Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and coherent by starting with a clear topic sentence, avoiding small grammar errors, and using linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what “views” and “wheels” mean, and limit length to around 2–4 sentences. For example, correct grammar ("a site" → "a scene" or "a subject"), use linking words like "also" or "for example," and give one concrete detail about what you enjoy photographing.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different scenes, especially cityscapes and architectural details. For example, I often take pictures of buildings and also close-ups of wheel rims from different angles to create interesting perspectives.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence and avoid repetition. Improve grammar ("city view" → "city views", "civilization" is unnatural here — use "urban life" or "city atmosphere"), and add a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for instance" to connect ideas and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architecture of cities. For instance, I love watching skylines at sunset and exploring streets with old buildings and busy cafés.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct errors ("it's feel like home" → "they feel like home"), and avoid vague expressions ("it is undeniable"). Provide a clear reason and a brief example, using linking words like "because" and "for example." Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel like home and reflect my memories. For example, the city skylines and famous landmarks here are spectacular and remind me of my childhood.

× I love taking pictures of different views.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views.

No correction needed. The gerund 'taking' correctly follows 'love' to express a preference for an activity.

× I usually go out to take pictures with my friends.

✓ I usually go out to take pictures with my friends.

No correction needed. The infinitive 'to take' correctly follows 'go out' to indicate purpose; present participle is not required here.

× I sometimes take pictures of wheels from the top or sometimes from the side to give another perspective of site.

✓ I sometimes take pictures of wheels from the top or from the side to give another perspective of the site.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before 'site' because a specific place is implied. Also remove the repeated 'sometimes' for conciseness (optional). The preposition 'of' after 'perspective' is correct but needs 'the site' for grammatical completeness.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I like city view.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I like the city view.

'City view' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a general, known idea of views in cities. Alternatively, plural 'city views' could be used. The correction keeps the singular with the article to be grammatically correct.

× I like seeing many buildings and civilization in cities rather than rural areas.

✓ I like seeing many buildings and the civilization in cities rather than in rural areas.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'civilization' because it refers to a specific idea of urban civilization. Also add 'in' before 'rural areas' for parallel structure ('in cities' vs 'in rural areas'). This improves grammatical parallelism and clarity.

× I live in city so I get to see city view quite often and I love it.

✓ I live in the city, so I get to see the city view quite often, and I love it.

'City' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific city where the speaker lives. Commas added for clarity. 'The city view' likewise needs 'the'.

× I would prefer views in my country because it's feel like home and I grew up here and it is undeniable that cities will in my country is spectacular and is quite famous here.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it feels like home, I grew up here, and the cities in my country are spectacular and quite famous.

Multiple issues corrected while following permitted grammar types: change 'would prefer' to 'prefer' to match general preference, fix subject-verb agreement 'it feels' (singular subject 'it' with 'feels'), remove redundant 'will' and rearrange 'cities in my country are' to correct word order and subject-verb agreement. Use commas to separate clauses. The corrections adhere to tense and meaning: present simple for general preferences and facts.