Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容清晰但表达存在语法和词汇错误，且有口语填充词（如“uh”）和不必要的赘述。建议：1) 开头用一句明确的主题句直接回答问题（例如：Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.）。2) 用一到两句具体细节支持（时间、地点、原因），避免重复和无意义填充词。3) 纠正词汇和语法错误（如“sheep”应为“shape”，去掉多余的“P”）。4) 控制句子数量，不超过5句，使用连接词如“because”或“for example”保持连贯。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like nature because of its rich colors and pleasing compositions. For example, about two years ago I visited Nanjing to photograph the cherry blossoms, whose delicate shape and pale pink color I found particularly beautiful.

提案: 回答含混且有较多语法错误和非自然表达（如“I'm a natural person”、“nature prospects”、“stressless”）。建议：1) 直接给出偏好句（I prefer rural areas.）。2) 用一到两句具体理由并用连接词（because, which, therefore）。3) 用自然、地道的词汇替换错误词（e.g. 'nature lover', 'natural landscapes', 'less stressed'）。4) 删除无关结尾，保持简洁。

例: I prefer rural areas because I am a nature lover and find natural landscapes more relaxing. For example, spending time in the countryside helps me feel less stressed and is a great way to unwind after a busy week.

提案: 回答信息完整但组织松散，有语法错误和口语化表达（如“who's never go abroad”），且结尾不够正式或相关（“I will Google it”）。建议：1) 开始用一句明确回应（I haven't traveled abroad, so...）。2) 解释原因并表达态度（cost, curiosity about foreign views）。3) 用正确语法和连接词使句子连贯，避免不相关的结尾。

例: I haven't travelled abroad yet because I'm a student and international trips are expensive. I enjoy views in my own country, but I would love to see landscapes in other countries someday because it would broaden my perspective.

× Examples uh, about two years ago in Nanjing to photograph the cherry blossoms, which I think the most beautiful flowers because of their delicate sheep and P pale pink color.

✓ For example, about two years ago in Nanjing I photographed the cherry blossoms, which I think are the most beautiful flowers because of their delicate shape and pale pink color.

原句中动词和非谓语形式使用混乱（例如 “to photograph” 放在时间状语处不合适），并且缺少系动词“are”。另外有拼写错误：'sheep' 应为 'shape'，'P pale' 多余字母。建议将不定式改为过去式 'photographed'，并补上 'are' 来连接从句，同时修正拼写。改进建议：注意动词时态与句子时间一致，检查拼写并使用正确的系动词。

× It's hard to say, but if have to choose one, I like to choose the rural areas.

✓ It's hard to say, but if I have to choose one, I would choose rural areas.

原句缺少主语 'I' 在条件从句 'if I have to choose one' 中，且搭配更自然的是 'choose rural areas' 或 'choose the countryside'，不一定要加定冠词。建议补上主语并调整动词形式以与语境更匹配（虚拟或委婉表达用 'would choose'）。

× Actually I'm a natural person. I like the nature prospects because I think they are really good for people.

✓ Actually I'm a nature person. I like natural scenery because I think it is really good for people.

原句中 'natural person' 用法不自然，应为 'nature lover' 或 'a person who likes nature'；'the nature prospects' 用法错误，应该用 'natural scenery' 或 'nature'；代词指代也混乱，需统一。建议改用常见搭配如 'I like natural scenery' 并注意代词与名词单复数一致。

× It can make people more healthy and more stressless.

✓ It can make people healthier and less stressed.

形容词/副词使用不当：'more healthy' 常用比较级 'healthier'；'stressless' 为不常用词，应该用 'less stressed' 或 'less stressed out' 来表达减轻压力。建议学习常见形容词比较级和固定搭配。

× I think is the best way for people to unwind in such a a stressful society.

✓ I think it is the best way for people to unwind in such a stressful society.

句子缺少主语 'it'，并有重复的冠词 'a a'。需要补充主语并删除多余词。建议写句子时检查主谓是否完整并去除重复单词。

× Is that about it?

✓ Is that about it?

句子本身语法正确，无需修改。此处仅确认口语常用表达可接受。

× Actually I'm a person who's never go abroad because I'm just a student.

✓ Actually I'm a person who has never gone abroad because I'm just a student.

原句中 'who's never go' 时态和形式错误：关系从句中应使用现在完成时 'has never gone' 来表示至今未曾做过的动作，并且动词形式需为过去分词 'gone'。建议使用现在完成时描述从过去到现在的经历。

× It's too expensive for me to go abroad for traveling and I like my own country but I like to experience the other countries views.

✓ It's too expensive for me to travel abroad, and I like my own country, but I would like to experience the views of other countries.

原句有主谓搭配和词序问题：'go abroad for traveling' 不自然，通常说 'travel abroad'；'the other countries views' 缺少所有格或介词，应为 'the views of other countries'。建议使用自然搭配并注意名词的所有格表达。

× So it's hard to say for me just now but I will Google it after this exam.

✓ So it's hard to say for me right now, but I will google it after this exam.

句子整体正确，但 'just now' 用法不当，应改为 'right now' 表示当前；此外 'Google' 作动词时通常小写 'google'（口语书写随情境可大写）。建议注意时间副词的准确使用和品牌名作动词的大小写习惯。