Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは明確ですが、言い換えや理由の述べ方が不自然で、フィラー（uh, umm）が多いです。まず冒頭で簡潔に意見を述べ、その後で理由を2文以内で具体的に述べてください。例えば「I prefer experiencing views by listening to music because…」のように、目的語の関係や語順を正しく整え、不要な繰り返しを避けましょう。また語彙を少し広げて “hobby” の代わりに “interest” や “pastime” などを使うと自然です。発話の流暢さを上げるため、練習時はフィラーを意識的に減らし、短いポーズを取る練習をしてください。

例: No, I don’t usually take photos of views. I prefer to enjoy the scenery while listening to music because it helps me relax and focus on the atmosphere rather than on taking pictures.

提案: 回答は不明瞭な語句（'Lula Elias' 等）と文法の誤りがあり、語彙も曖昧です。まずは場所の名前を正確に言い、単数・複数の扱いや形容詞の使い方（'beautiful nature' ではなく 'beautiful natural scenery' など）を直しましょう。意見→理由→具体例の順で構成し、接続詞（because, so, and）を使って論理的につなげてください。例えば「I prefer rural areas because the scenery is peaceful and I can relax and do outdoor activities such as hiking or cycling.」のように具体的な活動を挙げると良いです。発話の際は短い、明確な文を心がけてフィラーを減らしてください。

例: I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery is peaceful and beautiful. For example, I can relax there and enjoy outdoor activities like hiking or cycling, which helps me unwind from city life.

提案: この回答は混乱しており、場所や比較の表現が不明確です。はじめに「It depends」を使うのは良いですが、その後で具体的な条件を明確に説明する必要があります。比較をする場合は正しい比較構文（'I prefer X to Y' や 'I like X more than Y'）を使い、地名は正確に発音・表現してください。例えば「It depends on the region: I prefer views in Hokkaido to foreign ones because… but in Tokyo I prefer foreign views because…」のように2つの短い文で対比を示すと分かりやすくなります。より自然な語彙（prefer, enjoy, more/less than）と具体例（snowy landscapes, modern architecture）を入れてください。

例: It depends on the region. For example, I prefer views in Hokkaido to those abroad because I love the snowy landscapes and wide open spaces. However, when I’m in Tokyo I often prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different styles of architecture and cityscapes.

× No, I don't uh 'cause I like listening music, umm, with seeing different views, so umm taking pictures are not my hobby.

✓ No, I don't, because I like listening to music while seeing different views, so taking pictures is not my hobby.

The student omitted the preposition 'to' after 'listening' (listening to music) and used 'with seeing' instead of the correct conjunction 'while' to show simultaneous actions. 'Taking pictures' is treated as a singular activity, so the singular verb 'is' is required instead of 'are'. Suggestions: use 'listening to' for music, use 'while' to link simultaneous actions, and match verb number with the gerund subject (taking pictures is).

× I like Lula Elias because uh, there are so beautiful natures and umm, I, I can relax, I can be a relax and umm, I can enjoy some activities.

✓ I like Lula Elias because there is such beautiful nature, and I can relax and enjoy some activities.

'Natures' is uncountable in this sense; use 'nature'. 'So beautiful natures' is incorrect; use 'such beautiful nature' or 'such beautiful natural surroundings'. 'There are' with uncountable noun is wrong; use 'there is'. 'I can be a relax' is ungrammatical; use 'I can relax' (verb). Also combine similar verbs for clarity. Suggestions: use uncountable noun 'nature' or phrase 'natural scenery', use 'there is' for uncountable nouns, and use the verb 'relax' not the adjective 'relax'.

× That depends on alias UMM in Hokkaido I like my country Azazan than other countries, but UMM in Tokyo I like other countries more than my countries.

✓ That depends. In Hokkaido, I prefer my country, Azazan, to other countries, but in Tokyo I prefer other countries to my country.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun and comparative structure. Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'A than B'. 'My country' should be singular and consistent. Insert prepositions 'in Hokkaido' and 'in Tokyo' for clarity and separate clauses properly. Suggestions: use 'prefer A to B' for comparisons, keep 'my country' singular, and punctuate or separate clauses to avoid run-on sentences.