Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答案要更直接并用正确的职业表达；句子要简洁，避免重复，并补充具体细节来支持观点。要注意语法（职业要用名词词组、动词时态、介词）和流畅衔接词。比如先给主题句，再用一到两句说明你为什么经常走路，以及走路带来的具体好处。

例: Yes, I walk a lot because my job as an occupational therapist involves moving between wards and the therapy room. For example, I often walk while helping patients with mobility exercises, which keeps me fit and helps me stay energetic during long shifts.

提案: 回答应更自然并注意时态一致（过去时）。避免重复表达相同意思，提供具体例子或频率词来丰富内容，并用衔接词解释原因。

例: Honestly, I didn't go outside much as a child because I preferred playing video games at home. For instance, I often played titles like Grand Theft Auto for hours, which made me feel entertained and less interested in outdoor activities.

提案: 回答结构清晰但要更自然流畅，避免出现与听者无关的代词错误（"you"）。可以用一到两个并列理由并用连接词衔接，加入具体细节如减少压力或锻炼。

例: People like walking in parks because of the pleasant environment: there are trees, flowers and clean air, which helps reduce stress. Also, parks provide open space for exercise, so walking there feels both relaxing and healthy.

提案: 注意地点名称和表达的准确性；句子应简洁且连贯，使用连词说明原因并提供具体活动或时间。避免重复词（如 "around around"）。

例: I'd like to take a long walk in Minghong Pujang Nature Park because it has botanical collections and wide trails. I imagine walking there for about an hour to enjoy the fresh air and observe different plant species.

提案: 回答时用过去时并保持句子紧凑流畅，避免重复词（"and and"）。可以加入具体感受或细节（时间、路线、感受）来丰富描述。

例: Yesterday evening my girlfriend and I walked about two kilometers around the city centre. We passed banks, restaurants and shopping malls, enjoyed the city lights and finished the walk with some Japanese sushi at a mall restaurant.

× Yes, I do work a lot.

✓ Yes, I do work a lot.

原句語法正確，主語 (I) 與助動詞 do 搭配正常，與動詞 work 也一致，無需修改。保持原句。

× I'm an occupational therapy.

✓ I'm an occupational therapist.

原句使用了名詞短語 'occupational therapy'（職業治療，表示一門專業/療法），但說話者要表示職業應使用表示人的詞 'occupational therapist'（職業治療師）。需要改為正確的職業名詞。

× My duty is to go to the wound, go to the training room to help patients free in function during the process.

✓ My duty is to visit wounds and go to the training room to help patients regain function during the process.

原句結構混亂且用詞不當：'go to the wound' 不自然，應為 'visit wounds' 或 'treat wounds'；'help patients free in function' 不合語法，想表達的是幫助病人恢復功能，應用固定搭配 'regain function'。重組句子使語意清晰。

× I have to work a lot.

✓ I have to work a lot.

時態與語法正確，表示習慣或經常性義務，無需修改。

× Walking makes me thinner and stronger.

✓ Walking makes me thinner and stronger.

主語與動詞一致，句子語法正確，無需修改。

× And to be honest, I didn't go outside often during my childhood.

✓ To be honest, I didn't go outside often during my childhood.

原句中開頭的 'And' 為口語連接詞，非必要但不為語法錯誤；此處移除以更正式。主要時態使用過去式 'didn't go' 正確，表示過去習慣。注意此項為輕微結構調整（句子結構問題）。

× I enjoy playing V video games like Grand Thrift and three or four in my house.

✓ I enjoy playing video games like 'Grand Theft Auto' at home for three or four hours.

原句存在用詞與介詞錯誤：'V video games' 多餘且不清楚；遊戲名寫錯 'Grand Thrift' 應為 'Grand Theft Auto'。表示時間長度時應加單位（hours），並用介詞 'at home' 表示地點。因為錯誤屬於介詞與詞彙用法，按介詞錯誤處理。

× I usually enjoy being alone and enjoy playing the video games which made me feel much better than going.

✓ I usually enjoy being alone and playing video games, which makes me feel much better than going out.

原句結構混亂與時態不一致：'enjoy ... and enjoy ...' 冗餘，可合併為 'enjoy being alone and playing video games'；關係子句 'which made me' 時態應與現在習慣一致，改為 'makes me'；'than going' 不完整，應補全為 'than going out'。此為句子結構和時態問題。

× The reason why they liked you jogging or in the parks is that during that atmosphere or environment you can see lots of trees, plants and flowers.

✓ The reason they like jogging in the parks is that in that environment you can see lots of trees, plants and flowers.

原句連接詞與代詞使用不當：'why they liked you jogging or in the parks' 完全錯亂，應為 'they like jogging in the parks'；'during that atmosphere or environment' 語序與介詞錯誤，應為 'in that environment'。也把時態改為一般現在以符合一般陳述。這屬於連接詞/句構錯誤與介詞使用錯誤的混合，主要按句子結構與介詞修正。

× The air is fresh and the atmosphere is good for human.

✓ The air is fresh and the atmosphere is good for people.

原句中 'good for human' 不自然，應使用複數可數名詞 'people' 或 'humans'。這是代詞/名詞使用不當（指代問題），同時保持現在時描述一般事實。建議使用 'people' 更自然。

× I would like to visit Minghong Pujang Nature Park and in the nature park you can see plants as that are in botanical gardens, but also the space is big enough for me to walk around around one hour so I enjoy fresh.

✓ I would like to visit Minghong Pujang Nature Park. In the nature park you can see plants like those in botanical gardens, and there is enough space for me to walk for about one hour, so I can enjoy the fresh air.

原句冗長且包含多處語法錯誤：'plants as that are' 應為 'plants like those'；'space is big enough for me to walk around around one hour' 時表達不當，應為 'enough space for me to walk for about one hour'；'so I enjoy fresh' 不完整，需補 'fresh air'。修正句子結構並保持條理。

× That is yesterday evening, I enjoy the city view with my girlfriend, we walk around 2 kilometers seeing lots of banks, restaurants and and shopping malls.

✓ That was yesterday evening. I enjoyed the city view with my girlfriend. We walked around 2 kilometers, seeing lots of banks, restaurants, and shopping malls.

此處描述的是已發生的事件，需使用過去式：'That was yesterday evening'、'I enjoyed'、'We walked'。原句使用現在時 'enjoy' 和 'walk' 與時間狀語不一致。也修正了重複 'and and' 及句子斷句。

× And we enjoyed our Japanese sushi in the shopping center.

✓ We enjoyed Japanese sushi at the shopping center.

原句 'our Japanese sushi' 可改為更自然表達 'Japanese sushi'；介詞使用 'at the shopping center' 更自然。這裡主要是形容詞/名詞用法及介詞選擇的改進。