Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer first, then give clear supporting details. Remove hesitations and repeated words, use correct nouns (e.g., "solar" seems incorrect; use "tall" or "modern") and correct possessive form ("my home"). Use linking words like "also" or "in addition" to connect ideas. Limit to up to 4 sentences.

例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. For example, older office blocks owned by private companies stand close to my neighborhood, and in addition there are newer condominium towers built in the last few years.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and correct grammar: use past or present simple consistently, use countable/uncountable forms ("take photos of buildings"), and replace unclear words like "articulator" with "architecture" or "design." Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to explain purpose. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Sometimes. I take photos of buildings when I see attractive or unusual architecture because I like to study design. I usually share the best pictures on social media and save others in a personal album for reference.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific vocabulary. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Correct grammar ("one of them is Marina Bay Sands") and replace unclear words ("liao artiques") with correct terms like "the architecture and attractions." Use linking words like "because" and provide one brief detail about what you want to see.

例: Yes, one building I would like to visit is Marina Bay Sands in Singapore because I admire its striking architecture. I especially want to see the rooftop infinity pool and the observation deck for views of the city.

提案: Start with a direct, complete sentence: "No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building." Then give one or two specific reasons in clear sentences using correct tenses and vocabulary (e.g., "I lived in a dorm in a high-rise during university and felt isolated"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid repetition.

例: No, I would not like to live in a tall building. When I lived in a high-rise dorm at university, I often felt isolated because there were fewer shared spaces, so I prefer living in lower-rise buildings with a stronger sense of community.

× Yes, there are many or there are solar buildings near my, near my homes, uh, including, uh, the building owned by private companies, which is, uh, located for a long time, for a long time.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, including buildings owned by private companies that have been there for a long time.

The student mixed singular and plural ('homes' vs 'my home') and used awkward phrasing 'or there are solar buildings'. 'Homes' should be singular 'home' after 'my'. 'Located for a long time' is corrected to the present perfect 'have been there for a long time' to indicate continued existence. Also 'tall' likely intended instead of 'solar' or 'solar' was an error; clarified to 'tall buildings'. Suggestions: choose consistent singular/plural forms (my home vs my homes), use present perfect for actions or states that began in the past and continue to now, and avoid filler words.

× Sometimes I will take photo for the building.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of buildings.

The original uses future-like 'will' incorrectly and wrong noun form 'photo' and preposition 'for'. Use simple present 'take' for habitual action, plural 'photos' for general photos, and preposition 'of' to indicate object. Suggestion: use simple present for habits, pluralize countable nouns when general, and use correct prepositions.

× When I saw the building that beautiful and have the unique articulator.

✓ When I see a building that is beautiful and has unique architecture.

Tense and word choice issues: 'saw' should be present 'see' to match habitual context; 'that beautiful' needs verb 'is' and 'have' should be 'has' for third person singular. 'articulator' is incorrect word; 'architecture' fits. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, choose correct noun (architecture), and match tense to context (present for habitual actions).

× I usually take a photo of them to share with the social media and my book.

✓ I usually take photos of them to share on social media and in my album.

Pronoun 'them' refers to buildings (plural) so 'photos of them' is okay but 'a photo' should be plural. Prepositions 'on social media' and 'in my album' are standard. 'my book' is unclear; 'album' or 'photo book' is clearer. Suggestion: match number between noun and pronoun, and use standard prepositions for platforms.

× Yes, there are many buildings that I would like to visit, but one of them are uh Marina Bay Sands, which is uh located in Singapore.

✓ Yes, there are many buildings that I would like to visit, but one of them is Marina Bay Sands, which is located in Singapore.

'One of them' is singular so the verb must be 'is', not 'are'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement when using phrases like 'one of them'.

× I would like to, I would like to visit there because uh I love, I want, I want to to see the liao artiques.

✓ I would like to visit it because I want to see the local attractions.

The sentence repeats phrases and mixes words 'liao artiques' which are unclear; likely intended 'local attractions'. Use 'visit it' (or 'visit there' is less natural) and 'want to see'. Remove repetition. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases and choose clear vocabulary.

× No, I'm not because I used to to stay in the in the high building, which is uh dorm when I was in university, but I don't like if I didn't like is really because it's it's making me feel more alone when I live in the high building, I prefer.

✓ No. I am not (interested) because I used to stay in a high-rise dorm when I was at university, and I did not like it — living in a tall building made me feel more alone.

Multiple issues: unnecessary repetition, incorrect article use ('the high building' -> 'a high-rise dorm'), wrong tense and structure ('I don't like if I didn't like' is incorrect). Use past tense 'did not like' to describe past feelings, and 'made me feel' for past effect. Clarify 'dorm' with 'dormitory' or 'dorm'. Suggestion: use clear tense consistency, correct articles ('a high-rise dorm'), remove fillers and repetitions, and state feelings clearly.