Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two supporting details using linking words. Mention what kinds of views you prefer and why to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I like capturing landscapes and cityscapes because they show interesting light and colors, and I often take photos when I travel to remember the places I visit.

提案: Expand slightly with a reason and a linking word to make the answer more informative and coherent. Keep it to one or two short sentences to meet the natural & effective rule.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the dynamic architecture and street scenes, and the variety of subjects makes photography more exciting.

提案: Correct minor errors and avoid fillers. Provide a specific reason and an example, using linking words for clarity. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'views' not 'reviews', 'has' not 'have').

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful landscapes and cultural sites; for instance, I often visit the coast and mountain areas to photograph unique scenery.

× Yes, I like I like photographing and I like journey.

✓ Yes, I like photographing and I like traveling.

The sentence repeats 'I like' and uses the noun 'journey' incorrectly. 'Journey' as a noun is countable and would need an article ('a journey') or a different form. Using the gerund 'traveling' (or 'travel') matches the parallel structure with 'photographing' and is more natural. Also remove the duplicate 'I like'. Suggestion: Use parallel gerunds for multiple activities (e.g., 'I like photographing and traveling').

× I prefer reviews in my own country because, uh, my country is so beautiful and have a lot of places uh, for travel and so nice views.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country is so beautiful and has a lot of places to visit and many nice views.

The student said 'reviews' instead of 'views' (word choice) and used the verb 'have' with singular subject 'my country' which requires 'has' (subject-verb agreement / singular). Also 'for travel' is unnatural; use 'to visit' or 'for traveling'. The corrected sentence fixes noun choice, verb agreement, and prepositional phrase: use 'has' with 'my country' and 'places to visit' for clarity.