Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise, use correct number words and a linking phrase to add a brief reason or comment. Keep it under 5 sentences and avoid listing with punctuation errors.

例: I usually carry about four keys: one for my car, two for my house doors, and one for a small safe in my closet. Because I drive and live alone, I need all of them with me most days.

提案: Be direct about whether you have lost keys, use past tense correctly, and avoid contradictory or unclear phrases. Provide a short specific example or timeframe and a linking word to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I lost my keys once when I was a child, but I haven't lost them since. Nowadays I keep them attached to my wallet, so it's unlikely I'll misplace them.

提案: This answer is confusing and contains contradictions. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rarely' or 'never'), and give a concise reason with one linking word. Avoid irrelevant details.

例: No, I rarely lock myself out because my keys are always attached to my wallet. Therefore, since I usually put my wallet in my bag, I can’t forget the keys easily.

提案: Answer the question directly and keep the example relevant. Explain briefly why leaving keys with a neighbour might be risky and offer a clear alternative if needed. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: No, I don't think it's a good idea because it could create security or liability issues if something goes wrong. Instead, I prefer to use a trusted family member or a secure key-safe box near the house.

× I carry about four keys, one for my car, 2 for my house doors, and the last one is for a safe in my closet.

✓ I carry about four keys: one for my car, two for my house doors, and the last one for a safe in my closet.

Use consistent pluralization and number format. '2' should be written as a word 'two' in formal speech transcripts; colon improves clarity. Also remove unnecessary 'is' before 'for a safe' to keep parallel structure. ID:1

× I may have lost my key, but it must have been quite a long time ago as when I was a child I will recall the last time I lost any keys.

✓ I may have lost my key, but it must have been quite a long time ago because I can recall the last time I lost any keys when I was a child.

Incorrect modal/time reference: 'will recall' is wrong for a past memory; use 'can recall' or 'remember'. Also 'as when' is awkward; use 'because' and place the time clause correctly. The main modal 'may have' is acceptable. ID:4

× I typically carry all keys with my wallet so it's unlikely to lose my keys.

✓ I typically carry all the keys with my wallet, so it's unlikely that I will lose my keys.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'keys' when referring to a specific set. Also sentence lacks subject for 'lose my keys' and needs 'that I will' to make clause grammatical and match tense/modal meaning. ID:22

× No, I heartily forget my keys because my key ring is attached to my wallet and sometimes I attach this bundle to my bag without the key, including my car and a wallet.

✓ No, I hardly ever forget my keys because my key ring is attached to my wallet, and sometimes I attach this bundle to my bag; I always keep my car key and wallet together.

Wrong adverb 'heartily' (means warmly) instead of 'hardly' or 'hardly ever' (meaning rarely). The rest of the sentence is confusing: 'without the key, including my car and a wallet' is unclear. Rephrase to state that car key and wallet are kept together. Use semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses clearly. ID:13

× No, I don't think that's a good idea because if something bad happens it can create a responsibility issue. I prefer to leave my kids with my relative even though they live about 30 minutes away from my home.

✓ No, I don't think that's a good idea because if something bad happens it could create a liability issue. I prefer to leave my keys with a relative, even though they live about 30 minutes away from my home.

Context shows question is about leaving keys with a neighbour; student answered about children by mistake. 'Responsibility issue' is odd; 'liability issue' is better. Pronoun 'they' ambiguous—make subject clear: change to 'leave my keys with a relative' to match context and correct pronoun reference. Also 'could' is more appropriate than 'can' for hypothetical. ID:12