Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên nói rõ và mạch lạc hơn bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ừ/ìm. Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, and, also) và chọn từ vựng chính xác (take photos, relieve stress, preserve memories). Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of landscapes because they help me relieve stress and preserve memories. For example, when I visit a beach or a mountain, I take wide shots to capture the scenery and close-ups of interesting details. I also edit a few photos and share them on social media to remember the trip.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và nói nửa chừng. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer urban views) rồi nêu 2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, for example). Tránh dùng 'funnier' cho tính chất của thành phố — dùng 'more enjoyable' hoặc 'more vibrant'. Hoàn thành ý thay vì ngắt quãng.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a vibrant atmosphere and more entertainment options. For example, there are many shopping malls, cinemas, and interesting street scenes that make city photography lively. Also, the variety of architecture provides diverse subjects for photos.

提案: Nên trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc: nêu lựa chọn, giải thích lý do cụ thể và thêm ví dụ ngắn. Tránh cấu trúc lủng củng và lỗi ngữ pháp (’go into the foreign’ → ‘travel abroad’). Sửa các cụm không tự nhiên (‘in a landscape in vibe’ → ‘the local atmosphere’). Giữ 2-3 câu súc tích.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Vietnam, because I haven't had the chance to travel abroad yet and Vietnam already offers spectacular landscapes. For instance, places like Ha Long Bay and Sapa have unique scenery and friendly locals, which make domestic travel very rewarding.

× For me, I'm pictures something like taking a photos of a lens, a beautiful landscape can help me to release my stress as I can umm, as I can save the memories and I can and I can also umm, post the pictures on social media as.

✓ For me, taking pictures of a beautiful landscape helps me to relieve my stress because I can save memories and also post the pictures on social media.

The original sentence misuses 'pictures' after 'I'm' and 'taking' forms. Use the gerund 'taking pictures' as the subject. 'Helps' requires third person singular agreement. 'Release my stress' is improved to 'relieve my stress' for natural collocation. Remove redundant fillers and repeated phrases. Suggestion: form the sentence with a clear subject ('taking pictures') and a singular verb ('helps').

× I would like to choose the cities because I I I believe that living in the cities is more interesting and funnier than living in a countryside as peop as in the cities there are a lot of shopping malls and cinemas.

✓ I would choose the cities because I believe that living in a city is more interesting and more fun than living in the countryside, as there are a lot of shopping malls and cinemas in cities.

Errors: 'would like to choose' is awkward; 'would choose' is simpler. 'Living in the cities is' should be 'living in a city is' to match general statement and requires third person singular 'is'. 'Funnier' is grammatically comparative but not natural for 'fun'; use 'more fun'. 'a countryside' is incorrect; use 'the countryside' or 'countryside' without article. Also corrected word order for clarity. Suggestion: use singular form for a general habit ('a city') and use 'is' for third-person singular verbs.

× They have a lot of.

✓ There are a lot of them.

The fragment 'They have a lot of' is incomplete and uses a pronoun without an object. Use 'There are a lot of them' or 'They have a lot' followed by a noun. Suggestion: complete the thought by specifying what 'a lot of' refers to or use 'there are' + noun phrase.

× I enjoy views in my in Vietnam as I have never had a chance to go into the foreign and for me traveling in Vietnam is enough because I have seen many like spectacular landscape and I met a lot of friendly people too in a landscape in vibe.

✓ I enjoy views in Vietnam because I have never had a chance to go abroad, and for me traveling in Vietnam is enough because I have seen many spectacular landscapes and met a lot of friendly people.

Errors: remove extra 'in' before Vietnam. 'Go into the foreign' is incorrect; use 'go abroad' or 'go to foreign countries.' 'A landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when referring to many, and 'in a landscape in vibe' is ungrammatical and removed. Also change 'I met' to parallel with present perfect if needed; here simple past 'met' is acceptable for past encounters but better to keep tense consistent: 'have met' if emphasizing experience. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in Vietnam', 'go abroad') and plural nouns when referring to multiple items.