Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and make your response more concise and varied. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words (uh, yeah).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, when I visit a beach I take both photos and short videos so I can remember the colours and atmosphere later.

提案: Eliminate hesitations and organize your answer: give a direct preference, then two clear supporting reasons linked by connectors. Be specific (mention types of rural scenes) and avoid vague comparisons like 'quite better.'

例: I generally prefer rural views because they offer extensive greenery and peaceful landscapes. For instance, I enjoy hilltop vistas and rice fields, which feel more relaxing than crowded city streets.

提案: Make your answer more specific and confident. State your preference clearly, give a concrete reason, and add an example or comparison. Replace vague phrases like 'I don't know' with a clearer explanation.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I have personal experiences of them and they feel familiar. For example, visiting a nearby mountain gave me vivid memories of the smell and sounds, which photos of foreign places cannot reproduce.

× I like to take pictures of different views and I can save it as a memory.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views and I can save them as memories.

Use the gerund 'taking' after 'like' to express a general preference; 'pictures' is plural so the pronoun should be 'them' and 'memories' should be plural to match 'pictures'. Suggestion: say 'I like taking pictures' and keep noun number consistent.'

× And yeah, I like to click photos and also take videos of scenic views and natural beauty.

✓ And yeah, I like clicking photos and also taking videos of scenic views and natural beauty.

After 'like' the gerund form (clicking, taking) is more natural for habitual actions. Use parallel gerunds for 'clicking photos and taking videos'. Suggestion: use 'I like clicking photos' or 'I like to click photos' consistently.

× Uh, generally I prefer views in the rural areas because most of the land is covered by nature.

✓ Uh, generally I prefer views in rural areas because most of the land is covered by nature.

When speaking about areas in general, do not use the definite article 'the' with 'rural areas'. Remove 'the' to indicate a general category. Suggestion: say 'in rural areas' for general preference.'

× You can, uh, spot greenery and also, uh, the views we get from the nature, it is difficult to find the same in urban areas, so views from the rural areas are quite better and.

✓ You can spot greenery, and the views we get from nature are hard to find in urban areas, so views in rural areas are much better.

Original sentence is run-on and awkwardly structured. Remove filler and redundant articles: 'from the nature' should be 'from nature'. Use 'are hard to find' instead of 'it is difficult to find the same'. 'Quite better' is unidiomatic; use 'much better'. Also remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: break into two clear clauses and use parallel structure.'

× I prefer views in my own country because I have seen it live.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I have seen them live.

'Views' is plural so refer to them with 'them' rather than 'it'. Also 'seen live' is informal but acceptable; keep 'them' to match plurality. Suggestion: say 'I have seen them in person' for clearer English.'

× I don't know about the other countries.

✓ I don't know about other countries.

When speaking generally, omit the definite article 'the' before 'other countries'. 'About other countries' is the normal expression. Suggestion: say 'I don't know about other countries'.

× Yes, we see the pictures about the other countries views but when you actually feel it, it's quite different.

✓ Yes, we see pictures of other countries' views, but when you actually experience them, it's quite different.

Use 'pictures of' not 'pictures about'. 'Other countries views' needs possessive: 'other countries' views'. 'Feel it' is vague; 'experience them' matches plural 'views'. Also add a comma before 'but' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'experience' for first-hand encounter and match plural references.'

× So I'll I'll love the views in my own country.

✓ So I'll love the views in my own country.

This sentence has a repetition 'I'll I'll'; remove the duplicate. 'I'll love' is acceptable to express future preference. Suggestion: say 'So I'll love the views in my own country' or more naturally 'So I love the views in my own country' if indicating present preference.'}]} PMID:0} } PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0} PMID:0}