Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.") then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid repetition such as "too much like" and incorrect phrases like "pick for a different side."

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I am passionate about photography. For example, I like capturing city skylines at sunset and quiet countryside scenes in the morning. This variety helps me develop my style and improve my composition.

提案: Your response does not directly answer the question and contains many irrelevant details and grammar errors. Begin with a direct answer (e.g., "I prefer rural/urban views."). Then add one clear reason and one specific example, using linking words like "because" or "for instance." Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid unrelated personal information (age, job unless relevant).

例: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and offer natural subjects to photograph. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and small villages where the light and atmosphere change throughout the day.

提案: The answer is unclear, includes irrelevant or incorrect phrases, and has grammar mistakes. Answer directly (e.g., "I prefer views in other countries" or "in my country"), give a clear reason with linking words ("because", "however"), and provide a specific example. Avoid vague phrases like "very long time" or inappropriate expressions such as "I love you too much."

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer new landscapes and quieter environments. For example, when I visited a coastal town abroad, I was able to photograph calm beaches and colorful market scenes that were very different from the noisy streets at home.

× Yes, I too much like to pick for a different side because I'm very passionate about pictures and style too much like.

✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of different scenes because I'm very passionate about photography and style.

Problems: incorrect adverb placement ('too much like' should be 'really like' or 'like ... a lot'), wrong verb phrase ('pick for a different side' is ungrammatical; use 'taking photos of different scenes'), incorrect noun choice ('pictures' -> 'photography' as a field), and awkward repetition. Suggestion: place adverbs before main verb or after it correctly (I really like X / I like X a lot), use natural collocations (take photos, scenes, photography). This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× Yes, I am a urban company beautician and I'm a freelancer.

✓ Yes, I am an urban company beautician and also a freelancer.

Problems: incorrect article before vowel-starting adjective ('a urban' should be 'an urban'), missing connector for clarity and parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'an' before words starting with a vowel sound and use 'also' or 'and also' to link two roles.

× Then customer send me address and I reach out their home.

✓ Then customers send me their address and I go to their home.

Problems: subject-verb agreement ('customer send' -> 'customers send' or 'a customer sends'), missing possessive pronoun ('address' needs 'their' or 'the'), and unnatural phrasing ('reach out their home' -> 'go to their home'). Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use correct possessive pronouns and natural verb phrases (go to, visit, travel to).

× Uh, I have uh, 18 years old.

✓ Uh, I am 18 years old.

Problems: incorrect verb for age ('have 18 years old' is incorrect in English; use 'be' for age). Suggestion: use 'I am [age] years old' or 'I am 18.'

× I have to longer driving experience in my career, so I know areas and rule.

✓ I have many years of driving experience in my career, so I know the areas and the routes.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'have to longer' (likely meant 'have long' or 'have a lot of'), missing plural/quantifier for years, 'rule' is wrong word for roads/routes. Suggestion: use 'many years of driving experience' or 'a lot of driving experience' and use 'areas' with definite article if specific ('the areas') and correct noun 'routes' or 'roads'.

× Thank.

✓ Thank you.

Problems: fragmentary and unnatural closing; 'Thank' alone is not correct. Suggestion: use 'Thank you' or 'Thanks.'

× My country have a very long time, I'm living here and uh lots of noisy and other country are very peaceful and peoples are very gentle.

✓ I have lived in my country for a long time; it is noisy in many places, while other countries are very peaceful and the people are very polite.

Problems: subject-verb agreement ('My country have' -> 'My country has' or better 'I have lived in my country'), incorrect expression for duration ('a very long time' needs 'for' and a correct subject), pluralization and word choice ('peoples' -> 'people', 'noisy' needs noun 'places' or 'areas'), and punctuation/run-on sentence. Suggestion: use present perfect 'I have lived here for a long time' to indicate duration, use 'places are noisy' and 'people are polite/gentle' and separate clauses with semicolon or conjunction for clarity.

× I love you too much.

✓ I like it very much.

Problems: inappropriate direct object 'you' (speaking about a country or its qualities), and awkward adverb placement 'too much' which can imply excess. Suggestion: use 'I like it very much' or 'I love it' when referring to a place; avoid 'too much' in formal responses.