Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: answer directly, avoid hesitations and errors, and use clearer vocabulary. Keep to 2–3 sentences: state you enjoy photography, give a brief reason, and one example. Use correct collocations (e.g. "everyday trips," "freeze moments," "best shot").

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of beautiful scenery to freeze special moments, whether I'm traveling or on everyday trips to the market. I usually post my best shots on social media so friends can see what I discovered.

提案: Improve clarity and correctness: give a direct topic sentence, then contrast with linking words (e.g. "however", "on the other hand"). Avoid long hesitations and incorrect words; use specific reasons for each preference. Keep under five sentences.

例: It depends on my mood. I like urban views at night because the lights and modern architecture feel exciting; however, I often prefer rural areas for their fresh air and natural beauty when I want to relax.

提案: Make your response more fluent and specific: start with a clear preference, give concise reasons and an example, and use correct vocabulary ("scenery," "discovering new places," "different cultures"). Avoid mixed or unclear phrases.

例: I prefer the scenery in my own country because it is very beautiful and familiar, but I also travel abroad occasionally to discover new places and experience different cultures.

× Absolutely yes. I love capturing beautiful scenery when I travel or even their simple trip to the market because I love freezing the special moments.

✓ Absolutely. I love capturing beautiful scenery when I travel or even a simple trip to the market because I love freezing special moments.

The student used 'their' incorrectly to refer to their own trip; 'their' is a third-person plural possessive pronoun and doesn't match the speaker. Also 'Absolutely yes' is awkward; 'Absolutely' or 'Yes' is natural. 'The special moments' -> 'special moments' is more natural. Suggestion: use first-person or neutral determiners (a, my) when talking about your own experiences.

× And I also, uh, post the best sauce, the best shot on my social media and share them with friends so they can see what I found.

✓ I also post my best shots on social media and share them with friends so they can see what I found.

The phrase 'best sauce' is likely a mispronunciation or wrong word; 'best shot(s)' is intended. 'The best shot on my social media' misuses 'the' and singular; 'my best shots on social media' is correct. 'Share them' matches plural 'shots'. Suggestion: choose correct noun ('shot') and use possessive 'my' and plural when appropriate.

× It depends on my mood. Sometimes I love the cities that lie at night, especially with all the lights and modern architecture because feel so umm, exciting.

✓ It depends on my mood. Sometimes I love cities at night, especially with all the lights and modern architecture because they feel so exciting.

'The cities that lie at night' is awkward and wordy; 'cities at night' is natural. Missing subject 'they' before 'feel' causes a verbing error; include 'they' to agree with plural subject. Suggestion: ensure sentences include explicit subjects for verbs and simplify phrasing.

× But all the time I refer uh teacher size use for the fresh air and the natural beauty is heavily so sorry.

✓ But most of the time I prefer the countryside because of the fresh air and natural beauty.

The original sentence contains garbled words ('refer uh teacher size use', 'is heavily so sorry') that do not form grammatical phrases. Likely intended meaning is a preference for rural areas/countryside. 'Prefer the countryside' is idiomatic; 'because of the fresh air and natural beauty' explains reason. Suggestion: replace unclear fragments with clear expressions like 'most of the time I prefer the countryside'.

× To be honest, I refer the scenery in my own country because it has been really beautiful.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the scenery in my own country because it is really beautiful.

'Refer' is incorrect verb; use 'prefer' to express preference. 'Has been really beautiful' suggests continuous past; simple present 'is really beautiful' is more natural when stating a general fact. Suggestion: use 'prefer' for choices and present tense for general truths.

× Land houses then I still enjoy discovery, but however I also like traveling apart occasionally to see different sizes and experience new environments and culture.

✓ Although I still enjoy exploring local towns and landscapes, I also like traveling abroad occasionally to see different places and experience new environments and cultures.

This sentence has multiple errors: 'Land houses' is unclear, 'enjoy discovery' is ungrammatical, 'but however' is redundant, 'traveling apart' should be 'traveling abroad', 'different sizes' likely means 'different places', and 'culture' should be plural 'cultures' when general. The corrected version clarifies meaning and fixes word choice and structure. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'exploring', correct adverb 'abroad', avoid redundant conjunctions, and use plural nouns when speaking generally.