Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and avoid contradictory phrases (e.g., "I wouldn't say I'm fond of writing books" is confusing). Reduce hesitations and filler words. Provide a clear topic sentence stating your view, then give one or two concise reasons with specific detail. Keep to under five sentences.

例: I wouldn't say I'm a big fan of reading books. I find videos more engaging because they combine visuals and audio, which helps me understand complex topics faster. Also, since I have limited free time, watching short informative videos is more efficient for learning new things.

提案: Be direct about preference and contrast paper vs screen explicitly. Use linking words (however, although) and include a clear reason and a brief example. Correct small grammar errors and avoid repeating previous points too much.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because I can access articles and highlight text quickly on my tablet. However, if I need to study deeply, I sometimes use paper copies because they make it easier to take notes and concentrate for long periods.

提案: Use clearer wording and fix repetition/typos ("when when," "entertain/please"). Begin with a topic sentence, then use a linking word to contrast situations (for example, 'whereas' or 'but') and give a specific example of each case.

例: You should read carefully for important texts, such as work instructions or academic articles, because missing details could lead to errors. But for novels or blogs, you can skim the text to get the main ideas and read more casually for enjoyment.

提案: Good structure and coherence. To improve further, vary vocabulary (use 'scan' and 'skim' correctly) and add a brief specific example of when each method is used. Keep sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I generally prefer detailed reading when studying academic papers or preparing reports because it helps me remember facts and arguments. However, when I'm reading news or light articles for leisure, I usually skim the headlines and first paragraphs to get the key points quickly.

× I would didn't say I'm fond of writing books.

✓ I wouldn't say I'm fond of writing books.

The original mixes two auxiliaries 'would' and 'didn't' incorrectly. Use the contracted form 'wouldn't' plus the base verb 'say'. This is a modal verb usage/negation error: combine the modal with n't (wouldn't) rather than stacking 'didn't'. Suggestion: use 'I wouldn't say' or 'I don't' depending on meaning.

× I find uh, reading books a bit dull and boring as compared to watching videos, which I feel are more engaging than just reading the long test.

✓ I find reading books a bit dull and boring compared to watching videos, which I feel are more engaging than reading long texts.

Problems: unnecessary filler 'uh', redundant 'as compared to' (use 'compared to' or 'compared with'), and 'the long test' is incorrect word choice; should be 'long texts'. Also avoid 'just' if not needed. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'compared to' and correct noun to 'texts'.

× Also, I don't have much free time so I prefer to get knowledge from watching, uh, informative videos.

✓ Also, I don't have much free time, so I prefer to learn from watching informative videos.

Problems: awkward phrase 'get knowledge from' and filler 'uh'. Use 'learn from' for natural English and add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: 'learn from watching informative videos' is concise and natural.

× I wouldn't say I'm particularly fond of reading books.

✓ I wouldn't say I'm particularly fond of reading books.

This sentence is correct as is. It uses the conditional/modal 'wouldn't' appropriately to soften the statement. No change needed.

× I find watching education videos more engaging and I can learn same information faster, especially because I don't have much free time.

✓ I find watching educational videos more engaging, and I can learn the same information faster, especially because I don't have much free time.

Errors: 'education videos' should be adjective 'educational', and the phrase needs the determiner 'the same information'. Also add a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'educational' and 'the same information'.

× However, I do read whenever it is required for my study or for my work.

✓ However, I do read whenever it is required for my studies or for my work.

Use plural 'studies' when referring to academic study in general. The sentence is otherwise grammatically fine. Suggestion: use 'my studies' for natural phrasing.

× I think you need to read carefully when the text is important, for example when it's related to your job or your studies, because missing details can cause mistakes.

✓ I think you need to read carefully when the text is important, for example when it's related to your job or your studies, because missing details can cause mistakes.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical changes needed. It is clear and appropriately formed.

× But when when you're reading the entertain, when you're reading for entertainment or please, you can skim or read more casually and still enjoy the content.

✓ But when you're reading for entertainment or pleasure, you can skim or read more casually and still enjoy the content.

Errors: repeated 'when when', incorrect noun 'the entertain', and wrong word 'please' instead of 'pleasure'. Suggestion: remove repetition and replace with 'for entertainment or pleasure'.

× I usually prefer reading in detail because it helps me fully understand and remember information, especially when I'm studying academic articles or preparing work reports.

✓ I usually prefer reading in detail because it helps me fully understand and remember information, especially when I'm studying academic articles or preparing work reports.

This sentence is correct. Word choice and article use are appropriate; no change needed.

× However, when I'm reading for entertainment or the content isn't important, I tend to skip the text to pick up the main ideas and save time.

✓ However, when I'm reading for entertainment or the content isn't important, I tend to skim the text to pick up the main ideas and save time.

'Skip the text' is awkward; native speakers 'skim' when reading quickly for main ideas. The rest of the sentence is fine. Suggestion: use 'skim' instead of 'skip'.