Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and confident. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (e.g., “uh”), and combine ideas to be natural and effective. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word to improve coherence.

例: Not really. Most buildings near my home are about five storeys high, although I live in a relatively tall block of flats. For example, the street opposite has mainly low-rise apartments and small shops, so the area feels more residential than urban.

提案: Reduce repetition and remove fillers. Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., because, so, for example) to make the answer more precise and fluent.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I walk through the historical city centre because the architecture is very detailed. For example, I recently photographed a 19th-century facade with intricate carvings and colourful tiles.

提案: Good content and clear reason, but tighten language to avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific detail about why you want to visit (a collection, room, or feature) using a linking word.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Hermitage in Saint Petersburg because I haven't been there for many years and its interiors are stunning. In particular, I want to see the Winter Palace rooms and the old master paintings, which are famous worldwide.

提案: Answer is natural and gives personal preference, but avoid informal phrases like “some kind of a vibe.” Use one linking word to connect reason and provide a clear supporting detail (e.g., gardening or privacy).

例: Not really, I prefer living in a cottage rather than a tall flat because I value having my own garden and outdoor space. For example, I enjoy gardening and spending time outside, so a cottage would suit my lifestyle better.

× I would really like to visit Hermitage.

✓ I would really like to visit the Hermitage.

The Hermitage is a specific, unique museum and requires the definite article 'the' before its name in English. Use 'the Hermitage' to refer to that particular institution.

× I haven't been there for a long time, so I would really like to visit it one more time because it is really beautiful inside and outside.

✓ I haven't been there for a long time, so I would really like to visit it again because it is really beautiful inside and out.

Use 'again' instead of 'one more time' for more natural English in this context; also 'inside and out' is the idiomatic expression. The tense 'haven't been' is correct, so only wording is adjusted for naturalness while keeping tense.

× I would say it's only buildings around 5 floors, but I do live in a tall block of flats.

✓ I would say there are only buildings of around five floors, but I do live in a tall block of flats.

The original sentence mixes 'it's' (singular) with 'buildings' (plural). Replacing 'it's' with 'there are' matches plural 'buildings'. Also change 'around 5 floors' to 'around five floors' for number style and 'of' to show building height.

× Especially when I'm having a walk in the city center, uh, in the historical city center.

✓ Especially when I'm taking a walk in the city centre, in the historic city centre.

In English, the common collocation is 'take a walk' rather than 'have a walk'. Also 'historic' is the more natural adjective and 'centre' spelling depends on dialect; keep consistent. This corrects verb collocation and word choice while maintaining present progressive.

× And of course the architecture and the buildings are amazing.

✓ And of course the architecture and the buildings are amazing.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included to indicate no adjective/adverb error.

× I would love to live in a cottage because I can have my own garden and always go outside whenever I want, and that's some kind of a vibe.

✓ I would love to live in a cottage because I could have my own garden and always go outside whenever I want; that's kind of the vibe.

Use 'could' to express possibility/desire (more natural here), and 'kind of the vibe' is a clearer phrasing. Replaced 'some kind of a vibe' with 'kind of the vibe' to correct awkward article use and improve naturalness.