Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and pronunciation errors, be concise, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat ideas). Use linking words if you add details.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small town made up mostly of houses and two- or three-storey apartment blocks, so the skyline is quite low.

提案: Make your answer more natural by starting with a direct response, correct grammar (plural/singular, articles), and add a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really. I prefer photographing people and nature because they feel more expressive and lively, so buildings usually don’t attract my attention.

提案: Include a clear topic sentence, correct article use (“the Eiffel Tower”), and give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and keep it within 3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I’ve seen it in many films and TV shows, and because of that I imagine it would feel romantic and iconic in person.

提案: Use a clearer topic sentence and correct grammar (prepositions, verb forms). Explain one or two specific reasons with linking words and avoid repetition. Keep sentences concise.

例: No, I wouldn’t. I prefer living in a two-storey house because tall buildings can be crowded and waiting for lifts during busy times would be tiring.

× No, there is no toll bank buildings near my home because I live in a small town which mainly have houses and small apartments which is two or three floors.

✓ No, there are no tall bank buildings near my home because I live in a small town which mainly has houses and small apartments that are two or three floors.

Multiple issues: 'there is no' with plural 'buildings' should be 'there are no' (subject-verb agreement and 'there be' structure). 'toll' is a spelling error and should be 'tall' (word choice, but treated here as article errors per list). 'bank buildings' likely intended but keep; 'which mainly have' should be 'which mainly has' because the subject is 'a small town' (present tense subject-verb agreement). 'which is two or three floors' describes 'small apartments' (plural), so use 'that are two or three floors'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and use correct relative clauses: 'There are no tall bank buildings near my home because I live in a small town that mainly has houses and small apartments that are two or three floors.'

× No, because I'm more interested in taking pictures of peoples and nature.

✓ No, because I'm more interested in taking pictures of people and nature.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural noun for persons. Use 'people' when referring to persons in general. Suggestion: avoid adding 's' to 'people' unless referring to 'peoples' meaning distinct ethnic groups, which is not intended here.

× Building doesn't catch my attention so I don't think I really need to take a photo of buildings.

✓ Buildings don't catch my attention, so I don't think I really need to take photos of them.

The subject 'Buildings' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' not 'doesn't' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'a photo of buildings' is awkward; use plural 'photos' or refer back with a pronoun: 'photos of them.' Suggestion: keep number consistent and use commas to separate clauses.

× Yes, I would like to visit Eiffel Tower, which is in Paris.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower, which is in Paris.

Landmarks like 'Eiffel Tower' require the definite article 'the'. Omit or add articles correctly before unique proper nouns when convention requires it. Suggestion: use 'the Eiffel Tower.'

× I have seen it in so many movies and TV shows, so I think it would be so romantic to feel it in person.

✓ I have seen it in so many movies and TV shows, so I think it would be so romantic to see it in person.

'Feel it in person' is unnatural when referring to seeing a landmark; use 'see it in person.' 'Feel' is not a verb-participle error but an incorrect verb choice. Suggestion: use verbs that collocate with landmarks: 'see' or 'visit.'

× So I think one day in future I'll go there.

✓ So I think one day in the future I'll go there.

Missing article 'the' in the phrase 'in the future.' Use 'in the future' or 'one day in the future.' Suggestion: include 'the' for correct idiomatic expression.

× No, I'm a person who is interested into two-story building and waiting for the escalator in a busy day would be so tiring and I so I prefer houses more.

✓ No, I'm someone who is interested in two-story buildings, and waiting for an escalator on a busy day would be very tiring, so I prefer houses.

'Interested into' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'interested in.' 'Two-story building' should be plural 'two-story buildings' or rephrased; match number. 'Waiting for the escalator' change to 'waiting for an escalator' or 'waiting for the escalators' and preposition 'on a busy day' not 'in.' Remove duplicated 'I' and awkward 'prefer houses more' to simply 'prefer houses.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions and simplify sentence structure for clarity.