Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give one or two concise reasons with specific details. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and avoid unclear words (e.g. 'Brandy' seems wrong).

例: My favourite food is biryani. I love it because it is richly spiced and very flavorful, and it reminds me of family gatherings where it was served fresh and homemade.

提案: Clarify meaning and use appropriate vocabulary. Do not include irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g. 'drunk' is inappropriate); say 'young' or 'a child'. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific examples of foods you liked and a reason. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

例: When I was young, I preferred fast food. For example, I often ate pasta, pizza and spicy snacks because they tasted exciting and were easy to get when I was with my friends.

提案: Answer the seasonal question directly. State whether your diet changes by season and give one specific example of a seasonal change or contrast. Use correct tense and concise linking words (e.g. 'however', 'in summer', 'during winter').

例: Yes, my food choices change with the seasons. For instance, in summer I eat more salads and cold dishes, while in winter I prefer hearty traditional meals like stews and biryani because they keep me warm.

提案: Give a clear statement about change and a reason. Use correct grammar to say whether your preference has changed and explain why with one specific detail (e.g. health, family habits). Avoid fragmented phrases and repetition.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. As a child I ate a lot of fast food, but now I prefer traditional homemade dishes because they are healthier and remind me of family meals.

× Yes, I even prefer traditional foods instead of the fast food.

✓ Yes, I prefer traditional foods to fast food.

The original uses unnecessary 'even' and an article error ('the fast food'); also 'instead of' is awkward here. Use 'prefer A to B' and omit 'the'. This corrects pronoun/article misuse and makes the sentence natural.

× In the traditional food I like them for most biryani because it have a spicy as well as they are according to my taste so Brandy is my favorite food.

✓ Among traditional foods, I like biryani the most because it is spicy and suits my taste, so biryani is my favorite dish.

Multiple errors: 'them' incorrectly refers to 'traditional food', subject-verb agreement ('it have' -> 'it is'), incorrect plural references ('they are'), and 'Brandy' likely a mispronunciation of 'biryani'. Rephrase to 'Among traditional foods' and use singular 'it is' and 'suits my taste' for clarity.

× Yes, when I was drunk I mostly preferred the fast food because at that age I like most of the pasta as well as the pizza zingers.

✓ When I was young I mostly preferred fast food because at that age I liked most pasta dishes as well as pizza.

'Drunk' is incorrect word choice for 'young'. Maintain past tense consistently: 'preferred' and 'liked'. Remove 'the' before 'fast food' and replace 'pizza zingers' with 'pizza' or 'pizza varieties' for naturalness.

× So many spicy things I eat and I prefer more than that of the traditional.

✓ I used to eat many spicy things, and I preferred them more than traditional foods.

Word order is incorrect; use 'I used to eat' for habitual past actions. 'Prefer more than that of the traditional' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'preferred them more than traditional foods' to compare properly.

× Yes, in it's can vary and change from time to time as years years when I was in my childhood.

✓ Yes, it can vary and change over the years since my childhood.

Original misuses contraction 'it's' and has redundant words. Use 'it can vary' and 'over the years' to indicate change across time.

× I like to most of the fast foods but at currently I would like to eat the traditional foods because they are more healthy for my.

✓ I used to like most fast foods, but currently I prefer to eat traditional foods because they are healthier for me.

Use past habit 'used to like' and present 'currently I prefer'. 'Most of the fast foods' -> 'most fast foods'. 'More healthy' -> comparative 'healthier'. 'For my' -> 'for me'. Maintain proper tense and pronoun.

× Yes, it's what changed when I was a child.

✓ Yes, it changed since I was a child.

Original mixes tenses and has odd structure. Use simple past 'changed' or present perfect 'has changed since' for ongoing result. 'It changed since I was a child' is concise and appropriate.

× I have no I'm I have a unfamiliar about the healthy food as well as in Butte at constitution.

✓ I was not familiar with healthy food when I was a child.

The original is ungrammatical and contains fragments. Use 'was not familiar with' to express lack of familiarity in the past. Remove unclear phrases like 'Butte at constitution' which seem irrelevant.

× I like to prefer the traditional food because they are mostly a homemade and and they're healthy for the.

✓ I prefer traditional foods because they are mostly homemade and healthy for me.

Use 'prefer' without 'to like to prefer'. 'Traditional food' -> 'traditional foods' for general statement. 'A homemade' is wrong; use 'homemade'. Finish with 'healthy for me'. Remove duplicate 'and'.