Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant with clear reasons and examples. To improve, make sentences slightly more concise, vary vocabulary (e.g., use 'amenities' or 'attractions'), and add a linking phrase to connect the two ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I walk a lot. For everyday trips I prefer walking because many amenities are within walking distance, which is convenient and economical. Moreover, I enjoy scenic walks in parks or mountains since they help me relax and clear my mind.

提案: Good structure with a topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve, combine ideas with a linking word and add a brief specific example (e.g., where you walked or a memory) to make it more vivid.

例: Yes, we often walked around the neighborhood when I was a child. For example, every Sunday evening my family would stroll to the local park for light exercise, which helped my parents unwind after a busy week.

提案: Clear and concise answer with relevant reasons. To improve, use a linking word and add a specific benefit or example (such as better mood or improved fitness) and slightly more varied vocabulary (e.g., 'tranquility' or 'mental well-being').

例: People like walking in parks because the greenery and fresh air promote a sense of calm and improve mood. Additionally, walking there provides mild exercise and a chance to enjoy the peaceful surroundings.

提案: A vivid, well-structured answer with sensory details. To improve further, add a linking phrase to introduce your imagery and include a brief reason why that experience appeals to you personally (e.g., challenge, solitude, or connection with nature).

例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in one of my country's mountain ranges. I picture myself following a winding path, taking in spectacular views and fresh air, because such walks help me disconnect from daily stress and feel more connected to nature.

提案: Good, personal and specific answer. To improve, tighten the phrasing (avoid redundancy), use a linking word to connect actions and results, and end with a concise concluding remark rather than qualifying details that distract from the main point.

例: I recently went for a 30-minute walk with my dog after finishing some assignments. It helped me relieve stress and enjoy a break, although my dog tires more easily now, so we keep our walks short and gentle.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present simple sentences. Use the base verb with present simple: 'I walk a lot.' Remove 'do' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× It's a great way to get around the city because many facilities are within walking distance from one another.

✓ It's a great way to get around the city because many facilities are within walking distance of one another.

The correct preposition after 'within walking distance' is 'of' not 'from'. Use 'within walking distance of' to indicate proximity to each other.

× I also enjoy going on scenic walks, such as in mountains and parks because they make me feel relaxed.

✓ I also enjoy going on scenic walks, such as in the mountains and in parks, because they make me feel relaxed.

When referring to general geographic features like 'mountains' and 'parks', use the definite article 'the' or include 'in' before each noun. Also add a comma before 'because' to separate clauses. This improves clarity and grammaticality.

× Yes, when I was a child, my family and I often went on walks around the neighborhood as a way to get in some exercise.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my family and I often went on walks around the neighborhood as a way to get some exercise.

The idiomatic phrase is 'get some exercise' rather than 'get in some exercise'. Remove 'in' to use the correct collocation in past tense.

× It's also the perfect relaxing activity for my parents because they work hard and they need an activity to unwind and relieve some stress.

✓ It was also the perfect relaxing activity for my parents because they worked hard and needed an activity to unwind and relieve some stress.

The question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense to match context. Change 'is/ work/ need' to 'was/ worked/ needed' for consistency with 'when I was a child'.

× People like to walk in parks because the greenery and fresh air in the parks make people feel relaxed and fulfilled.

✓ People like to walk in parks because the greenery and fresh air in the parks make them feel relaxed and fulfilled.

Avoid repeating 'people'; use the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'people'. This is clearer and avoids unnecessary repetition. Subject-verb agreement is fine, but pronoun usage should be corrected (maps to type 12 as well).

× It's also a great way to do some mild exercise.

✓ It's also a great way to get some mild exercise.

The collocation 'get some exercise' is more natural than 'do some exercise' in this context. Using 'get' fits better with 'a great way to...'. Change the verb to match common usage.

× I imagine myself walking along the pathway, viewing the amazing scenery, breathing in the fresh air and listening to birds chirp.

✓ I imagine myself walking along the pathway, viewing the amazing scenery, breathing in the fresh air, and listening to birds chirp.

In a list of present participles, add a comma before the final 'and' for clarity (Oxford comma). The verb forms are correct; punctuation improves readability.

× I recently went on a 30 minute walk with my dog after I got some of my assignments done.

✓ I recently went on a 30-minute walk with my dog after I got some of my assignments done.

Add a hyphen in the compound adjective '30-minute' modifying 'walk'. The tense is correct (past). Hyphenation is a punctuation/formatting correction that clarifies that '30-minute' modifies 'walk'.

× It was great to relieve some stress and relax while I have fun with my dog.

✓ It was great to relieve some stress and relax while I had fun with my dog.

The main clause is in the past ('It was great'), so the dependent clause should also use past tense: 'had fun' rather than 'have fun' for consistency.

× However, my dog is getting quite old now so he gets tired really easily.

✓ However, my dog is getting quite old now, so he gets tired very easily.

The original sentence is acceptable, but replace 'really' with 'very' for more formal register and add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Tense 'is getting' correctly expresses ongoing change.