Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la clarté et la précision : utilisez une phrase thème directe, corrigez les fautes (par ex. "historic monuments"), évitez les répétitions et réduisez les hésitations. Donnez un ou deux détails concrets (quel type de monuments, quel appareil ou but). Utilisez des mots de liaison simples pour organiser l'idée (par ex. "because", "so").

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing historic monuments and striking landscapes because they capture unique moments. For example, I often photograph old cathedrals and city viewpoints to remember trips, and I usually use my phone or a small DSLR to get clear shots.

提案: Rendez la réponse plus concise et grammatiquement correcte : commencez par une phrase claire ("I prefer both"), puis expliquez brièvement avec une raison pour chaque choix. Évitez les répétitions et corrigez la grammaire (accords, articles). Utilisez un mot de liaison pour opposer les idées ("however", "on the other hand").

例: I prefer both. Rural areas appeal to me because of the greenery and calm, which helps me relax, while urban views attract me for their architecture and lively streets. However, I usually choose rural places to unwind on weekends.

提案: Soyez plus naturel et précis : répondez directement ("I like both"), puis donnez reasons and a specific example (mention a region or beach). Évitez hésitations et erreurs ("I live in France", not "French France"). Limitez-vous à 2–3 courtes phrases bien liées.

例: I like both, but I often prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and easy to visit. For instance, I live in France and in summer I enjoy going to the Mediterranean coast for its beautiful beaches and clear water.

× I like taking pictures, especially when I say something special like the standing view or some greater monument, historic historical monuments.

✓ I like taking pictures, especially when I see something special like a striking view or a great historic monument.

The student used incorrect verbs and redundant adjectives. 'Say something special' is wrong; use 'see something special' (verb choice error). 'Standing view' is unnatural; 'striking view' or 'scenic view' is appropriate. 'Greater monument' is incorrect adjective choice; 'great historic monument' or 'important historic monument' is correct. Also 'historic historical monuments' is redundant; use one adjective. Suggestion: choose verbs that match perception (see, notice) and avoid redundant adjectives. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I want to take pictures for memorizing this kind of special events so that they can see them again.

✓ I want to take pictures to remember these special moments so I can see them again.

Use of 'for memorizing' is unnatural; English prefers the infinitive 'to remember'. 'This kind of special events' has number and demonstrative issues; use 'these special moments' (plural agreement and more natural collocation). 'So that they can see them again' changes meaning and pronouns; likely the student means 'so I can see them again'. Suggestion: use 'to' + verb for purpose and match pronouns to the speaker. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I'd like to say both of them rural areas has more greenery which can help me out from the hardening battering city lifestyle.

✓ I'd like both of them; rural areas have more greenery, which helps me get away from the harsh city lifestyle.

Sentence mixes ideas and has subject-verb agreement issue: 'rural areas has' should be 'rural areas have' (plural subject). 'Say both of them' is awkward; use 'I like both'. 'Help me out from' is unidiomatic; use 'help me get away from' or 'help me escape'. 'Hardening battering city lifestyle' uses incorrect adjectives; 'harsh city lifestyle' is natural. Suggestion: split into clearer clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement and choose idiomatic verbs and adjectives. Grammar problem type ID:26

× However, I sometimes I like the the city styles with the the.

✓ However, sometimes I like the city style as well.

The sentence contains repeated words ('I sometimes I', 'the the') and an unfinished phrase ('with the the'). Remove repetitions and complete the thought. Use 'city style' or 'urban scenery' rather than 'city styles'. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicate words and ensure each sentence is complete. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Well, I say both of them and the domestic views are familiar to me and in my country as I live in.

✓ Well, I would say both; domestic views are familiar to me because I live in my country.

'I say both of them' is awkward; 'I would say both' is more natural. 'Domestic views are familiar to me and in my country as I live in' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'because I live in my country' to explain familiarity. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetitions and use clear causal connectors like 'because'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I live in French France and uh, in the scenery is great.

✓ I live in France, and the scenery is great.

'French France' is redundant; the country name 'France' suffices. 'In the scenery is great' is ungrammatical — remove the extraneous 'in'. Use a comma and conjunction to connect ideas. Suggestion: avoid repeating proper nouns and ensure proper article and preposition usage. Grammar problem type ID:22

× In summer I can go to the seaside for the beach view.

✓ In summer I can go to the seaside to enjoy the beach view.

'Go to the seaside for the beach view' is slightly awkward. Use 'go to the seaside to enjoy the beach view' or simply 'go to the beach' for idiomatic English. Also 'In summer' is fine but 'During the summer' can also be used. Suggestion: use 'to' + verb to express purpose and prefer natural collocations like 'go to the beach' or 'enjoy the beach.' Grammar problem type ID:11