Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法和表达要更自然，避免重复并修正词序与搭配错误。回答应有清晰的主题句，随后用一到两句具体细节支持。可修正动词形式（photo → take/photograph），以及介词和限定词（a special architecture → a special building）。

例: Yes, I love taking photos. I often photograph interesting buildings and landscapes to remember special moments, and I usually share my best shots with friends and family. Photography has become one of my favourite hobbies.

提案: 内容清楚但有冗余与不自然的短语（feel in no spirit → feel low/unenergetic）。可用连接词简洁表达原因，并给出具体例子（如山景、田野）。避免重复同一信息两次。

例: It depends on my mood. When I feel stressed or low, I prefer rural scenery like fields or mountains because the peace and fresh air help me relax and clear my mind.

提案: 回答要更具体并修正冗余（prefer both of them, but ... much more prefer → choose one clearly or explain balance). 用一两句说明具体原因或举例，比如提到某个国家或景点，并用连词使表达更连贯。

例: I enjoy views in both my country and abroad, but lately I prefer scenery in other countries because I love discovering different cultures and landscapes, such as the historic streets of Europe or the tropical beaches of Southeast Asia.

× I enjoy taking different pictures to remember a special moment where a special architecture.

✓ I enjoy taking different pictures to remember a special moment or a special building.

句子结构和用词不当。原句中使用 where 引导的从句不正确，且 architecture 通常指“建筑学”或抽象概念，而非具体建筑物。应改为 or 连接两个并列名词短语，且用 building 或 structure 表示具体建筑。建议把 where 改为 or，并用更合适的名词。

× Sometimes when I photo a picture, I shared it with my friends or family members.

✓ Sometimes when I take a picture, I share it with my friends or family members.

动词用法错误与时态不一致。'photo' 不是动词用法的常见形式，应该用 'take a picture'。句中描述习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时（share），而不是一般过去时（shared）。建议用固定搭配 'take a picture' 并保持现在时态一致。

× Taking photos is one of my hobbies.

✓ Taking photos is one of my hobbies.

此句无错误，已符合语法。保留原句。

× When I feel in no spirit, I often prefer views in rural areas because when I am in rural areas it helps me to relax and unwind.

✓ When I feel low in spirit, I often prefer views in rural areas because being in the countryside helps me relax and unwind.

表达不自然且词序问题。'feel in no spirit' 不符合英语习惯，应改为 'feel low in spirit' 或 'feel down'。重复使用 'when I am in rural areas' 冗长，改为省略主语的非谓语结构 'being in the countryside' 更自然。'helps me relax' 中不需要 to。建议使用常见表达 'feel down' 或 'feel low' 并简化句子。

× It often takes things off my mind.

✓ It often takes things off my mind.

此句无明显语法错误，但表达有些口语化且含义模糊。可接受为口语回答，意思是“让我不再烦恼”。如果想更正式，可改为 'It often takes my mind off things.'（更自然的措辞）。

× Actually, I prefer both of them, but at the moment I personally much more prefer views in a foreign country because I want to explore this world and I've been to many foreign places.

✓ Actually, I prefer both, but at the moment I personally prefer views in foreign countries more because I want to explore the world and I've been to many foreign places.

代词与数的一致性问题和词序。'both of them' 在此指两个选项时可简化为 'both'。'much more prefer' 位置不当，改为 'prefer ... more' 或 'much prefer'。'this world' 用法不如 'the world' 自然。建议调整词序并使代词和可数名词形式一致。

× They are fantastic.

✓ They are fantastic.

此句语法正确，无需改动。保持原句。