Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify vocabulary and grammar, be concise, and use a clear topic sentence. Avoid confusing 'kids' with 'keys'. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word to explain why you don't carry many keys.

例: No, I don't carry many keys. It is inconvenient, and because I have a poor memory I often forget them, so I try to keep only the most necessary keys with me.

提案: Start with a direct answer, give a brief specific example, and use linking words to connect reason and consequence. Correct repetition and verb forms.

例: Yes, I have lost my keys before. For example, last month I misplaced my apartment key and had to call my roommate to let me in; because of this, I now keep a spare key with a family member.

提案: Answer directly and focus on the present frequency. Use clearer time references and reduce hesitations. Mention current situation and a brief comparison with the past using a linking phrase.

例: I used to lock myself out more often when I was a child, but now it happens rarely because we have keyless entry systems such as fingerprint locks at home.

提案: Give a clear stance, then qualify it with reasons using linking words. Avoid contradictory phrases and repetition. Provide a specific condition when it might be acceptable.

例: Generally I would not leave my keys with a neighbour because of security concerns. However, if I trusted a neighbour very well and we had an agreement, I might leave a spare key with them for emergencies.

× Actually not, because bring a lot of kids is not convenient for me and I have poor memories so I can't remember to bring kids and always lose them, so not.

✓ Actually not, because bringing a lot of keys is not convenient for me and I have a poor memory so I can't remember to bring keys and I always lose them.

Errors: 'bring a lot of kids' and 'bring kids' are incorrect word choices/plural confusion; 'memories' should be 'memory'; missing gerund after 'because' (verb should be 'bringing'). Suggestion: use the gerund 'bringing' after 'because', use the correct noun 'keys' instead of 'kids', use singular 'memory' for the uncountable noun, and add 'I' before 'always lose them' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Yes I have. As I mentioned I have poor memory so I can't remember something. I always lose my keys or some essential things. I think it's it's a big problem for me, but I will change it.

✓ Yes, I have. As I mentioned, I have a poor memory so I can't remember things. I always lose my keys or other essential items. I think it's a big problem for me, but I will change it.

Errors: missing commas for clarity; 'something' is vague and unnatural—use 'things'; 'some essential things' -> 'other essential items'; double 'it's'. Suggestion: use 'things' or more specific nouns, remove duplicate words, and keep consistent noun choices ('memory' singular, 'items' instead of 'things'). Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Well, yes, I do, but it's in my childhood cause, uh, in the past we always use the keys to, uh, open or close our door. But, uh, at present we have the technology products we can use the, uh, finger to open.

✓ Well, yes, I do, but that happened in my childhood, because in the past we always used keys to open or close our door. But at present we have technological products and we can use a fingerprint to open it.

Errors: 'it's in my childhood' is incorrect phrasing; 'use' should be past tense 'used' because referring to the past; 'cause' -> 'because' for formality; 'the technology products' -> 'technological products'; 'use the finger' -> 'use a fingerprint' or 'use your finger' and add object 'it' for the door. Suggestion: match tense to time references, use appropriate nouns and articles, and make phrases clear. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Well, I don't think so. And I think it it depends. If you have the good relationship with you never, maybe it's a good choice. But if you don't have a a strong relationship with your neighbor, maybe it's a trouble for them and it's always a problem.

✓ Well, I don't think so. I think it depends. If you have a good relationship with your neighbor, it may be a good choice. But if you don't have a strong relationship with your neighbor, it may cause trouble for them and be a problem.

Errors: duplicate words 'it it' and 'a a'; incorrect pronoun/order 'with you never' is meaningless; wrong article 'the good relationship' should be 'a good relationship'; 'maybe it's a trouble' -> 'may cause trouble' or 'may be a problem'. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use correct articles ('a' for countable relationship), place pronouns correctly ('with your neighbor'), and use natural collocations like 'cause trouble' or 'be a problem'. Grammar problem type ID: 12}]}} } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } } }