Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct verb forms and simpler sentence structures, and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

例: I don't love reading, but I do read when I need information. For example, I read self-help or study books to learn new skills, although I sometimes struggle to finish long books because I find it hard to concentrate for long periods.

提案: Good clear preference and reason. Improve by making sentences grammatically correct and combining ideas with a linking phrase. Replace filler words and avoid repeating the main point unnecessarily.

例: I definitely prefer reading on paper because screens tire my eyes and make it harder to concentrate. For that reason, I read novels and study materials in printed form whenever possible.

提案: Clarify the categories and use clear examples. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then contrast the two situations using linking words (for example, but, however). Correct vocabulary (novel, general information) and grammar (I don't need to read novels carefully) will help coherence.

例: I don't usually need to read novels very carefully because I read them for enjoyment. However, I read carefully when I need practical information, for example when I read a diet book or a guide about building good habits so I can apply the advice correctly.

提案: Good clear preference but improve fluency and correctness. State your preference clearly, give a reason, and include a brief example. Avoid fillers and correct word choice (detailed reading, book). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer detailed reading because skimming makes me feel like I'm wasting time and I don't retain the information. For instance, when I study for exams I read textbooks carefully so I can remember facts and understand concepts.

× I cannot say I really love reading but sometimes I tried to reading to get use the full information from the book but because of my the ability of focusing sometimes I failed it to finish it double.

✓ I cannot say I really love reading but sometimes I try to read to use the full information from the book, but because of my ability to focus I sometimes fail to finish it.

Original contains incorrect verb forms: 'tried to reading' mixes past tense with to+verb+ing; should be 'try to read' for a habitual action. 'get use the full information' is incorrect phrase and verb form; use 'use the full information'. 'ability of focusing' should be 'ability to focus'. 'failed it to finish it double' is ungrammatical; use 'sometimes fail to finish it'. Use consistent present tense for habitual actions. Suggestions: use base verb after 'try to' (try to read), use 'ability to + verb' (ability to focus), and express habitual failure with present simple (I sometimes fail to finish it).

× But also it's why when the book goes to read the whole book in a day.

✓ Also, that is why I cannot read a whole book in a day.

Sentence is ungrammatical and mixes tenses/structures. 'when the book goes to read' is incorrect; use a clear subject 'I' and present simple: 'I cannot read a whole book in a day' to describe a general inability. Keep present tense for general facts. Suggestion: state subject and verb clearly (I cannot read), and use 'a whole book' for completeness.

× I feel like when I read some book on digital, uh, my eyes are really tired and I cannot concentrate on book more.

✓ I feel like when I read some books on a screen, my eyes get really tired and I cannot concentrate on the book as much.

'on digital' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; use 'on a screen' or 'digitally'. 'concentrate on book more' needs article and comparative phrasing: 'concentrate on the book as much' or 'concentrate more on the book'. Also plural 'some books' fits general statement and 'my eyes get really tired' is natural present-tense phrasing. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('on a screen') and include articles ('the book'), and adjust comparative expressions ('as much').

× So definitely I prefer read a paper.

✓ So definitely I prefer reading on paper.

After 'prefer' when speaking generally, use the gerund 'reading' or the structure 'prefer to read'. Also 'a paper' is wrong for format; use 'on paper' to refer to paper format. Suggestion: use 'prefer reading' or 'prefer to read' and the phrase 'on paper' for the medium.

× Umm, when I read is some Nobel books, I don't need it to uh, finish it it, but when I want to get some usual information from the book that time I used to focus on books such as diet book or to fix my habit.

✓ When I read some novels, I don't need to finish them quickly, but when I want to get specific information from a book, I focus on books such as diet books or on improving my habits.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'Nobel books' likely means 'novels'. 'I don't need it to finish it' is incorrect; use 'I don't need to finish them quickly' or 'I don't need to finish them'. 'that time I used to focus' misuses 'used to' — here present simple 'I focus' or 'I focus then' is appropriate. 'to fix my habit' should be 'improving my habits'. Maintain present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('novels'), correct infinitive structure ('need to finish'), plural pronouns for books ('them'), and present simple for habits ('I focus').

× Uh, yes, absolutely. I prefer, uh, reading detail. When I just skip some paper, I feel like I couldn't concentrate on the book, so I feel just, I wasted time.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I prefer detailed reading. When I just skim a paper, I feel like I can't concentrate on the book, so I feel like I just wasted time.

'reading detail' is incorrect adjective form; use 'detailed reading' or 'reading in detail'. 'skip some paper' is awkward; 'skim a paper' or 'skim through a paper' is better. Tense consistency: 'couldn't' should be 'can't' to match present habitual context. 'I feel just, I wasted time' needs smoother phrasing: 'I feel like I just wasted time.' Suggestion: use correct adjective forms ('detailed') or adverbial phrases ('in detail'), choose appropriate verbs ('skim'), and keep present tense for general statements ('can't').

× So definitely I want to read the boom detail to get useful information and memorize it.

✓ So definitely I want to read the book in detail to get useful information and memorize it.

Typo and phrase errors: 'boom' should be 'book'. 'read the book detail' is wrong; use 'read the book in detail' or 'read in detail'. The rest is fine. Using 'in detail' is the correct adverbial phrase. Suggestion: correct spelling ('book') and use 'in detail' after 'read'.