Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจนของประโยค ให้ตอบโดยตรงแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมอย่างเหมาะสม และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำ ตัวอย่างเช่น ใส่ tense ให้ถูกต้อง ใช้คำที่ถูกต้องแบบ countable/uncountable และปรับลำดับคำให้เป็นธรรมชาติ

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. I usually take photos when I travel, especially landscapes and cityscapes, and I like sharing my best shots with friends on social media.

提案: แก้คำศัพท์ผิดและโครงสร้างประโยค ใช้คำที่เหมาะสมกับบริบท (เช่น 'rural' not 'neural') อธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยค ให้ตัวอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น บรรยายท้องฟ้า แสง หรือมุมที่ชอบถ่าย

例: I prefer rural areas such as beaches and mountains because they are more relaxing and the air is fresher. For example, I enjoy photographing sunsets and wide-open landscapes where I can capture natural light and colors.

提案: ทำประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเรียบง่าย ให้เหตุผลเจาะจงว่าทำไมถึงชอบวิวในประเทศของตัวเอง และกล่าวถึงความสนใจในการเห็นวิวต่างประเทศเป็นข้อเสริม ใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง (familiar, beauty, southern Thailand) และหลีกเลี่ยงเสียงรบกวนแบบ 'uh'

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and I particularly enjoy the natural beauty of southern Thailand. However, I also like visiting other countries to discover new places and different landscapes.

× Yes, I really like taking pictures because it's help me remember special moments and I often take photo when I travel and I enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with my friends.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures because they help me remember special moments. I often take photos when I travel, and I enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with my friends.

There are several issues: subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference (use 'they' to refer to 'pictures') which relate to subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun use; plural form 'photo' should be 'photos'; the contraction 'it's help' is incorrect because 'help' needs no 's' with plural subject 'they' and 'it' is wrong pronoun. Also run-on sentence: break into two sentences and add commas to improve clarity. Suggestion: ensure the subject and verb agree, use correct plural nouns, and separate independent clauses with punctuation.

× I prefer neural area like beach or mountains. In my opinion I think no law area are more relaxing and the air is fittest. And I love takings photos of sunset and neutral.

✓ I prefer natural areas like beaches or mountains. In my opinion, natural areas are more relaxing and the air is fresher. I also love taking photos of sunsets and nature.

Errors include wrong word choice: 'neural' should be 'natural'; 'area' should be plural 'areas' when generalizing; 'beach' should be plural 'beaches' to match 'areas'; 'no law area' is meaningless — likely intended 'natural area' or 'nature'; 'are more relaxing' requires plural subject 'areas' (subject-verb agreement); 'the air is fittest' is incorrect adjective — use 'fresher' or 'fittest' only in comparative/superlative contexts properly; 'takings' should be 'taking' (verb + -ing form). 'sunset' -> plural 'sunsets' when speaking generally; 'neutral' wrong word, likely 'nature'. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary (natural, nature), match plurals, use comparative adjective 'fresher', and use correct gerund 'taking'.

× I prefer view in my own countries because there are few familiar and I really enjoy the beast in southern Thailand is help me habit and however, I also, uh, like with this other countries to see new place and, uh, different views.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and I really enjoy the beaches in southern Thailand because they help me relax. However, I also like visiting other countries to see new places and different views.

Multiple issues: 'view' should be plural 'views'; 'my own countries' should be 'my own country' (singular) or 'other countries' depending on meaning — here 'own country' fits; 'there are few familiar' is ungrammatical — intended 'they are familiar'; 'beast' is wrong word, should be 'beaches'; 'is help me habit' is incorrect structure — likely 'because they help me relax' or 'because they are part of my habits'; 'like with this other countries' should be 'like visiting other countries'; 'new place' should be plural 'new places'. Suggestions: use correct singular/plural forms, choose correct nouns (beaches), use proper clause connectors ('because'), and use verbs like 'help me relax' for clarity.