Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct casual or ungrammatical phrases (e.g., "if I'm gonna trip" → "when I travel"). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "landmarks", "scenery").

例: Yes, I do. When I travel, I enjoy photographing landmarks and natural scenery. For example, I often take pictures of iconic buildings in cities and coastal or mountain views when I'm outdoors.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix grammar ("rural area" → "rural areas") and avoid redundant phrases. Add one concrete example to strengthen your point.

例: I prefer rural areas because the air is fresher and the landscapes are more scenic. For instance, I enjoy photographing mountains and forests during hikes, which you cannot easily do in a city full of skyscrapers.

提案: Make your response grammatically correct and more concise. Begin with a direct answer (e.g., "I prefer other countries") and give specific reasons and an example. Avoid repetition and filler words like "umm". Correct errors ("doesn't have" and word order).

例: I usually prefer views in other countries because I like tropical beaches, which my country lacks. For example, I often choose beach destinations abroad where I can photograph clear water and palm-lined shores.

× Yes, but that really depends if I'm gonna trip.

✓ Yes, but that really depends on whether I'm going on a trip.

The phrase 'depends if' is informal and not standard; use 'depends on whether' for clarity (preposition issue: ID 11 and sentence structure: ID 26). 'gonna' is colloquial; use the correct present continuous form 'going on' to match the planned future meaning (present tense/modal issue: ID 6 and 8). Suggestion: replace 'depends if' with 'depends on whether' and 'gonna' with 'going on'.

× I would definitely love to take pictures of different views like some local landmark or iconic buildings or some nature scenery like the sea or mountain.

✓ I would definitely love to take pictures of different views, such as local landmarks, iconic buildings, or natural scenery like the sea or mountains.

Mix of singular/plural and word choice errors: use plural 'landmarks' and 'mountains' when speaking generally (singular and plural issue: ID 1 and subject-verb agreement: ID 27). 'Nature scenery' is unidiomatic; use 'natural scenery'. Also add commas to separate items (sentence structure: ID 26). Maintain present conditional tense 'would love' is fine (ID 6).

× I do prefer rural area because if you are in the urban area you can also take some photos or enjoy high buildings or skyscrapers.

✓ I do prefer the countryside because if you are in an urban area you can also take photos or enjoy tall buildings or skyscrapers.

'Rural area' should be 'the countryside' or 'rural areas' to be natural; article use and noun number need correction (article errors: ID 22 and singular/plural: ID 1). 'the urban area' is too specific; use 'an urban area'. 'High buildings' is odd; use 'tall buildings'.

× But when you are in rural areas, the air quality is better and you can see some nature scenery such as the mountain or forest.

✓ But when you are in rural areas, the air quality is better and you can see natural scenery such as mountains or forests.

'Nature scenery' should be 'natural scenery' (word choice/adjective use: ID 13). 'the mountain or forest' implies specific ones; use plural 'mountains or forests' for general statements (singular/plural and article errors: ID 1 and ID 22).

× Well to be honest when every time I'm go on a trip I would choose a tropical country or near the beach.

✓ Well, to be honest, whenever I go on a trip I would choose a tropical country or a destination near the beach.

Word order and tense errors: 'when every time I'm go on a trip' is ungrammatical; use 'whenever I go on a trip' (sentence structure: ID 26). 'I'm go' mixes forms; use simple present 'I go' for habitual actions (present tense: ID 6). Add article 'a' before 'destination' or 'tropical country'.

× So I guess in my country there doesn't have any beautiful scenery of the beach in my country.

✓ So I guess there isn't any beautiful beach scenery in my country.

Incorrect existential construction: use 'there isn't' rather than 'there doesn't have' (there be issue: ID 3). 'scenery of the beach' is awkward; use 'beach scenery'. Remove the repeated phrase 'in my country'. Also use singular 'isn't any' with uncountable 'scenery' (article/number issues: ID 22 and ID 1).

× So I'd definitely go on a trip Umm in other countries.

✓ So I'd definitely go on a trip to another country.

Sentence is disfluent and awkwardly phrased; replace 'Umm in other countries' with 'to another country' for correct preposition and singular reference (sentence structure: ID 26 and preposition use: ID 11). 'I'd definitely go on a trip to another country' is concise and natural.