Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول تنظيم إجابتك بشكل أوضح واستخدام جمل أقصر وأكثر دقة. ابدأ بجملة موضوع مباشرة ثم أضف تفصيلاً واحداً أو مثالًا محددًا. تجنب التكرار ('take, take' و'beautiful, a few, a beautiful')، ولا تستخدم كلمات عامة مثل 'applications' بدون توضيح. اعمل على الطلاقة بتقليل ترديد الكلمات وملء الفراغات الصوتية (مثل 'uh').

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of views. For example, when I reach a viewpoint in my city, I often take a clear photo and send it to my family via WhatsApp to share the scenery.

提案: كن واضحًا في اختيارك (urban أو rural) وقدم سببًا محددًا يدعم رأيك. استخدم روابط بسيطة (because, so, for example) لتوضيح العلاقة بين الأفكار. تجنّب الأخطاء اللغوية الكبيرة والكلمات غير الواضحة مثل 'orias fuse' و'out can't'. تدرب على قول جملة منظمة واحدة ثم جملة دعم واحدة مع مثال محدد.

例: I prefer urban views because I live in a big city and I enjoy photographing modern architecture and busy streets. For example, I like capturing skyline shots from rooftops when I visit new neighborhoods.

提案: أجب بصراحة وببنية واضحة: قدم رأيًا مباشرًا متبوعًا بأسباب محددة ودليل واحد. تجنّب التكرار والتهوين في النطق (مثل 'a lot a lot a lot' و'refuse' بدلاً من 'views'). استخدم مفردات صحيحة ومناسبة ('has' بدلاً من 'doesn't has') وحاول ذكر مثال عن مكان زرته أو تود زيارته ليدعم كلامك.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see different landscapes and cultures. For example, I enjoyed photographing coastal towns when I visited Turkey, which felt very different from places in Yemen.

× Uh, actually when I go to the high places, I like to take, take a picture and send it in my applications to my friends or my family.

✓ Uh, actually when I go to high places, I like taking pictures and sending them in my messages to my friends or family.

The student repeated words and used noun forms awkwardly. Use the gerund after 'like' (taking) to express a habitual activity. Use plural 'pictures' to match 'high places', and 'sending them in my messages' is clearer than 'send it in my applications'. Also remove unnecessary articles: 'go to high places' not 'the high places'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× When I send a beautiful, a few, a beautiful photo and my application.

✓ When I send a few beautiful photos and my messages.

The original mixes singular and plural incorrectly and repeats words. Use 'a few' with plural noun 'photos'. 'Application' seems wrong in context; 'messages' fits better for sending pictures to people. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I prefer all orias fuse because I live in a big city so I always try to cover views in new places and and out can't inside countries so when I go to to another place I sometimes I find a beautiful a beautiful.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I live in a big city, so I always try to photograph views in new places both inside and outside the country. When I go to another place, I sometimes find a beautiful view.

The original sentence is jumbled with mispronounced words and repetitions. 'All orias fuse' likely intended 'urban areas'. Clarify and reorder ideas: state preference, reason, and actions clearly. Use 'both inside and outside the country' for contrast. Remove repeated words and finish the thought with 'a beautiful view'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer refuse in another country because I live in Yemen, Yemen, Yemen doesn't has a lot of a lot a lot of beautiful places.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I live in Yemen. Yemen doesn't have many beautiful places.

Pronoun/noun misuse: 'refuse' is wrong for 'views'. Repetition of 'Yemen' should be once. Use 'doesn't have' (do-support) not 'doesn't has'. Use 'many' with countable plural 'places' instead of 'a lot a lot a lot'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× So I I always travel to to a lot to many countries around the world and to discover to the to discover new places.

✓ So I always travel to many countries around the world to discover new places.

There are repetitions and unnecessary prepositions. Use 'travel to many countries' (no 'a lot to many'). Remove repeated 'to discover'. The verb forms are correct for first person, but clean up repetition and structure. Grammar problem type ID:2