can be simplified to 'both are fine.' Use 'either' for two choices. 'Have to' is more natural than 'have got to.' Suggestion: simplify and avoid redundant conjunctions; choose natural phrases like 'the feel of real paper books.'

× Uh, I think most of times I don't need to read really carefully because I usually spend my time on reading those and book. Useless I think.

✓ I think most of the time I don't need to read very carefully because I usually spend my time reading books that I find unimportant, I think.

Use 'most of the time' (not 'most of times') and 'read very carefully' sounds better than 'read really carefully.' 'Spend my time on reading those and book' is ungrammatical; use 'spend my time reading books.' 'Useless I think' should be integrated as 'that I find unimportant, I think.' Suggestion: use standard phrases 'most of the time' and place qualifiers properly.

× But if I need to write a paper for graduation, I need to check some, umm, special things I need to read carefully.

✓ But if I need to write a graduation paper, I have to check some specific things, so I need to read carefully.

Using 'need to' repeatedly is awkward; 'have to' is a natural modal alternative. Also 'some special things' is better as 'some specific things.' Suggestion: vary modal verbs and streamline clause connections with 'so' or 'therefore.'

× It depends. If I read casually, I always scan in because I don't need to really focus on those details.

✓ It depends. If I read casually, I always scan because I don't need to focus on those details.

'Scan in' is incorrect; the verb is 'scan' (no preposition). 'Really' can be removed or placed before 'need' for emphasis. Suggestion: use 'scan' and avoid unnecessary adverbs.

× For example, if I am reading a novel or magazine, is useless for me to spend a lot of time buddy on Contra.

✓ For example, if I am reading a novel or a magazine, it is useless for me to spend a lot of time on it.

The original lacks a subject ('is useless'); add 'it is useless.' Remove unclear words ('buddy on Contra') which appear to be speech noise. Suggestion: provide a clear subject and object and remove filler words.

× By contrast, if I need to read those, professional or academic, I need to really detail.

✓ By contrast, if I need to read professional or academic materials, I need to read them in detail.

'Those, professional or academic' is awkward — use 'professional or academic materials.' 'I need to really detail' is incorrect; use 'read in detail' or 'study in detail.' Suggestion: use noun 'materials' and the phrase 'read in detail' for precision.