Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce errors and improve grammar, use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Keep answers natural and concise (max 4-5 sentences). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and correct verb forms (e.g., "they remind me of many memories").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they preserve my memories. For example, photos from a beach trip remind me of the weather and the people I was with, so I often look back at them to feel happy. I try to take pictures when the light is good to capture the scene well.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unclear words (e.g., "Kyle") and use linking words like "because", "also", "for example". Limit to 3–4 sentences and give concrete sensory details (colors, sounds, smells).

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are greener and quieter than cities. For example, I enjoy seeing wide fields and hearing birdsong, which helps me relax. Also, the clean air and open sky make outdoor walks more refreshing.

提案: Start with a direct answer and support it with a specific comparison and reason. Correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer views in other countries because I have been to Australia; the scenery was beautiful and the cooler weather suited me"). Use linking words like "because", "for example", "so" to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and climates. For example, when I visited Australia I loved the dramatic coastlines and cooler weather compared with Thailand, so those views felt more refreshing and memorable.

× I really like taking picture of different views because that is gonna be my memory for so long.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views because they will be my memories for a long time.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker refers to multiple images. 'That' is vague; use 'they' to refer to the pictures. 'Gonna' is informal and incorrect for written grammar; use 'will be'. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to multiple items. 'For so long' is nonstandard here; use 'for a long time'. Suggestions: use plural nouns for countable items and avoid informal contractions in formal speech.

× When I look back at those pictures I always happy and reminding me to a lot of memory in the past.

✓ When I look back at those pictures I am always happy and they remind me of many memories from the past.

The verb 'happy' needs the verb 'am' to form the present tense 'I am always happy' (present tense issue). 'Reminding me' is incorrect because the pictures are the subject that perform the action; use 'they remind me'. Use the preposition 'of' with 'remind'. 'A lot of memory' is uncountable/incorrect here; use 'many memories'. 'In the past' is better as 'from the past'. Suggestions: ensure sentences have correct present-tense auxiliary verbs and match subjects with appropriate verbs; choose correct prepositions and countable/uncountable forms.

× I prefer views in rural areas because rural area is more green, more blue is like Kyle, more natural thing that make me really enjoy and relax.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas are greener, bluer, and more natural, which makes me really enjoy myself and relax.

Mismatch between singular 'rural area' and plural 'rural areas' (singular and plural issue). Adjectives 'more green' and 'more blue' should be comparative 'greener' and 'bluer'. 'Is like Kyle' is unclear and likely incorrect; removed. 'More natural thing' should be 'more natural' or 'more natural scenery'. 'That make me' has subject-verb agreement error; use 'which makes me'. Add reflexive 'myself' after 'enjoy' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: keep number consistency, use comparative adjective forms, ensure subject-verb agreement, and avoid unclear phrases.

× I prefer views in other countries because I have been to Australia and there is really good natural and the weather is quite colder than Thailand so I pre prefer those weather.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have been to Australia, and there is really good nature, and the weather is colder than in Thailand, so I prefer that weather.

Several article and noun usage issues: 'the weather is quite colder' is incorrect; use 'colder' with a comparison and include 'in' before 'Thailand' (preposition) and optionally 'than in Thailand'. 'Really good natural' is ungrammatical; use 'really good nature' or 'beautiful natural scenery'. 'Pre prefer' is a typo; use 'prefer'. 'Those weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable; use 'that weather' or 'such weather'. Suggestions: correct article and noun forms, fix typos, use appropriate comparative structure and prepositions, and treat 'weather' as uncountable.