Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, natural and well-structured with a topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid minor redundancy, add a linking phrase to connect ideas, and include a brief specific example of a type of sushi you enjoy to show range of vocabulary.

例: I like sushi because I enjoy the delicate taste of fresh fish and vinegared rice. For example, salmon nigiri is my favorite, and I usually eat it at a nearby Japanese restaurant or make simple maki rolls at home, which feels light yet satisfying.

提案: The answer has good intention but contains many errors and unclear words (e.g., “legs, deals”), sentence fragments, repetition and awkward phrasing. To improve, correct vocabulary, use complete sentences with a clear topic sentence, add specific examples, and link ideas with connectors. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: When I was young, I liked simple home-cooked meals because they were comforting and reminded me of family gatherings. For example, my grandmother’s chicken stew, rich in savory flavor, was a particular favorite. I also enjoyed sweet snacks like cookies after school.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is vague and has grammatical issues. Improve by stating a clear topic sentence, giving two specific seasonal examples, and using linking words to make it cohesive. Avoid phrases like “and so on.”

例: Yes, I eat different foods in different seasons. For example, I eat more berries and chilled salads in summer, while in winter I prefer root vegetables and stews because they are warming and in season.

提案: The answer contains useful content but is marred by fragmented sentences and unclear phrasing. To improve, begin with a clear topic sentence, link cause and effect with connectors, correct grammar, and be concise. Provide one specific example of a childhood favorite and one current favorite with a brief reason.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. I used to love sweets like candy, but now I prefer savory meals such as grilled salmon with vegetables because my tastes have matured and I’ve become more health-conscious.

× 'Student: I love simple home cooked meals, legs, deals and rice when I was young because they tasted comforting and reminded me of family gatherings.'

✓ 'Student: I loved simple home-cooked meals, legumes, and rice when I was young because they tasted comforting and reminded me of family gatherings.'

'The original sentence uses incorrect words "legs, deals" which appear to be misspellings. "Legumes" (beans, lentils) fits context. Also verb tense should match past time marker "when I was young," so use "loved." Add a hyphen in "home-cooked" as a compound adjective. Suggestion: choose the correct noun (legumes) and keep past tense consistency.'

× 'Student: For example, my grandmother's chicken Stew was a favorite Stew to its reach.'

✓ 'Student: For example, my grandmother's chicken stew was a favorite because of its rich flavor.'

'The original has incorrect and unclear phrasing "favorite Stew to its reach." This is a sentence structure and word-choice issue. Replace with clear adjectival phrase "because of its rich flavor." Also use lowercase for "stew." Suggestion: express reasons with "because of" plus noun phrase.'

× 'Student: Savory flavor.'

✓ 'Student: It had a savory flavor.'

'Savory flavor' is a sentence fragment without a subject and finite verb. To be a complete sentence, add subject and verb: "It had a savory flavor." This keeps past tense consistent with the surrounding context.'

× 'Student: I also enjoy sweet snacks.'

✓ 'Student: I also enjoyed sweet snacks.'

'The rest of this response refers to childhood (past), so the tense should be past. Using present tense "enjoy" creates a mismatch. Use "enjoyed" to maintain consistent past narration.'

× 'Student: Of course, because in different times there are so many variety kinds of foods, such as vegetables, fruits and so on.'

✓ 'Student: Of course; at different times of the year there are so many different kinds of foods, such as vegetables and fruits.'

'"In different times" is awkward; the natural preposition is "at different times of the year." "Variety kinds" is incorrect collocation; use "different kinds" or "a variety of foods." Also remove the redundant "and so on." Suggestion: use "at different times of the year" and "different kinds of foods." '},{